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The Revelation vs Paranoid
Battle Rules:
1:00-5:00 min max You "Can" do hooks and everything, you can not ask for anyone else to be in the song. it's just like a normal song. get your own beats. Topic: Reminiscing without hope No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Goodluck Rev:thumbup: Minimum posts to vote: 400 Check in by: 12-18-05 at 04:59 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
The Revelation has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-16-05 04:04 PM.
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The song is like 15 seconds too long. Is that ok with you?
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yea thats cool man, dont worry.
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Paranoid has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-18-05 02:05 PM.
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www.soundclick.com/Paranoid05
Song will be up shortly....soundclick is doin somin so i can't upload yet. "Reminiscin" LYRICS: "Reminiscing Without Hope" Hook: Takin minimal times, I chance my fate Maybe if I'd relax, I'd advance with hate No my vision will soon decide to cope So forever I'll reminsce without the hope Verse1: Yea, yea...reminisce with me..Yea Ima find whats wrong as my journey out rolls So I shared the light, I couldn't out glow But without hope, I'm visible beyond my see So intelligent, yes that was me Looked among the brightest of all disguises And I was the slightest of all surprises So messed up, I waved both my hands Saying hi to god was my dream to man Then people would know Christ exists So pain would heal and show life a twist Givin up aint the expressions shown It's the heart, no confessions known I'll help myself help yall find the glow So yall would reminisce with the flow yea reminisce with me yo...yea reminisce. Verse2 Me driftin off connection is really weird But me I fear havin to share my ear Impossible aint nothin in this generation Pass it on, use ya skill and penetration Just to live on strong you'd sing a song? Ok then wheres the wrong in that Kids runnin hard, drummin on a cat Stunnin the apposed, so dark it's all black Comin in rough, enough came first I'ma burst through the core with my verse Annonoumusly my wish came true So me reignin fame is my main too! And anything different I change my opitician I'd fate to survive in this situation Considerin hope was gone and missin Ima carry on, picture me reminiscin Verse3 Lost with a decision too... Sake the forgivin, and still I’m alive, born to fate livin Positive suggestions stutter along Only to come across a lover in wrong Trying to get a grip on what I grab I seem so infected, I’d scream I’m neglected Like a assassin my strengths show imagination But it’s hard, so I’d glow a sensation Impossible you say its negative and not true? Furious kids walkin the streets… with who?, with you So you’d complicate the struggles that I partake Just to perfect the skills you aint have Something beyond you, might be my fad Ima be the famous one, the bid is on yall Reminisce, I'm the one kid with it all |
Voted For: Paranoid
Listening... Paranoid...beat is decent...lyrics are good...flow is a little bit choppy...quality is meh...Lyrics are pretty good, stays on the topic... Overall, keep it up. Your getting better. Rev... Listening...beat is more fitting...wow at your wack quality...learn how to filter better. Wow...your flow is horribly off beat. Lyrics are decent...but ehh at the quality on this...flow is way off. A'ight...really no contest...not basing this on lyrics because audio is how listenable something is...and sorry Rev, your track was just not listenable. No hate. |
Voted For: The Revelation
lmfao @ your voice. You sound like a young Mr. Rogers. lmfao, you sound extremely white. Like, a straight up suburban white person. ok umm wtf are you doin? are you rappin? you sound like a preacher, lmfao you're not rappin..at all roflmao @ this. WOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW! "Hitler would still be around killin innocent people and BABIES" I BURST out laughin with I heard that first off, this beat, this beat is fuckin gay, no baseline, so you cant rap to it ROFLMAO, AWW man at this. This isnt even considered rap. This isnt even considered music, at all! roflmao, aww man WOMFAO OMFG I just heard you fuck up roflmao, OMFG This was horrible, PLUS you went over 5:00. you went like 5:15 or some shit but yo man, next time you in a topical audio battle, try to rap. seriouslu, cos you just sound like a preacher that happens to rhyme every once and awhile SMH OK, Paranoid good, Im glad you took the "rap" approach to it lmao "yes that was meee" sounded weird ROFOOFOFOLMAO YEAH, You're ridin a beat - or atleast tryin to "kids runnin jumpin on a cat" WOOOOOOOOOOOOW, ROOOOOOOOOOFLMAO, WTF MAN Yall niggas smh, well, this is no joke, Im serious as shit when I say this. But rap isnt for anyone LOL @ your addlibs "uhh huh, yeeah" lmao Im listenin while type, so thats why I keep changin shit up "with who? with you" ROOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOFLMAO *DIES* Fuck it, Im not listenin to the rest, but from what I did listen to, Paranoid got this shit easy as hell. Why? because he actually rapped, thats why. and in a rap song, you supposed to rap. lmfao RTF on http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=217377 thanks Paranoid, you should elevate. Try just spittin some regular shit to a nice ass up tempo beat and see how you do. Cos you have a chance in audio, The Rev - you sadly do not Vote switched |
ok.......lol I didn't understand that but thanks for the vote.
