Jay .Reaper. vs Young Money
 

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Jay .Reaper. has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-12-05 12:18 PM.

Young Money has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-12-05 12:19 PM.

ight...fast keystyle

U aint got shit..u have no IQ he Couldnt get his name right on a test
Cuz moneys a Vote pacer.....Who Does trades like an Artest Request
My heat an ur gurl are similar...they both give shots to the Dome
this fag got G-unit in his ass........cuz he states he's yayo's home
He's gonna get hits to the Chest like a human Bong
his Gurl like Tv's...Even 3 year olds can turn her on
So ima be like a plastic Surgeon an snatch yah faces
Cuz the metals gonna warm yah mouth...like heatin Braces
it would be shady to See this slim kid in public wit kim
Cuz when hes Gone............no-ones gonna be like Y.M
I'm Ur fuckin father...so stop rappin...ima have to beat my son
skills like banks wit currency age limits....the way his money to young
So SHootin aint Ur SHit Besides Watchin THe Star's
like Homers Spot In-flamed..I'm Burin Down mo's Bar's
Ima carpenter this bitch...nail him wit the hammer
Cuz his moms like screen doors...anyone can slam her
He's gettin Slammed.....i'm dunkin him in a basket
Cuz The closet u'll come to spittin death...is Rhymin..in ur casket

Get ya SKULL BROKE WIT A TORN NECK, I'LL THROW HOLES IN THIS BOYS CHEST 'Split you in half' and BLOW SMOKE IN YA MOIST BREAST lookin like 'Alley Mcbeal' had her Gynecologist' used a 'GOAL POST' AS HER 'FORCEPS'!!!// heh
I'll CUT AND RIP YOU WITH FEELING, Strapped to a chair, hair pulled back so hard ya FUCKIN TISSUE IS PEELING, IV's in ya arm and ya dick, strapped to the roof, SUCK IT BITCH YOU AINT HEALING, jaw open, forced to sit and drown in your own BLOOD AND PISS FROM THE CEILING!//
DEALING wit a man that'll break ya TEETH AND YA BONES BITCH Hold you by the neck as your FEET AND YOUR TOES TWITCH, then Submerse you in the vomit i puke from READING MY OWN SHIT!// werd
--------------------------------FUCK YOU------------------------------------
Catch a THICK SWORD, AND A BLADE, show your insides n 'Squeeze The ish dry', BITCH YOUR JUS AFRAID! Don't sweat it, It won't make a difference ya 'SHITS FORCED ANYWAY'!// hahaha
HEY, The WEAPONS THAT I SLING. Ring INFECTIONS THAT'LL SWING, across ya chest and in SECONDS IT'LL BRING, This fake to a puppet, as I use your INTESTINES AS THE STRINGS!// Mwuahaha
I'll put a SWITCHBLADE IN YA WAIST FAST!, and leave ya SHIT SPRAYED IN MY WAKE, ASS, Drop ya on your 'head so hard' you could use ya 'RIBCAGE' AS YA 'FACE MASK'!// (Facemask)

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Voted For: Young Money

Imma have to give this one to Yayo.

Reaper came wit some raw shit...Ill admit that..i especially liked the one where he was like
"My heat an ur gurl are similar...they both give shots to the Dome
this fag got G-unit in his ass........cuz he states he's yayo's home"
but in the end, Yayo takes it...he got way creative wit his flow...it was entertainin and he got some ill metaphors. both had okay punches, but i think Yayo was a little harder hittin and a better word choice...no offense reaper..

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Voted For: Jay .Reaper.

I Have To Give This To Reaper. Yo Money, You Need To Structure Your Shit Way Better Than That. You Mostly Had Multies But not Enough Punches

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Voted For: Young Money

Vote goes to Young Money yo

Punches-Money(By a lil)
Personals-Pretty even
Structure-Jay
Flow-Money

Thats how it breaks down man...RTF on my battle

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This was feedback posted for Young Money
 

Lmfao at this battle.

Voted For: Jay .Reaper.

phil had better structure n betta punches. young money had baaad structure. n not many punches, just a bunch of talkin bout killin phil n shit.

Ima carpenter this bitch...nail him wit the hammer
Cuz his moms like screen doors...anyone can slam her

LMAO. u had sum funny shit.

young money, u had sum good multies n shit, but that shit aint too good fo a battle. but itd b good fo a song or sumthin, u know. no hate young money, werd

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Voted For: Jay .Reaper.

phil u won this it was eazyer to read and ur rymes better and nicer flow and just over all better style
y.m. u have potental keep it up get better stlye of persenting it

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Voted For: Young Money

hmmmm honestly YM's verse woulda been pretty decent if this were a HorrorCore battle... but it wasn't ... this was a regular battle... and by all account he really should of lost if Phil had a came with it... hmmmm but Phil didn't really say anything of note... and there weren't any really ill concepts in his entire verse...

Opener: YM
Closer: YM
Creativity: YM
Complexity: YM
Punches: YM
Personals: Phil
Enjoyment: YM
Structure: None

Vote: YM

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This was feedback posted for Young Money
 

your bars are stretched as hell, and would never work in audio or in real life...creative, though, not bad with multis...

