|
Cdusit vs allik war
Battle Rules:
6 - 15 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 11-15-05 at 02:00 AM Must drop verse in 45 minutes after check in. |
allik war has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-15-05 01:42 AM.
|
Cdusit has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-15-05 01:48 AM.
|
never thought id battle a kid who hasnt posted ten times
this battles unreal ....like dudes got pretend rhymes his first time on the frontlines..but name states war Im controlling his outcome....like a position in saw The decision is raw im submitting his gore kids hitting th floor War needs more support in this battle like double D's Unsure why he even stepped up maybe newbs like defeat maybe he likes to be left behind like a bikers seat like repeat this feels like a case of de ja vu cause not even ya alias voting ring could com thru |
introduction:
:referree clears throat: excuse me son u think this daycare, u knew 2 da game nigga i dont care, jus spit yo 16 nigga n challenge if u dare, so if ya in da wrong room please exit there// i shatter punchlinewhen i push up when its crunch time, i give lines meaning n life but through my pain n strife, ya soon 2 be wife and dis game is mine, my system of words blocks competition, like ya corner gas station atm reciept reads declined, im inclined,2 b on da grind// spittin venemous verses,leavin ya cursin, go beserk,while im jerkin ya girls bra strap,stop put down da gun son rememba this only rap// no seriously,its not dat serious its flow,i know ya gettin delirious,im fearless,but by da end evryone on here but u will b tearless!// lil rusty gotta wake my immagination up...or was my twin? |
note 2 self......yo dummy dis raw killa i aint knew jus been gone 4 a bit good luck:shoot:
|
Voted For: Cdusit
Cdusit: never thought id battle a kid who hasnt posted ten times this battles unreal ....like dudes got pretend rhymes ok punch - 4/10 his first time on the frontlines..but name states war Im controlling his outcome....like a position in saw Didnt Rhyme - 3/10 The decision is raw im submitting his gore kids hitting th floor War needs more support in this battle like double D's Again - 3/10 Unsure why he even stepped up maybe newbs like defeat maybe he likes to be left behind like a bikers seat How is that left behind? - 2/10 like repeat this feels like a case of de ja vu cause not even ya alias voting ring could com thru Good Punch - 4/10 16/50 You had some good punches, the flow was pretty good, some words didnt rhyme though. allik war: excuse me son u think this daycare, u knew 2 da game nigga i dont care, No Punch - 1/10 jus spit yo 16 nigga n challenge if u dare, so if ya in da wrong room please exit there// NO - 2/10 i shatter punchlinewhen i push up when its crunch time, i give lines meaning n life but through my pain n strife, NO - 1/10 ya soon 2 be wife and dis game is mine, my system of words blocks competition, Didnt Rhyme - 1/10 like ya corner gas station atm reciept reads declined, im inclined,2 b on da grind// OK - 3/10 spittin venemous verses,leavin ya cursin, go beserk,while im jerkin ya girls bra strap,stop put down da gun son rememba this only rap// BaD - 1/10 11/60 You didnt really have wordplay or strong punches, work on more creative shit, and a bigger vocab. Vote - Cd no seriously,its not dat serious its flow,i know ya gettin delirious,im fearless,but by da end evryone on here but u will b tearless!// MEH - 2/10 |
.................................................. .
|
[QUOTE=T-Dot]Voted For: Cdusit
allik war: excuse me son u think this daycare, u knew 2 da game nigga i dont care, No Punch - 1/10 jus spit yo 16 nigga n challenge if u dare, so if ya in da wrong room please exit there// NO - 2/10 i shatter punchlinewhen i push up when its crunch time, i give lines meaning n life but through my pain n strife, ya soon 2 be wife and dis game is mine, my system of words blocks competition, like ya corner gas station atm reciept reads declined, im inclined,2 b on da grind// OK - 3/10 Didnt Rhyme - 1/10 (good thing this was all 2getha so i did rhyme.......) spittin venemous verses,leavin ya cursin, go beserk,while im jerkin ya girls bra strap,stop put down da gun son rememba this only rap// BaD - 1/10 11/60 no seriously,its not dat serious its flow,i know ya gettin delirious,im fearless,but by da end evryone on here but u will b tearless!// MEH - 2/10 You didnt really have wordplay or strong punches, work on more creative shit, and a bigger vocab.[QUOTE] Vote - Cd i knoiw this wasnt 1 of my best but damn i at least rhymed all da way through da damn thing oh well uppin 4 votes n people please learn how 2 read if u gonna judge a battle ty:shoot::thefinger: |
This was feedback posted for allik war
Lol god dayum t his battle was funny...
