allik war vs Dopium
 

Battle Rules:

15-20 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
no hate votes


Minimum posts to vote: 500

Check in by: 01-01-06 at 09:39 AM

Must drop verse in 4376 minutes after check in.


Expired battle close - win

my bad i messed up so heres the corrections for the battle allik.

allik war has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-29-05 05:16 PM.

Dopium has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-30-05 09:38 PM.

A sense of anxiousness in every breath.
dreary visions as I watch my footsteps.
possessd pausing in stance gaze at her house address.
Knocking on her door patiently waiting for a answer.
She opened up to find out shes a belly dancer.
walking beside me is a beautiful girl askin questions.
lost for words with no expressions and embarrassing impressions.
hearts racing fast feels like a formula 1 race pulling tons.
She winks at me and laughs and her smiles as good as the sun.
Finally we enter the restraunt obliged tried telling jokes an I almost cried.
Couldn’t make up my mind to be embarrassed or to run and hide.
No appetite and I havn’t ate a single meal in hours.
Reached in my jacket to pull out a bouquet of flowers.
Something in me seemed to seize
I blink a couple times and I can finally see
Now that im talking I feel I cant quit never leavin I wont make it
Walkin lonely now and I cant face the truth to brace it.
Goin home no one to love on or hug
an even no one for me to give back rubs.
Only to wake up and see shes lying beside
Now living our lifes one day at a time.



it's a fast freestyle on topicals so i know that the structures off but that can be fixed.

allik if you don't post up here by tomarrow morning at 9 am then you get a auto ko.

Ok allik since you didnt post up man your loss but thanks for the ko bro.

lol fuckin herb

good angel-lower case
bad angel-capital letters
me-(........)......get the picture?

(damn i really like this chick but i dunno wut 2 do,)
HOMIE CALL THE BITCH UP N TELL HER U WANNA SCREW,
nah man jus call her n say wuts up cuz that aint kool 2 do,
MAN FUCK HIM DAWG CALL HER ASS OVA N HAND HER A BREW
dont listen 2 him.....he's gonna end up screwin things up 4 u
(man both of u shut up....quit fightin n tell wut 2 do)//

IM TELLIN U DAWG FUCK THE STUPID SLUT,
JUS BEND THE BITCH OVER AND PUT IN HER BUTT,
man ur jus nuts how u kno this girl a slut,
(CUZ I HIT HER LAS NITE AFTER JUS 1 CUP//

MAN JUS CALL HER,TELL HER 2 COME OVER,
GIVE HER A DRINK N SAY WE DONT NEED NO RUBBER,
BEND HER OVER THE TABLE RITE THERE & FUCK HER,
man this shit almost over,and u aint even called her,
(oh shit is to late? i dont kno?.............ima call her,)
HELL NO HE'S NOT CUZ I HID THE GIRLS NUMBER,
CUZ SHE A FREAKY BITCH DAT I MET LAS SUMMER,
your wrong man but yo send her my way,cuz i wanna play....
(......................thats fucked up ya'll..................)
too bad,so sad...................MAN WUT A BUMMER!...

aint my best but i dont care....u people hate 2 much on here n e ways so i kno my shit gonna lose 2 hate votes....although half u chumps swear they not yet u peep my otha threads u can tell they started talkin shit 2 me n still at it so it gotta b a hate vote or dick ridin or both ut n e ways its the new year and i plain jus dont give a fuck....fuck ya'll if u dont like me.....im not here 4 ya'll im here 4 myself so fuck ya'll hataz peace...oh uppin this shit now!!!!!!

(man both of u shut up....quit fightin n tell me wut 2 do)//...mis type but cant fix on edit on battles cuz well u kno...so there it is so ya'll not like yo wut he mean by that?

:wtf: @ your verse shits sucks mad dick compared to mine.

Voted For: Dopium

DOPIUM takes wit better creativty, invovlement of the action, and for better wordplay wit the topic...........NUFF SAID


ALIK that type of topical style is a one way ticket to defeat........up ur topical homes....................




v/ DOPIUM
IP:


A sense of anxiousness in every breath.
dreary visions as I watch my footsteps.-

walking beside me is a beautiful girl askin questions.
lost for words with no expressions and embarrassing impressions.-

Finally we enter the restraunt obliged tried telling jokes an I almost cried.
Couldn’t make up my mind to be embarrassed or to run and hide.

best lines.


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Voted For: allik war

well Alikk Your Structure Was Aigght But Your Scheme Was Horrible No Flow Switches Or Nothing THe Acual Verse Was Whack As Well Lmao..I Dunno WHat To Say Im Stunned By The Whackness
Aigght Lemme Say

Nothing Vs

A sense of anxiousness in every breath.
dreary visions as I watch my footsteps.

