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A letter to the President
Dear Mr. President,
To the commander in chief, you’ve got such a passion for things But the passionate clings to misconceptions crafted beneath Lies man handle your speech, look at the damage you bring Death canvasses teens, tears in heaven, parents candles convene Rainy days with broken umbrellas, slugs open up fella’s Innocent tortured stories they tell us, the glory is yellow Because shorties undeveloped, the morning is hella Hot…no sleep, cold sweat shop…the sun swelters And you stand there and smirk, without a care for their births I’m embarrassed you jerk, damn it, where was your word? I don’t care where you work, I just care if you work! America’s last? Sure, since your parents come first So I say, Mr. President, your lack of precedence Homeland questions is, amounting but stays directionless 9/11 sectioned it, but other problems still prevalent Iraqis question this, American’s still question it Welfare and social security amuck, so I say what the fuck Cheney’s corrupt, peep the Halliburton correlation you schmuck Only done coke once? Your ape face says your still faded as fuck Running shoes better start lacing them up, I’m chasing this duck Not a new thing, dictate like the American Sadaam Hussein Black gold fool’s cane, align the oil trade grouping A powerful pool game, determines who ‘moves things’ At what price though? Got me questioning who’s sane |
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DAMN at the rhyming concept u defintly a good lyricist
but u need a lil more experience u want feed here it is nuthin bout it is fictional but try ta be more original this was pacs idea, try ta be a lil more of a leada but oh well what the hell u dope at this i can tell this aint really fake or pretend id give this a 8/10 use this advice i gave ya and keep it up playa :thumbup: lol yea that right i rapped out ur feed :) .....but im DEFITNLY feeling this i think this the best o.m i read i aint even bullshittin u..everybody else on here either fronts, is really wack wit lyrics, or raps bout materlistic thangs along wit killing muthafuckas wit there 4-5's lol, they dont ever take time ta keep it real...but i defitnly can tell u comin wit a strong message i love that..the only drawback is that it kinda was based off of pacs "dear mr president" song off of the Still I Rise album pac and the outlawz put out in 99...other than that i can tell that u defitnly put ur soul inta this...keep comin strong ma..always release ur true opinions in every audio, text, and poem that u do and u'll get major respect..muthafuckas really should quit sleepin on shit these dayz especially o.ms...o.ms CAN be dope if the real dope emcees on here take time ta do o.ms and leave feed on each others shit and stop biting shit and the open mic forum could be stronger than ever but werd keep this shit up...yo holla at me on aim if u ever wanna chat or sumthin "mc slayor"...holla anyways im out pc |
wow dat was A LOT too read lol........but fo real thanx fo da advice Alpha I really appreciate it....yea dats where i got da idea...sorry lol but im a HUGE tupac fan n i figured i'd make my own piece bout it.........but really once again thanx Alpha...People DONT SLEEP ON DIS PLZ...............oh btw will RTF Alpha......1
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no feed dont diss my crew ever again or i will rip u with every audio member of my crew ya DIG??:thumbup:
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nice way with words u got here fosho.. concept dealt with in detail.. and a kind of poetic touch to the flow/rythm..
good vocabs... word3d well yeah good drop pz |
lol NON-FIXION................................hahahahahaha hahaha.....ok now dat i got it out.........lol thanx fo da feed Vortex....uppin
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Marry Me?? :love:
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hell no why would she want u?? its me shes marrying maybe me and her can have a lil c :evilgrin: |
Lmfao that was dope.
But seriously, Lil C is fucking sexy and such. :hump: |
lol sorry Fuck im all Alpha's ;) lol awe thanx tho Fuck.......lol newayz peeps....uppin dis
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HAHA see she's in love with me :)
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^^^^^man get on msn u dumbass:shoot:
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Nice, i loved the words in this. The flow was nice and like i said b4 vocab was great. The topic was different than alot of otha om's ive read which is good. And ive heard 2pac's version b4 so it was nice to see a person tryin to come up with their own. My favorite line was definitely "I don’t care where you work, I just care if you work!". Theres so much truth to that line, u kno. But anways i'd give this piece an 8.5/10. Nice work, please return the favor on my om called Runnin'. Peace.
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Nice, Really like it, wordplay was real good, imagery real good as well, good vocab, pretty much good everything man, like the concept lots, good drop man.
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nice wordplay man dope shit.;)
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come on people...more real feed
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^^^amen to Alpha....lol
newayz thanx fo da feed u guys..............uppin dis n no doubt ill RTF.....1 |
come on people keep the feed flowin or die of a cancerous plague
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*pushes alpha out of the way*
Don't worry C, I run this shit. I'll get you real feed. Cause I'm a man :cool: |
i liked this, although i think it coulda been more effective without the vulgar profanity, but whatever, it was nice, some lines seemed outta place though, good multies, which made it flow nice, although i think some vocab was forced, even though it was fitting, it still abrupted the flow....so, handle your words a little better, come more concise, and you should be fine, keep up
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^ Told you C... you can count on me.