um yea I suppose i could rtf:) 1 |
This was feedback posted for Paranoid
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This was feedback posted for The Revelation
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Ya, that feed was mostly LMFAO and ish. Why Will is so fascinated with me is scary. Will, you give no feed. You say, LMFAO ahahahah YOU SUCK WhJSEDJDJBNDJB. Seriously man, you aren't stopping me from recording. You are wanting me to record more, so go bug someone else and try to stop the competition with them, cuz you aren't doing ish except giving me motivation.
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You are making me want to record more*............
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This was feedback posted for Paranoid
I cant vote on this battle, becuz I am in his crew. But yo, Para wins this hands down, his flow was better, his story, was better.. he had good rhymes.
The other guy, your shit was ANNOYIN' .. lol, it was good when I read it, but you destroyed it on that track. |
Voted For: Paranoid
Alright.. Revalation ----------- Flow:Your flow is aight you really gotta work on it you'll get better at it as u start rapping more and more..and If i was you i would hold back on buying new equptment till you have decent flow and delivery cuz it'd be useless too have that mic with what ur workin with right now....:5/10 Pressense:Your pressense is aight for you just beginning somthing you also have too work on...cuz you sound like you are forcing it...but keep workin on it...5.7/10 Emotion:You actually have decent emotion just it wont play a role on ur audio untill you get ur flow and pressense down better it'll all happen over time:6/10 Lyrics:Your lyrics are good of course you came outta being straight text so of course your gonna have good lyrics:8/10 Overall:Overall this was a not so good track....you gotta work on your flow and what not fam...cuz it really didn't come on that great:5.7/10 ============== Paranoid ---------- Flow:you have a better flow then rev no doubt BUT you dont have it polished yet but over time it will get better overall it was just decent:6/10 Pressense:Your pressene was alright.....nothin too special too laid back type of style for me.......so i wasn't really feelin it on this u need too boost this too get peoples attention cuz even most mellow rappers normally have a good pressense that can attract listeners keep tryin tho:5/10 Emotion:your emotion is ur biggest weakness fam....this is wat u lack on every song and u wont be able 2 get people attention till you really start boosting this right here....keep tryin tho...:5/10 Lyrics:Your lyrics are alright overall there not good but there not great..overall they were just decent:7/10 Overall:YOU DID drop better then rev.....u made it up with ur flow.....if u didn't have any flow Rev woulda taken this battle...but overall u did do better:6/10 ========== my vote goes too Paranoid |
Voted For: Paranoid
I like the fact that this is a topical battle: paranoid...im feelin the beat choice..flow is kl throughout the track..it seems a lil robotic sumtimes n u stutter a lil..i see u workin on that emotion its nice....lyrics are very very nice...flow stays nice..however like i said its a bit robotic...but its comin dawg def a improvement since last time...hook is very nice ure best bit of the track..last verse...u shud write to add more words in each line cos its like u say summin n stop and continue..u dont wana do that alot..3rd verse is a bit better... Rev: listenin..lol ure voice sounds like sum american preacher from the suburbans..lol im playin..quality lets u down a huge amount.. lyrics are nice..i like the emotion..u got th energy but it seems ure emotion gettin over ure flow cos its off...presence is aitie...lyrics are koo u wrote better to it but it didnt flow..beat is was koo..lyrics koo..flow was offf...work on it cuz it was a decent listen.. v/paranoid... |
Voted For: Paranoid
i didn't really like either of the drops but outta both of them i'd havta say para's drop was more lyrical and you actually rapped and he didn't so yeah thats pretty much it naaahhhh meeeaaannsss gangsta like olives WHAT?! |
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