rap game
 

http://www.soundclick.com/myfirstbattle

alright this is the first thing ive recorded since my battle with intermental and id liek some feed will rtf

lyrics:
what would i do with the prizes no idea to tell you the truth
id sell the mic for studio time wear my new suit to the real booth
dude im top notch watch heads bob i cant stop i rock spots
my rhymes bounce up in ur muth like ur favorite flavor of pop rocks
its ridiculous the wackenss emcees and femcess bringing to this
yall r weak shit making money off every single one of my fucking sentences
let it be know im sick like sick dicks infected with syphillis
picture this im off the wall like spiderman lost his grip
holy shit whoa look at will a peer go oh damn
jeez i turned jeezy white nick named him the snowman
a man will win kid ima question this
women in power now hiliary clinintin for president
the microphone knows no sex so fuck you and fuck him
i hate lil kim im a real fem i use skills to burn men
use the list to get signed then ill rub it in ur face
what a fucking waste time for men to get a taste
kids are wack popping off weak shots kid hop off
unheard of flows hitting ur face like i found the g spot

links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showp...98&postcount=28
http://community.rapverse.com/showp...26&postcount=10

aight, turn up your vocals like just a tiny bit,
but damn, ya voice is so fuckin sexy, flow on point, started to get a lil choppy near the end though
lyrics could be better, not bad though
seems like you sacrificed lyrics for multies, i could care less about multies i listen for punchlines lol, i like your presence and you have an almost unique delivery
i dunno, some reason you remind me of da brat lol

hmmm seems like it reads better than it flows... i was expecting something totally different... and in no way do you remind ME of the brat... ya got ya own thang... omma leave it at that... quality not too shabby.... we'll see how this shyt unfolds... stay up willa

u are not appropriate for this beat


this beat is so live and u sound like a librarian

eh eh

u gotta come harder than that..WORK IT BITCH


flow is pretty good though

u sound like ur whispering


decent


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lol thanks yea i knwo im lacking emotion
thanks for the feed ill go leave some on ur songs both of you

flow is probably the best part of it but fell off towards the end... and your voice is pretty good too.

But the delivery sucked.. you've got reading-lyrics-off-paper sydnrome. Theres no meaning in the words that you're saying, you're just saying them. Try to at least semi-learn the lyrics you're reading off by heart, and when you're spitting them think about what you're saying.

Your shit isnt bad though. You have a lot of potential.

well, i think it really seemed like you were reading a piece of paper...you gutta actually "rap" to the beat....n i hadda turn my volume up all the way lol....kinda weird....lyrics pretty good nothing speciall...you got a voice that sounds familiar...cant make it out...it will come....overall pretty dope......you got potential....1

your flow actually surprised me....its not bad...pretty good...a couple spots here and there that could be touched up...but overall not bad...

vocals could be a bit higher

one thing you gotta work on is being fierce in the mic...that delivery is lacking...and gotta learn how to use your voice with different things your saying....

just work on delivery......and then go from there

playing, vocals need to be up a bit. You sounding dope ma. seriously. lyrics okay.. flow is good, like the switch ups thru out. you can roll lyrics off your tounge nicley :evilgrin:

like the beat, you need a outro on this though, it cuts off to early, right when i thought id hear another verse.

this is good.

KO Laberation :thumbup:

lol word it sounds like ur strait reading your voice off paper.... i really didnt feel the lyrics cause i though they were to basic but thats just me.... thats was aight.

ur flow is amasing.. emotion was bad. Sexy voice :( Lyrics seemed like they came from chicago.

the end. :love:

ike i dropped feed on a track and ysd@ i signed up for your site lol

Flow is real good, near the end you seem to get bored with your own shit though rofl...I dunno, it's like you're thinking "oh well, i'm almost done sooooo". You lazy chica hehe...

Lyrics are good, I don't find em too basic for this type of track in fact. Delivery, yeh...that could've been better but that's usually the hardest part to get right I think. I was expecting some nice intro or outro shit too girl, would've added something to track prolly. And show me the arrogance in your voice, you know you can do it...

Good shit girl

lol thanx for the feed yea u showed attitude are you ready for some drama?
lol thanx ma

Lyrics could be jus a lil better and Yeah I agree that your voice is sexy...I felt this one especially tha flow...It was almost perfect...I was feelin tha whole thing lyrics flow everything..Your nice...This was a nice piece...Keep at it..I LOVE WILLA!!!!!!!...1

yea, emotion is lacking. beat is ill.... lol nice flow. real fast......... but quality pretty good, could be upped tho. But yea, major shit here was emotion. and flow was overall nice, but kinda choppy near end. so work on that, but you improving. keep it up....... 8/10 pc. one.

thanks i rtf on your battle 1 and spul i hit up the new/old mas song lol

well first of all thye beat choice is cool. somin that didn't get at me when you started was your emotion, you were talkin more like. you need to say it like you mean cause you most sounded tired when yuo did that. but your flow and delivery wasn't to bad though thats somin that you have that works well. the lyrics aren't to bad but are kinda a little to simple.

anyway good job

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i rtf on ur nat killa diss thanx

yea, def turn your vocals up a tad
especially when you come in, its a bit low

overall pretty decent
flows a lil choppy in some parts, prolly cause you went wit a kinda faster flow....makes it a bit hard
im liking the lyrics though
why you have to bring pop rocks into this? :thumbup:
but yea pretty str8
i really only liked this beat wit juelz on it...no offense to anyone who used it for rap game, it was jus str8 juelz shit...

but word, pretty solid...up your vocals though

lol at the pop rocks comment lol
yea thnx tizzy

I haven't heard that voice in a while... haha...

Emotion needs to be amplified by like twice the quotient of... I give up but you get the point.

Lyrics just don't seem to be your style... but hey... w/e

It was good... ;) Keep up the good work Amanda!

word ma'...u def improving.........flow was betetr than usual...deliveyr was blan tho.....u need to try an find a flow that works best for you..an try to rap wit more emotion......lyrically you've really elevated...keep the UPWARD movement cuz I saw alot of progress in this track..stay up........1

thanx for the feed i rtf cool track

Listening...

Haha...you didn't fit this beat...but meh...flow was decent...vocals were pretty low...lyrics was a'ight...but wow at your emotion...gotta get that up there...try like yelling when you record haha...

But anyway...decent, keep it up.

Word.

Aha This Shit Was Nice Mama, Feelin Tha Beginnin But Towards Da End It Wasnt Dat Tight...Couldnt Hear Every Word U Said Clearly But Da Flow Was Aight Still

Holla @ Me Tho Wit Cha Sexy Ass Voice ... Yessir

haha, damn girl you got some flame, but like everybody else said jus work on delivery, get mad at tha mic...really tho.. otha than that...im feelin that shit......the only thing i didnt like was tha siphilis line, kinda old..... but that shit was clean hahaha
u shoulda thru a 2nd verse to it tho or faded the end out
8/10