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Daubs - Samir rippin, (1st audio)
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Yeah was gonna free then wrote some too, so it aint a freestyle like i said it would be. Gimme harsh feed, so i can elevate :thumbup: |
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Aight...Yo Its Good Beat...,Good Lyrics Voice is koo UK is koo lol the flow is aight you need work on it seem to be not confident get more confident on the mic,be like YO really emotional n shit lol but its good for ya first audio good job keep up!
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cheers mate....
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Not feeling the beat, if you wanna diss someone pick a more fast, hyped up beat you know. It allows you to put more anger in your voice, was a hard beat to spit on too because it was so slow. That's why it sounded in some places like you were just talking. Like UNF said, let us hear you cant stand this dude, let us feel the anger and shit ya know. Emotion needs to be there, definitely in a diss! And it's ya second audio hehe but it's aight though, you just made it hard on yaself with the beat actually...but keep on working ya know...
(Btw, i'm the last person to criticize on you because I'm only starting myself but anyway) |
Ayo lyrics decent, but emotion up that reallly show that you dont like this nigga....flow was off a lil, precence u gotta up and delivery, however you had decent shit for youre first...keep it up...
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thanks, and it was my first "proper" audio dq.
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hey i have that beat too...Lol...
You remind me when i was starting out.... You used the enough of the Fuck word. lol i can't quiet understand you.......Post the lyric son. cool accent though |
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werd, this was pretty dope for your first one
as dq said...u needa get a more hyped up verse.....get more lyrically heard couldnt quite understand the accent...but i listened to it 2 times so i got it....yea this is pretty good...hopefully more to come....1 |
so thats what you sound like...
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ummm yes? :cool:
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damn i never thaught ud sound like this man, UK voice are cool, flow is eumm dunno man, get a better mic, well not really, ur startin so ur gonna figure out how to fix quality and all so fuck the quality for now, lyrics are cool man pretty good, beat is alright too, overall keep dropin bro and keep reppin LL to the fullest
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cheers mate,
i need to fuck around with vocals |
Listenin...
Beat is coo...I can hear hiss and pops and shit in the beginning...voice is okay...Verse kicks in...I only have time to listen to the frist verse, but anyway...flow is decent, not choppy, just needs a little bit of work...quality is lacking, but yeah...lyrics are coo...but the biggest problem is you delivery and emotion. It sounds like your whispering into that shit. Don't whisper...yell haha. Word, keep it up man. |
ite,
appreciate it mate. |
lol been waitin for thsi for time....
ite beat is too slow... you need a hyped beat kinda for disses and put more emotion into it... flow was ite slipped a few times yuor punches eere decent its a known fact dat asains have small dicks rofl... get on msn soon as u get ome from skwl n we'll talk bout a collab gfodo track man keep it up |
safe mate,
ima jump on msn now. |
LMFAO yo kin folk i got this beat 2!
im listening CHEA yo mayne ya ACCENT dont match ya TEXT lMAO or ya features! lyriks koo,i could barely hear whatcha sayin but hey for first sounding good so far,chea lyriks is koo,hatred'z there,flow on point could have made it a lil more longer but hey koo,quality is good!shyt yo koo drop! Dope Drop just like dont spit as close inda mic feelme homie! RETURN DA FAVOR in my ( FromDaHood ) |
i love this beat...
i dun have a clue to anything you said except Umpa Loompa, Fuck, Murder, and Prick Your voice is very immature, meaning that your voice is light making you sound very young and the way you rap making you sound lighter than your voice is normally.. (guessin, from how it sounds)... The thing bout your voice tho, is it's unique.. you just have to find a way to make it sound serious no one's gonna believe what you say unless you 1) be confident 2) sound serious 3) give them something they don't expect you to say. That's the advantage of your voice being unique you have to work your way into all 3 of those.. -Unique Voices on the Site Include- You ILL-Noise Intermental Drama Queen CarsonJet I Daughter Hoz Artik Phrost R Rated Me ^^These voices stand out because of their tone.. So each have already or will hopefully to work with their voice. Just some examples so you get my point. I have one of the lightest voices in the world if you ever heard me in a yahoo chat you'd know, but when I spit I can make it sound harsh and keep it unique without takin the feminine side out my voice or adding bass to my voice wit any edittin programs... ya flow was eh, seems like you been freestylin for not so long, I really don't think beat compliments your voice one bit... You using so much energy in this, but it's not helpful, you tryna sound harsh wit your but now your clarity is fuckin up... And i kno it's not just your accent, because I understand quite a few UK heads on the site... but work at it and keep workin at it. I'm lookin forwards to seein you improve, 1 |
Thanks a lot for good feed,
il defo try that stuff in my next one... ...ima fuck around with the vocals too. |
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totally dis-agree... battle tracks done like that are EXTREMELY played, also using beats that have for example a really kiddy jokey vibe to them, allows for a more joking vibe on the track in your delivery and disses basically giving the vibe of "your a twat, but shits all jokes to me, ill just laugh whilst i clown you" where as what ur talking bout is like "your a fuckin cunt, you piss me off so fuckin much i wanna murder you" type shit... theres millions of ways u can approach disses e.t.c... you just need to broaden your horizons and open your mind to more creative ways of doing. i remember when eminem released stan, in the same week my mate jacked the beat, n used the exact same concept, except to diss somebody with it, but still keep the verses like eminem did them... anyways enough rambling, to the track beat is shit tbh but thats personal preference...flow is better than expected, you was bein hesitant at times, delivery is shit to be blunt, you need to keep practicing n build confidence to help u to spit the right emotion, make it more interesting n shit... keep at it.. lyrically, again nothing stood out for me here but again all comes with practice. |
Well it's a personal opinion, I prefer more hyped up beats when dissing someone...gets me more into the song...
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Thanks fgor the feedback, all appreciated ye.
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