Cdusit- never thought id battle a kid who hasnt posted ten times this battles unreal ....like dudes got pretend rhymes ^^^^^Not bad of an opener his first time on the frontlines..but name states war Im controlling his outcome....like a position in saw ^^^^^War and saw didnt rhyme unless its pronounced right.. okay punch The decision is raw im submitting his gore kids hitting th floor War needs more support in this battle like double D's ^^^^The flow kinda fell off right, double d punch was decent Unsure why he even stepped up maybe newbs like defeat maybe he likes to be left behind like a bikers seat ^^^^Okay first line, bikers leave their seats behind? like repeat this feels like a case of de ja vu cause not even ya alias voting ring could com thru ^^^^^ weak ending in my opinion overall punches were decent and vocab was good, work on when to switch flows and up on your punches to hit harder B Allik- excuse me son u think this daycare, u knew 2 da game nigga i dont care, jus spit yo 16 nigga n challenge if u dare, so if ya in da wrong room please exit there// ^^^^^^Lol nice opener..liked the multis shatter punchlinewhen i push up when its crunch time, i give lines meaning n life but through my pain n strife, ^^^^Crunchtime punchline thing kinda played, nice second line.. ya soon 2 be wife and dis game is mine, my system of words blocks competition, like ya corner gas station atm reciept reads declined, im inclined,2 b on da grind// ^^^^Haha wife and game is mine line. the deline line was kinda long but nice.. spittin venemous verses,leavin ya cursin, go beserk,while im jerkin ya girls bra strap,stop put down da gun son rememba this only rap// ^^^^Long fuckin bar, but a nice finisher overall-Nice punches, flow, multis and vocab, could make ur barz shorter by a little though I vote Allik because his punches were more creative and effective. No offence C but ur verse was kinda weak this time.. ~1~ |
nice hate vote looser^
pitty you clicked feedback instead of vote.... dont even try get it changed into a vote cause its clearly hate since im beating you in another battle.. |
Voted For: Cdusit
vote-cdusit ...he had better puns and disses.nothin else real exciting he jus had the edge cause be battle an obvious newb.allik didnt have anythin goin for.didnt come strong enough at his opponent.he jus rambled on most of the time |
.................................................. .
|
gettin pissed cuz sum1 wanted 2 vote me 4 da battle pussy?why u hatin keep da votes comin rememba no crew no hatin no bullshit uppin this shit
|
Pissed as in anry? over a net txt battle...nope .
|
Lol rude bwoy why would it be a hate vote? I don't even know u and just 'cause i lost to ya doesn't mean I'm gone vote against you in any battle..U can't win every battle u get into fam.. |
I have won every battle i have gone in..you have lost every battle you have gone in..
i think i have the right to say STFU |
so if u so hot cdusit why is our battle still open? i eman if peple went 2 high school n payed attention in english class cats could read i rhyme through out my flows all da time n evrytime i drop a line shit fire get sum muthafucka's in here who aint dick riders n haters n finish dis damn votin for this battle damn niggaz wtf is goin on ya'll sleepin?
|
Voted For: Cdusit
Ok Cdusit never thought id battle a kid who hasnt posted ten times this battles unreal ....like dudes got pretend rhymes - Weak his first time on the frontlines..but name states war Im controlling his outcome....like a position in saw - Eh... The decision is raw im submitting his gore kids hitting th floor War needs more support in this battle like double D's - Ok but basic Unsure why he even stepped up maybe newbs like defeat maybe he likes to be left behind like a bikers seat - Eh...could have worded this much better like repeat this feels like a case of de ja vu cause not even ya alias voting ring could com thru - Nah... Not a strong verse, some lines were ok and others I could see what you were trying to do...but you need to diss your opponent more and be more clear in your disses as well as word them better...You can improve in this area if you keep trying, otherwise the rhyming was good and flow was fine as well...good structure to the verse as well allik war lintroduction: :referree clears throat: excuse me son u think this daycare, u knew 2 da game nigga i dont care, jus spit yo 16 nigga n challenge if u dare, so if ya in da wrong room please exit there// - WHAT? Glad the intro is over and done with.... i shatter punchlinewhen i push up when its crunch time, i give lines meaning n life but through my pain n strife, - Your not dissing the opponent or attempting to ya soon 2 be wife and dis game is mine, my system of words blocks competition, - Your gonna marry him? like ya corner gas station atm reciept reads declined, im inclined,2 b on da grind// - Where are the punchlines? spittin venemous verses,leavin ya cursin, go beserk,while im jerkin ya girls bra strap,stop put down da gun son rememba this only rap// - Eh? no seriously,its not dat serious its flow,i know ya gettin delirious,im fearless,but by da end evryone on here but u will b tearless!// - And? lil rusty gotta wake my immagination up...or was my twin? - What? Are you sure frontlines is for you? where to start... Ok, I have no idea if you are new but it seems like it...you need to do better than that, to improve you will need to try and diss the opponent rather than talk about yourself...remember this is a BATTLE Just make your lines witty, try dissing by looking at what other more experienced battlers do....have a structure to your verse, and use personals to attack....always try to be witty with your lines man... You got a lot of improvement to do, but you got to start somewhere.... Cdusit won this no doubt....... And vote honestly on mine http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=216087 Peace |
ayt slicknife u must only b use 2 1 type of style but n e ways i no where near new homie i admit this shit aint as could as i could b but damn dude was jus as whack as me on this n e ways this battle whack shit freakin been open 4 like 3 months n niggaz still aint finish votin this shit sum1 else who bout rap n not net beef n dick ridin hit me up 4 a battle n keep it music cuz i dont give a fuck who dick u ridin.......btw at least i rhymed all the way through...hahaha oh welll ill gladly give u this lil bitch but when its on again u betta ressurect sum dead rappers 2 help u kid word peace...man close this blunt'ed i mean c'mon y not u do everything i drop hata haha
|
This was feedback posted for allik war
damn you had to set your battle up thats sorry peepin the polls
|
wut u doin lexikon bein smart n checkin wut ur gettin in or about 2 bite off from sum1?
|
Voted For: Cdusit
hmmmm this is more 1 sided than I'd of thought it would be... but Cd pretty convincingly handled war on this on... rusty or no Opener: CD Closer: CD Punches: CD Personals: CD Complexity: CD Creativity: CD Enjoyment: CD Structure: CD Vote: CD |
Voted For: Cdusit
easy one sided battle, what the fuck were you up to Psy, text battling? buahahahahahah. punches C lyrics C all that good stuff c |
| All times are GMT -4. The time now is 01:28 PM. |