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GKillaz05 vs .Fatal.
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12 - 16 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting good luck :thumbup: Minimum posts to vote: 200 Check in by: 10-29-05 at 01:02 AM Must drop verse in 180 minutes after check in. |
.Fatal. has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-28-05 01:06 PM.
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GKillaz05 has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-28-05 01:20 PM.
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Your rhymes need surgery your purgery is not workin'...
Could give you 10 free shots punches still aint hurtin'... I'll spit first even though you'll try to copy my shit... Thats why when im done spittin' ima copywrite my spit... You could rap featurin Missy and still couldnt work it... Practice makes perfect Fatal come up short like a circuit... Kid head like a computer with a fatal error inside... Tried flowin' down a slide, and just ran off the side... Kids terrorfied to go outside, thats why he on the comp... Stompin' all over you, while you just reak like a swamp... Puttin'a red light on ya streak I hold it up like taffic... Ask Whats whack ya track is, man just stick to graphics... Smack this herb, thx for the goodluck but Im conceded... Pothead just proceeded to get the L like he needed it... Fatal still not dope... killin' ya breathe like scope... Scientist study'n ya rap cant see skill unda a microscope... 10mins, had no time.. goodluck |
Talk shyt, its a wrap cuz da six'll pop ya,
sit back n watch him 'choke' like the 'knickerboccers', u aint a killa 'poppa', i chill while u ack hard, put ya name on ma list, n put a grave in ma backyard, go n grab a gun, n tell da neighbors ya paths marked, u lack smarts , he's a faggot n a fuckin wimp, if g's such a killa, someone tell me why's he <a href="http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212688">duckin mims</a>?, read him a bed time story before u tuck him in, nigga i buck i win, n ya 'dream is through', every one of ma 'bars' is 'nuts' like a 'peanut chew', on a regular basis i'd shock u like a pikachu, but on dis ossasion i'll just let the nina scream at u, blahh, wutever |
uppin for some votes..........
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Voted For: GKillaz05
gkillaz- Your rhymes need surgery your purgery is not workin'... Could give you 10 free shots punches still aint hurtin'... decent punch...4/10 I'll spit first even though you'll try to copy my shit... Thats why when im done spittin' ima copywrite my spit... don't like this one, lines sound the same...2/10 You could rap featurin Missy and still couldnt work it... Practice makes perfect Fatal come up short like a circuit... good wordplay...5/10 Kid head like a computer with a fatal error inside... Tried flowin' down a slide, and just ran off the side... dont like this punch...3/10 Kids terrorfied to go outside, thats why he on the comp... Stompin' all over you, while you just reak like a swamp... ur on the comp 2...3/10 Puttin'a red light on ya streak I hold it up like taffic... Ask Whats whack ya track is, man just stick to graphics... good setup, decent personal...4/10 Smack this herb, thx for the goodluck but Im conceded... Pothead just proceeded to get the L like he needed it... dont rhyme 2 well, goo but played wordplay...3/10 Fatal still not dope... killin' ya breathe like scope... Scientist study'n ya rap cant see skill unda a microscope... bad closer...2/10 total- 26/80 ->33% fatal Talk shyt, its a wrap cuz da six'll pop ya, sit back n watch him 'choke' like the 'knickerboccers', good wordplay...5/10 u aint a killa 'poppa', i chill while u ack hard, put ya name on ma list, n put a grave in ma backyard, go n grab a gun, n tell da neighbors ya paths marked, like the multis, punch is ok, u shudnt hav an unpaired line tho...3/10 u lack smarts , he's a faggot n a fuckin wimp, if g's such a killa, someone tell me why's he duckin mims?, checked the link, he didnt duck...1/10 read him a bed time story before u tuck him in, nigga i buck i win, n ya 'dream is through', every one of ma 'bars' is 'nuts' like a 'peanut chew', another uncoupled line, thats ok in audio, but not for text first punch is good, 3rd lines just self-g... 6/10 on a regular basis i'd shock u like a pikachu, but on dis ossasion i'll just let the nina scream at u, dont like this one...2/10 total: 17/50 -> 34% close battle, but fatal wins Vote switched |
^^voting mistake, i'll go get it fixed
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^^ i was readin the vote like huh i had a higer percentage then read ^^ lol, uppin for mor votes
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Voted For: GKillaz05
.Fatal. Ok,your flow was the best thing you had in your verse.Your multis were placed nicely.The ducking mim's line was good.But your punches lacked.Like,take your 2nd bar for example,saying you'll put his grave in your backyard doesn't diss him at all.Those "gore " lines are useless in a battle..as their only taken as filler. Gkillaz05 Well,you had a longer verse..so that's an advantage for you.Your flow was decent with the internals and shit.Best line in you verse was the stick to graffics one.So..yea,You get my vote. Vote-Gkillaz05..for harder hitting punches. Drop an honest vote in the link below http://community.rapverse.com/showb...d.php?p=2523526 |
This was feedback posted for GKillaz05
Cant vote, aint got the posts but i like the verses. GKillaz's verse won it tho i think.
Some great punches totally on another level. Keep up the good work. maybe next time i can actually vote playas. |
Voted For: GKillaz05
I feel Gkillaz won this battle, i feel you had the flow down alot better. some error's but if its a ten minute battle i would expect that. Fatal you came pretty good and i'm not doubtin you your shit was pretty good, i just feel Gkillaz had it better over all.. Fatal all was decen,t could work on structure... Favorite line out of the entire battle was Gkillaz05 "You could rap featurin Missy and still couldnt work it... Practice makes perfect Fatal come up short like a circuit... " Favorite lines from fatal where "nigga i buck i win, n ya 'dream is through', every one of ma 'bars' is 'nuts' like a 'peanut chew'," .... so a decent battle and keep it commibn felllas Vote:GKillaz05 RTF |
Voted For: GKillaz05
GKillaz05 Your rhymes need surgery your purgery is not workin'... Could give you 10 free shots punches still aint hurtin'... Didn't connect.. I'll spit first even though you'll try to copy my shit... Thats why when im done spittin' ima copywrite my spit... Played as hell.. You could rap featurin Missy and still couldnt work it... Practice makes perfect Fatal come up short like a circuit... Not a punch.. Kid head like a computer with a fatal error inside... Tried flowin' down a slide, and just ran off the side... Concept had potential.. worded poorly.. Kids terrorfied to go outside, thats why he on the comp... Stompin' all over you, while you just reak like a swamp... No way.. Puttin'a red light on ya streak I hold it up like taffic... Ask Whats whack ya track is, man just stick to graphics... Concept had potential.. worded wrong.. Smack this herb, thx for the goodluck but Im conceded... Pothead just proceeded to get the L like he needed it... Not a punch.. Fatal still not dope... killin' ya breathe like scope... Scientist study'n ya rap cant see skill unda a microscope... Concept had potential.. worded wrong.. .Fatal. Talk shyt, its a wrap cuz da six'll pop ya, sit back n watch him 'choke' like the 'knickerboccers', Not a punch.. u aint a killa 'poppa', i chill while u ack hard, put ya name on ma list, n put a grave in ma backyard, Not a punch.. go n grab a gun, n tell da neighbors ya paths marked, u lack smarts , he's a faggot n a fuckin wimp, Still not a punch.. if g's such a killa, someone tell me why's he duckin mims?, read him a bed time story before u tuck him in, The first line had potential.. but worded wrong.. there wasn't a punch.. nigga i buck i win, n ya 'dream is through', every one of ma 'bars' is 'nuts' like a 'peanut chew', Concept had potential.. worded wrong.. on a regular basis i'd shock u like a pikachu, but on dis ossasion i'll just let the nina scream at u, Not a punch.. This battle was weak. GKillaz had a verse full of concepts that didn't connect. He had a few concepts with potential, but they worded wrong and it killed it. .Fatal.'s verse had one potential concept, but it was in the wrong order, and the rest of his verse didn't even have punches. They worded in a way to where the concept was bombed like no other, and they didn't even come close to connecting. The only reason I'm voting for GKillaz is because even though his punches didn't connect, he at least had punches. Vote - GKillaz05 Hit up my battle with Stealth. |
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This was feedback posted for GKillaz05
man gkillaz come see me when ur done for a battle...........
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Voted For: .Fatal.
ok... i wasn;t really feeling this battle.. punches were weak on both sides... i felt fatal ghad one ok bar which stood out from the rest of his verse... and g killaz i thought you were dissapointing, seen better from you, im giving this to fatal for having 1 quotable nothing vs. u lack smarts , he's a faggot n a fuckin wimp, if g's such a killa, someone tell me why's he duckin mims?, pz... no hate |
GKillaz, we still need to battle. Pm me if you're down.