Alik You been Owned,Dopium Your Emotion And Im agery Was Good Makes You Think Your In The Scene,Well I Liked This Peice Especially:
walking beside me is a beautiful girl askin questions.
lost for words with no expressions and embarrassing impressions.
hearts racing fast feels like a formula 1 race pulling tons.
She winks at me and laughs and her smiles as good as the sun.
Finally we enter the restraunt obliged tried telling jokes an I almost cried

Very Nice Verse

This Was Just A Easy Win For Dopium

Vote/Dopium

Shit

Switch The Vote Homie Sorry:(.........................

Voted For: Dopium

Is this like a topical battle, cuz there was no topic stated. But I'm a vote on who had the better verse. Dopium I think takes this shit, his verse to me had more feeling to it, it had emotion and imagery, something that adds to the verse. Also, Allik War just seemed to rip off that Guilty Conscience song by Eminem and Dre and he made it total bullshit. I get the idea, but it wasn't used well and the execution was ridiculous. The rhyming was off in places and in some it was non-existent. Dopium for me had a little complexity to his verse, for a quick freestyle it was nice, kept a certain level of consistency and just held my attention a bit more. Allik's was real weak and corny, and after about 6 lines I felt like not voting.

V/ - Dopium

ight, people lets get this battle votes goin so far I up by 3 so I ko'd this fool another vote and its a tko.

This was feedback posted for allik war
 

Checking this out....................................

i came weak n whack on purpose.....why should i waste my talents when u people on here hating on me 2 damn much.....u niggaz are mad fake...this suppose 2 b hip-hop not bloods vs. crips feel me?...n e ways good job on ur verse dopium i though arguing with u guys...jus let me do me n u all(hataz)do u ty and again happy fucking new year....although we all know its gonna b the same shit jus anotha year...instead of same shit jus anotha day feel me?...oh well dont care if u do....and trust it wasnt bitin from em's guilty shit....im not a biter or fake....i do my own...i have ghost writers or steal other people's shit like sum1 on rv does........im unique...well im sure ur bored of readin my writin so peace n good job again jerk

ight people uppin this battle ight honest votes fam. :thumbup:

UPPIN this for honest votes fam jus wantin to have this battle end soon. :thumbup:

This was feedback posted for Dopium
 

Not Enough Post But Dopium Got This....................................

Ight, Fam can we get this uppin please? Cus i just wanna end this battle.

Uppppppppppppppppppppppppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn thissSSSSSSsssSSs

ight people uppinNnNNnnnN this ight honest votes yo. :thumbup:

upppppppppppppppppppppppppppin this fam please. :thumbup:

This was feedback posted for allik war
 

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come on people Uppin this honest votes please.

and sean what was that about? :huh:

uppin this battle people ight please, thanks. :thumbup:

Ight, fam can we please up this its been like 4 days since the last vote so can we please get some votes to end this. :thumbup:

uppin this fam ight thxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx.

uppin this people please ight honest votes fam. :thumbup:

Voted For: Dopium

Reign won this battle, Nice attempt Allik but I wasn't
really feeling your verse.....

Reign ~ The structure was alright didnt really affect
the flow,.. I felt that some of your lines was pretty
predictable. And this bit u can tell was just a filler
and rushed... \/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/

Knocking on her door patiently waiting for a answer.
She opened up to find out shes a belly dancer.

It don't really add up but thats the only fault I can
moan about !! sorry thats why I'm a Critic...

Vocab didn't really have any, flowed well, but uping
complexity. Other then that it was a pretty good
drop.

Allik ~ I liked the concept, the whole good side bad
side, but other then that the whole thing was pretty
basic. It flowed well, but no emotion, vocab !!! it was
alright.....

Vote Reign had a solid verse, and was a good read

Stay up both

1~

Also if one of u wanna battle me I would be more then happy to comply !!

Holla @ Me !!!

1~

coo thanks for the honest vote man! Ight uppin this fam. ;)

hey critic thanx for an honest vote...could careless who it for cuz like ive mentioned im not really the battle type i just write songs...but besides so many hataz on this site why waste my time droppin a hot verse feel me?...thanx 4 the honesty wanna battle cool fam stay up dawg peace...reignyour really i dunno no words in the english dictionary can explain ur ignorance...u started a thread squashing the beef wit all otha cats jus cuz they hatin on me 2 n yet not wit me...not dat i care who likes or dislikes me but it jus show's ur immaturity uppin this battle 4 real honest votes peace

Voted For: Dopium

lol ok u dissed him he was talking about sluts and shit ol................................................ ...........

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lol @ mentalz but yea common people one last honest vote ight please. :thumbup:

uppin this people common one last honest vote ok please. :thumbup:

uppin thisfam ight honest votes please ok. :thumbup:

ight Rv we uppppppppppppppppppin thissssss$s$s$s$$$ ok please hinest votes.

ight uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppin this fam ight pleast need a final vote. :thumbup: