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Blood On The Carpet and In The Closet
Blood on the carpet and in the closet This grief and aggression, leads to this lethal profession Insync with his weapon, cause'n many feeble discrections He who speaks the progression, shouldn't seek for expections Cuz when reading this message, he found defeat with projections Now he creeps no objections, and reaps the souls of rejections Those who fold to his methods, will always go, no execptions So!? he own'd the elections, he must atone for acceptance Yea he's pressence is bold, too bad he isn't known for his ethics Our choices infested, suppose to be more hero then epics Why voice our affections, to someone who thinks zero's respected In need of directions, Hell's where i could see the elected His greed is collected, thinks war is how the people's protected Im keep'n it seperate, now its feels as the people are targets Deep in the army, just visualize blood leaking from garments Relieve'n the charges, my opinion, spoken easy but harmless The reason's the market, he gets rich while we get demolished See we are the carpet, step'd on, im just keep'n it honest The systems the closet, in other words, the people in office Shatter'd dreams of the modest, i just kinda think its ironic How's there blood on the carpet and closet, when we have nothing in common? http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2492391 Lost in the music http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=210500 Stuck in Shallow Water |
ups fo feed..........i'll rtf.........on feed left behind
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Wow @ your mutli's... wow. You>omb :cool:
And yeah good drop. Shit flowed nice and the lines were quoteable. -respect- |
Congrats.. :thumbup:
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I enjoyed the read. I was really impressed with your vocab multies and internals. This really made it flow smooth. I thought it could have been improved though by using more words to rhyme off.. I thought the story telling was alright, abit abstract but i loved the ending - nice and abrupt makes you stop and think. Props.
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Thanx for the feed and thanx fo the nomination continue to feed if you will
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Up'n for more feed.................this is a good piece
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try drop some multi's like this homey
he wore bling grave this godly thing brave as the king gave Hercules twelve labors to perform but wasn't told of the hell and major storms await his journey |
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^^^nigga please multie mayn i was really feeling your flow i thought you lived up to your name on this one that shit was sick for real. emotion was there i can't really fault you on anything in this piece so keep it up. ~peace~ |
Imppressive multies, the whole thing flowed nicely and the story was fluid. I enjoyed the read, however.
I feel you could expand in emotion and description. Overall nice drop, it's nice to see some sencere OM's being dropped lately. Keep it up man. Peace. Hit up something in my sig, if you catch a moments time. ;) |
thanx for the feed my next couple will be betta
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look my clout stands but I'm out of plans// need to discuss ways and means so C.E.O.'S can thrust trays of green// my way, try maintain in reason but hell too much rain this season plus my brain commit treason// on microphones, problems arise daily leave me surprise and staly // with no answers and that throw cancers// in my game
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are you done? :huh:
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ups for feed..............
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ehh...............ups for feed
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i like the way this was put together, mos DEF, worth the read, nice multies, you got some skizzazzle, word up, i liked the topic too, the way you came to it at the end, nice job, keep writing
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shit was hott kidd, i really liked all them multies. it was a sight for sore eyes. liked the parcial story thing too. really good keep it up
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ups........don't kno why but ima drop some new OMs oh and People Don't Bite Then Post This On RB Like Im Not There Either.....You Kno WHo You Are...
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All Of Ya Shits Is Dope, You Know How To Put Words Together And Flow... To The Uneducated Your Vocab May Seem Complicated, But To Those Who Know What Your Talkin About The Words Or The Way Their Put Dont Really Make Sense. Like Every One Of Ya Verses Has A Message Behind It But With The Exception Of This Piece It Doesnt Really Get Captured Because Its Obvious Your Just Fishing For Syllabls To Put Together. You Know What Im Sayin? On Almost Every Line I'd Have To Ask 'what Did You Mean By That?'
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not natural multies cats giving you credit when you fell way short of the mark homey which shows they know very little about rap these multies are much more natuaral than yours
Bars shattered, cars battered and scars scattered on rough roads as Tough loads of drugs owned by thugs stopped by cops no jazz Now I’m broke cat wondering where my dope is at, cats in Alcatraz Have better luck as they clever duck the law. Good and bad build Diligent towers they are belligerent powers need a peace treaty ill Between the two, timberlands is how my foot laced rhyme put in place Like carpet on floors as the rap market restores my hope with grace This stuff like newspapers accuses folks and abuses with quotes the case Closed,. Like the state I pass regulation with mass devastation On the population, occupation is rapper in the game segregation Exists |
nice vocab..nice multis...quotable lines...one of the best i have seen on the site so far....like keep the drops comin
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For one homie, those are forced multies i don't really think about multies when i right i try to stay close with my syllable count......if you really like to see multies just let me kno im not named Mr. Multie for no reason..... No Hate Tho THanx for feed |
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