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Voted For: GKillaz05
Talk shyt, its a wrap cuz da six'll pop ya, sit back n watch him 'choke' like the 'knickerboccers', ^^^naw that was weak u aint a killa 'poppa', i chill while u ack hard, put ya name on ma list, n put a grave in ma backyard, ^^^no punch go n grab a gun, n tell da neighbors ya paths marked, u lack smarts , he's a faggot n a fuckin wimp, ^^^shit didnt rhyme if g's such a killa, someone tell me why's he duckin mims?, read him a bed time story before u tuck him in, ^^NO nigga i buck i win, n ya 'dream is through', every one of ma 'bars' is 'nuts' like a 'peanut chew', ^^^No self glory on a regular basis i'd shock u like a pikachu, but on dis ossasion i'll just let the nina scream at u, ^^^ight closer Your rhymes need surgery your purgery is not workin'... Could give you 10 free shots punches still aint hurtin'... ^^^ight nuthin to good I'll spit first even though you'll try to copy my shit... Thats why when im done spittin' ima copywrite my spit... ^^^^Good You could rap featurin Missy and still couldnt work it... Practice makes perfect Fatal come up short like a circuit... ^^^NO Kid head like a computer with a fatal error inside... Tried flowin' down a slide, and just ran off the side... ^^^This was weak Kids terrorfied to go outside, thats why he on the comp... Stompin' all over you, while you just reak like a swamp... ^^^This was weak Puttin'a red light on ya streak I hold it up like taffic... Ask Whats whack ya track is, man just stick to graphics... ^^^Good.... Smack this herb, thx for the goodluck but Im conceded... Pothead just proceeded to get the L like he needed it... ^^^ight Pretty played Fatal still not dope... killin' ya breathe like scope... Scientist study'n ya rap cant see skill unda a microscope... ^^^Not bad closer V/Gkillaz05 he came wit a solid verse that was consistent an got the win...... |
This was feedback posted for GKillaz05
checkin pollz............................................. ...
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UPPIN.........................One more vote for the win.
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UPPIN, lets get the last vote.. I will RTF!!.......
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Voted For: GKillaz05
Your rhymes need surgery your purgery is not workin'... Could give you 10 free shots punches still aint hurtin'... -nice opener, good metaphor, really good flow. Nice way to kick things off, hit quite hard. I'll spit first even though you'll try to copy my shit... Thats why when im done spittin' ima copywrite my spit... -really good, original punch, hit him good. You could rap featurin Missy and still couldnt work it... Practice makes perfect Fatal come up short like a circuit... -Again, good punch and original, nice metaphor. Kid head like a computer with a fatal error inside... Tried flowin' down a slide, and just ran off the side... -haha good, nice metaphor, intelligent punchline and hit him good here. Definitely stepped things up a notch. Kids terrorfied to go outside, thats why he on the comp... Stompin' all over you, while you just reak like a swamp... -good lines here, nice set up, punch didn’t really hit the standard of the rest so far but still good. Puttin'a red light on ya streak I hold it up like taffic... Ask Whats whack ya track is, man just stick to graphics... -KILLER! Great flow in this, good punch that definatley hit hard, personal aswel. Really good there Smack this herb, thx for the goodluck but Im conceded... Pothead just proceeded to get the L like he needed it... -Good again, nice wordplay and good punch again. Fatal still not dope... killin' ya breathe like scope... Scientist study'n ya rap cant see skill unda a microscope... -nice closer, good punch and original. nice metaphor Talk shyt, its a wrap cuz da six'll pop ya, sit back n watch him 'choke' like the 'knickerboccers', -ok opener, nice metaphor but you need to come harder for the first bar I think. u aint a killa 'poppa', i chill while u ack hard, put ya name on ma list, n put a grave in ma backyard, -weak, didn’t really diss him, no real punch here either. go n grab a gun, n tell da neighbors ya paths marked, -eh? Not feeling this either, sorry bro u lack smarts , he's a faggot n a fuckin wimp, if g's such a killa, someone tell me why's he duckin mims?, -this is nice, good personal, nice punch, the best bar so far by a long way read him a bed time story before u tuck him in, -adding a third line on a bar again. Sometimes this works but you avnt pulled it off here homie nigga i buck i win, n ya 'dream is through', every one of ma 'bars' is 'nuts' like a 'peanut chew', -this is good here, nice wordplay, bit of self-glorification but it works on a regular basis i'd shock u like a pikachu, but on dis ossasion i'll just let the nina scream at u -nah sorry, never got him very hard with the last bar, it needed to be something special after the verse you’ve done but wasn’t. Overall: GKillaz05’s verse had more disses, it was funnier, more metaphors, some good wordplay and was aimed at the opponent really well. Fatal’s verse wasn’t on the level at all, not enough of the verse was aimed at the opponent enough and some of the punches were weak. Completely one-sided battle in my opinion No hate of course, stay up both of you |
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