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Voted For: Young Money

young took this, he had better flow and i thought was more creative with his rhymes. young $ in the future seperate ur bars so it easier to read and i had a lil touble telling when one bar ended and the other started.

Voted For: Jay .Reaper.

Get ya SKULL BROKE WIT A TORN NECK, I'LL THROW HOLES IN THIS BOYS CHEST 'Split you in half' and BLOW SMOKE IN YA MOIST BREAST lookin like 'Alley Mcbeal' had her Gynecologist' used a 'GOAL POST' AS HER 'FORCEPS'!!!// heh
hugely stretched, sort out your structure, decent flow but no real hard punches
I'll CUT AND RIP YOU WITH FEELING, Strapped to a chair, hair pulled back so hard ya FUCKIN TISSUE IS PEELING, IV's in ya arm and ya dick, strapped to the roof, SUCK IT BITCH YOU AINT HEALING, jaw open, forced to sit and drown in your own BLOOD AND PISS FROM THE CEILING!//
Probably the most stretched line I have ever seen
DEALING wit a man that'll break ya TEETH AND YA BONES BITCH Hold you by the neck as your FEET AND YOUR TOES TWITCH, then Submerse you in the vomit i puke from READING MY OWN SHIT!// werd
--------------------------------FUCK YOU------------------------------------
Nah
Catch a THICK SWORD, AND A BLADE, show your insides n 'Squeeze The ish dry', BITCH YOUR JUS AFRAID! Don't sweat it, It won't make a difference ya 'SHITS FORCED ANYWAY'!// hahaha
Nah again
HEY, The WEAPONS THAT I SLING. Ring INFECTIONS THAT'LL SWING, across ya chest and in SECONDS IT'LL BRING, This fake to a puppet, as I use your INTESTINES AS THE STRINGS!// Mwuahaha
Puppet was a cool concept, ok bar
I'll put a SWITCHBLADE IN YA WAIST FAST!, and leave ya SHIT SPRAYED IN MY WAKE, ASS, Drop ya on your 'head so hard' you could use ya 'RIBCAGE' AS YA 'FACE MASK'!// (Facemask)
Meh

Sort your structure out, your verse was so hard to read.

U aint got shit..u have no IQ he Couldnt get his name right on a test
Cuz moneys a Vote pacer.....Who Does trades like an Artest Request
Eh?
My heat an ur gurl are similar...they both give shots to the Dome
this fag got G-unit in his ass........cuz he states he's yayo's home
No
He's gonna get hits to the Chest like a human Bong
his Gurl like Tv's...Even 3 year olds can turn her on
Ok
So ima be like a plastic Surgeon an snatch yah faces
Cuz the metals gonna warm yah mouth...like heatin Braces
Creative
it would be shady to See this slim kid in public wit kim
Cuz when hes Gone............no-ones gonna be like Y.M
Not bad
I'm Ur fuckin father...so stop rappin...ima have to beat my son
skills like banks wit currency age limits....the way his money to young
Nah
So SHootin aint Ur SHit Besides Watchin THe Star's
like Homers Spot In-flamed..I'm Burin Down mo's Bar's
lol
Ima carpenter this bitch...nail him wit the hammer
Cuz his moms like screen doors...anyone can slam her
Cool
He's gettin Slammed.....i'm dunkin him in a basket
Cuz The closet u'll come to spittin death...is Rhymin..in ur casket
No

You had some nice ideas in there mixed with some whack ones, screen doors bar was nice and you had some other decent concepts. Just work on consistency as you have a lotta potential.

v/ Phil

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Voted For: Jay .Reaper.

He's gonna get hits to the Chest like a human Bong
his Gurl like Tv's...Even 3 year olds can turn her on
it would be shady to See this slim kid in public wit kim
Cuz when hes Gone............no-ones gonna be like Y.M
So SHootin aint Ur SHit Besides Watchin THe Star's
like Homers Spot In-flamed..I'm Burin Down mo's Bar's
Ima carpenter this bitch...nail him wit the hammer
Cuz his moms like screen doors...anyone can slam her

VS.

Get ya SKULL BROKE WIT A TORN NECK, I'LL THROW HOLES IN THIS BOYS CHEST 'Split you in half' and BLOW SMOKE IN YA MOIST BREAST lookin like 'Alley Mcbeal' had her Gynecologist' used a 'GOAL POST' AS HER 'FORCEPS'!!!//


Yeah, this was one-sided. Most likely because of the fact that Young Money's structure was fucking horrible. That shit is the kind of shit for audio battles, but in text you need to work a different structure otherwise your verse just seems bullshit. That first bar of yours was ok, kind of funny but nothing special. Phil had a few decent bars that made me laugh, nothing spectacular but they were mildly amusing. Overall, he had a verse that looked decent and had some actual punches. Young Money came with a load of shit talk really, stuff I've seen before.....nothing creative and delivered and worded terribly.

V/ - Phil Benjamin

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