~souljah~ vs ~stylez~
 

Battle Rules:

10 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

For the ending part of my try out.

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 11-22-05 at 09:29 AM

Must drop verse in 180 minutes after check in.

~stylez~ has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-20-05 08:10 AM.

You’re the bad-acting star of a prison rape scene after they punch your face in.
You a gay joke. You stay poked more than Asian acupuncture patients.
My moves be hyperactive... like crack kids doing back flips.
Yours like spankin’ diarrhea-inflicted children. I'll put the belt to you,wack shit.
Slash this. I'll grind you like an Axle. C0ck my gun. Give you a rose.
What's Curly is how I make your toes go, plus my pubes below your nose.
I thought you were some grimacing sinister mister, but on closer inspection,
I see you just want my penis as the centerpiece of your boner collection.
Rock out. You get knocked out. Dangerous. I'll harm you if you dare me.
Murder you. Hurry up and bury you in Mount Carmel Cemetery.




yea here's just a fuck around punch just added.

I’ma steal all of y’all women, and leave 5 men feelin’ badly.
'Cause they say my brain contains more game than the gang at Milton Bradley.

Who be the one you pray to? I'll split you from your nasal to your navel.
DeVill be ill like that, and ain’t no savior gon’ save you.


just bored.

~Souljah~ has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-21-05 08:21 AM.

My bad for missing the first check in time
Lol this nigga think's he's LL material ha ha
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Your ~style'z~ the epitomy of shite your time is wasted
Fow's-so-wuck-ey-ink* you got a speech impediment like Mase did
Hate to hear him free(style).....his written's a waste of a page
He's the only bum i know who don't beg for pocket change**
You'll never be sick, you bout as nice as a kick in the groin
Your crew rate me higher............................................ .....
..............................let you walk, while BEGGIN me to join
You're more ridiculous than Uncle Phil doin jumpin jacks
You're like 50; both pocket change and equally as wack
You're honest with your title, not frontin like you're hard*****
Cos only time you're number 1 is when they holding up your score card :)
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good luck with your tryout.

~peace~

*"Flow's so wack they think" as said by someone with a speech impediment lol

Mase's voice on Harlem World sounded like he had something wrong with his voice

**his crew's Pocket Change

***Snipes keeps asking me to roll with P.C. yet i ain't seen him even TRY to keep Stylez

****50 cent/50 cents is pocket change

*****new to rv is his user title

^^^nice drop.........jnow lets go with votes.................man it may say new user but ive been here man.............i aint new.......you know me fool.......opt1k aka SHODOWN. crazy


UPPIN FOR VOTES.

lol i know who you are lol

if you win this and get into LL i'll give you 10,000 rv$

Voted For: ~stylez~



Overview:
Stylez I thought ur flow, punches, doubles, closing and opener was better......e-nuff said.

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Best Lines:

Stylez:
I thought you were some grimacing sinister mister, but on closer inspection,
I see you just want my penis as the centerpiece of your boner collection.
(hahahahaha good diss...)

~Souljah~:

Your ~style'z~ the epitomy of shite your time is wasted
Fow's-so-wuck-ey-ink* you got a speech impediment like Mase did

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RTV,

One

HAHAHA.....................souljah ill take that BET......man thanks...^^^souljah if you GET in then i guess im out.....i cant offer you RV cash cuz i aint got ENUFF plus i have to start from scratch with alot of shit unlike when i was shodown.

Voted For: ~Souljah~

a really good battle from both there. this is how i see it.

Stylez, your verse was great, really original, full of metaphors and hard punches, a colourful use of vocab and some nice multis which gave good rhyming the flow and structure was totally on key.

"My moves be hyperactive... like crack kids doing back flips.
Yours like spankin’ diarrhea-inflicted children. I'll put the belt to you,wack shit."
-my favourite bar of yours. If i could give one bit of advice it would be to aim the verse at him a bit more directly at times and have more personals

Souljah, also a really nice verse. Your punches were relaly good, in fact pretty much every one was on the nose. A lot of personals, the flow was really good and the structure carried well making it easy to follow. It was funny as hell cos of all the personals and the metaphors made it a clever verse too.

"You're honest with your title, not frontin like you're hard*****
Cos only time you're number 1 is when they holding up your score card"
-My fave bar from you. I liked pretty much all of it the same but this stood out. Bars like that wil take you to the top of the text battles

Return the favour please or il get this vote removed

This was feedback posted for ~Souljah~
 

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This was feedback posted for ~stylez~
 

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Voted For: ~Souljah~

You’re the bad-acting star of a prison rape scene after they punch your face in.
You a gay joke. You stay poked more than Asian acupuncture patients.
^^no need for "asian" it had no context, but ok punch
My moves be hyperactive... like crack kids doing back flips.
Yours like spankin’ diarrhea-inflicted children. I'll put the belt
to you,wack shit.
^^played concept
Slash this. I'll grind you like an Axle. C0ck my gun. Give you a rose.
What's Curly is how I make your toes go, plus my pubes below your nose.
^^wasnt feelin it, way to choppy
I thought you were some grimacing sinister mister, but on closer inspection,
I see you just want my penis as the centerpiece of your boner collection.
^^lol,..wtf, not much of a punch
Rock out. You get knocked out. Dangerous. I'll harm you if you dare me.
Murder you. Hurry up and bury you in Mount Carmel Cemetery.
^^wasnt feelin the closer much
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you had a couple decent bars but alot of extra content that wasnt needed to get your punch across effectively...
no a bad verse,above average for a rookie i suppose..
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.Your ~style'z~ the epitomy of shite your time is wasted
Fow's-so-wuck-ey-ink* you got a speech impediment like Mase did
^^ok opener, nothin overly great
Hate to hear him free(style).....his written's a waste of a page
He's the only bum i know who don't beg for pocket change**
^^nah wasnt feelin this
You'll never be sick, you bout as nice as a kick in the groin
Your crew rate me higher............................................ .....
..............................let you walk, while BEGGIN me to join
^^decent setup, punch lacked creativity
You're more ridiculous than Uncle Phil doin jumpin jacks
You're like 50; both pocket change and equally as wack
^^imo, this was dope
You're honest with your title, not frontin like you're hard*****
Cos only time you're number 1 is when they holding up your score card
^^hmm, not bad, ok closer..
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this was closer then i expected, souljah picked it up near the end of his verse, n on that note i gotta go with him, he had more effective punches throughout his verse.

Voted For: ~stylez~

uppinn diss.......................................

get my vote removed i pressed the wrong button.....its just suppose to be feedback.

Voted For: ~stylez~

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checkn polls

get dat vote removed........................................... .................

Voted For: ~Souljah~

hmmmm souj had the better personals and punches... and an easy to follow flow... so he took this hand over fist...

Opener: Souj
Closer: Souj
Pucnhes: Souj
Personals: Souj
Creativity: Souj

Vote: Souj

Voted For: ~stylez~

Your ~style'z~ the epitomy of shite your time is wasted
Fow's-so-wuck-ey-ink* you got a speech impediment like Mase did
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open wasnt bad, nice punch here
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Hate to hear him free(style).....his written's a waste of a page
He's the only bum i know who don't beg for pocket change**
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weak punch, flow was way off
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You'll never be sick, you bout as nice as a kick in the groin
Your crew rate me higher............................................ .....
..............................let you walk, while BEGGIN me to join
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it was opened, and i didnt feel it at all
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You're more ridiculous than Uncle Phil doin jumpin jacks
You're like 50; both pocket change and equally as wack
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elevate son!
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You're honest with your title, not frontin like you're hard*****
Cos only time you're number 1 is when they holding up your score card
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it aint bad as a closer...but isnt good enough to take my vote
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IP:


You’re the bad-acting star of a prison rape scene after they punch your face in.
You a gay joke. You stay poked more than Asian acupuncture patients.
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nice flow i was able to pick up fast and straight punch, hit hard
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My moves be hyperactive... like crack kids doing back flips.
Yours like spankin’ diarrhea-inflicted children. I'll put the belt to you,wack shit.
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nice work again i dont know what to say.
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Slash this. I'll grind you like an Axle. C0ck my gun. Give you a rose.
What's Curly is how I make your toes go, plus my pubes below your nose.
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didnt feel it man, not workin with me
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I thought you were some grimacing sinister mister, but on closer inspection,
I see you just want my penis as the centerpiece of your boner collection.
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using the topic "gay" in punchlines dont always impress veiws.
remember that
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Rock out. You get knocked out. Dangerous. I'll harm you if you dare me.
Murder you. Hurry up and bury you in Mount Carmel Cemetery.
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and finished it with a nice threat, good work

v/~stylez~

RTF, they in my sig~

Voted For: ~stylez~

Your ~style'z~ the epitomy of shite your time is wasted
Fow's-so-wuck-ey-ink* you got a speech impediment like Mase did
^^^Ight
Hate to hear him free(style).....his written's a waste of a page
He's the only bum i know who don't beg for pocket change**
^^^weak
You'll never be sick, you bout as nice as a kick in the groin
Your crew rate me higher............................................ .....
..............................let you walk, while BEGGIN me to join
^^^No
You're more ridiculous than Uncle Phil doin jumpin jacks
You're like 50; both pocket change and equally as wack
^^^decent
You're honest with your title, not frontin like you're hard*****
Cos only time you're number 1 is when they holding up your score card
^^^Played closer

You’re the bad-acting star of a prison rape scene after they punch your face in.
You a gay joke. You stay poked more than Asian acupuncture patients.
^^^decent opener
My moves be hyperactive... like crack kids doing back flips.
Yours like spankin’ diarrhea-inflicted children. I'll put the belt to you,wack shit.
^^^ight
Slash this. I'll grind you like an Axle. C0ck my gun. Give you a rose.
What's Curly is how I make your toes go, plus my pubes below your nose.
^^^Lol
I thought you were some grimacing sinister mister, but on closer inspection,
I see you just want my penis as the centerpiece of your boner collection.
^^^WEak
Rock out. You get knocked out. Dangerous. I'll harm you if you dare me.
Murder you. Hurry up and bury you in Mount Carmel Cemetery.
^^^ight



yea here's just a fuck around punch just added.

I’ma steal all of y’all women, and leave 5 men feelin’ badly.
'Cause they say my brain contains more game than the gang at Milton Bradley.
^^^Decent

Who be the one you pray to? I'll split you from your nasal to your navel.
DeVill be ill like that, and ain’t no savior gon’ save you.
^^^Decent closer

V.stylez.....he came wit less played lines....he had a more consistent verse.....souljah....u had some ight personals but weak punchs...Rtf in the sig.....