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lol thanx indeph n alpha much luv to both yall *muah*
thanx fo da feed drakel uppin dis........... |
maybe we can share lil c :)
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well just maybe; hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm thinks i can b shared;)lol
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lol fo real u should dump ur man buy a airplane ticket and come hook up wit this playa....u know i got those real hard abs and shit :evilgrin: yo holla at me sometime u never online :( im me on aim "mc slayor"....i'll be waiting :love: |
Well This Is What I Was Telling The Moderaters See This Right Here Is Poety Not An Open Mic Unless We're Talking Coffee Shop Poetry
But This Is Good Poetry Keep Up The Good Work |
^^^is 2 open mic:(
lol prozak DOWN BOY DOWN!!! lol....i know i aint neva online cuz of my lil boy....oh n btw READ da member mugshots I AINT w/ my man no more we done:)yea;) ill try n get on AIM tonite iight? uppin dis.....1 |
haha bitches i got the phone number to the sexiest most beatiful thing breathing :hitit2:
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whoa im the loser on here so 2 say by indeph and alpha yet they both hittin on a chick over the net...lol..indeph ur not amn u jus wish u were cuz ur lesbo and alpha if u such a pimp get a girl around you unlessthey dont show interest in you...sorry had 2 let it out muthafuckas always poppin shit 2 me so when i see sumtin left open im take it and run wit it and have fun wit it... :cussing:
n e ways back 2 the feed good girl i feel you on all aspects i hate bush he fucking daddy's boy lil bitch who wanna do nuttin in office except start pointless wars with everyone cuz he feels he gotta control the world 2 impress his pops...i can say dat cuz im prior service so i know how fucked up the government is first hand...peep my new shit in here on om called new shit...couldnt think of a name but it talks about rv's hataz,dick ridaz and how too many members sleep on each others shit feel me? :banghead: *raises hands 2 alpha and indeph and says "do u hate me cuz im white?" :huh: btw im the "essay" writer so 2 say since no seems 2 fathom my writing's whether it b song or topic but dont let these fools fool u or foil ur goodness they hataz thats why they dont like me! :thumbup: |
if this were a real song...i'd listen to it more than once.
that's really the best compliment i can give you nice shit |
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lmao i just told lil c what u said over the phone what u said....lol she just laughed at u...rappin might not really be ur gig but yo im sure the circus is lookin for some more clowns u should go apply :thumbup: |
you and the rest of the hataz on rv need 2 take wut ur name is and chill out...sum of say its all jokes and shit yet u get butt hurt and pissed when a joke is thrown back in ur face u kno taste of ur own medicine...n i can do music quite fine actually u jus an egotistic hata who has no respect for otha mc's cuz im sry 2 say but all the best have met there rest r.i.p. so quit actin like u the shizznit cuz like jadakiss says-"u jus alright you not that nice" peace...p.s. fuck you hataz 1!!!!
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holy muthafuckin shit!!! damn ppl take ur beef elsewhere LEAVE IT BE!!!!
anywayz THANX fo da feed allik i realllllllllly appreciate it......just ignore prozak he can be crazy sumtimes(just messin pro *muah*) uppin dis shit ppl...LEAVE da beef OUTTA here! |
blame your beloved prozac ma he the ignorant bitch who started with me in the first place....peep my threads in lyricist lounge you'll see just dont be a hata liek the rest of thoe chumps....no problem on the feed now keep ya word in ya post and rtf on my new shit titled new shit peace
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LMAO i think u just a playa hatin hoe...how did i start it????? did i say anything to u before u started postin that bullshit...and "IM" the ignorant one!!!???? lmao thats comin form a white kid that actually thinks the n word is ok ta say and makes u cool..how does that not make u ignorant...lmao fo real u need ta lay off the drugz and stop postin in lil c's post like u gon get her ta fall for u and knock me out over the net....yo fo real u cant do shit ta faze me..ITS THE NET that why i dont start beef over the net i just type shit back so get your monkey ass outta here and like lil c said...take it somewhere else...maybe if u can be man enough ta talk shit outside of rv then i would sorta respect u |
ok first off, i dont think there will ever be anything quite like that. i really liked ur choice and words and i got a pretty good flow off of it. brought out alot of good points that could b brought to real life. any ways i would give that a 8.5/10.
do me a favor and check out my latest called "life..." S to the Z |
^^^LMAO at ur avatar
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well alpha assassin or prozak w/e u wanna call yourself now....you started with me in my earlier post...i gave everyone my home address and its the real deal come find me and ill gladly call u a bitch 2 ur face hoe...me a playa hata wut? me want sum net chick 2 fall for me nah! i got myslef a bi fiance already so i get all da pussy i want...and last i checked ya'll faggot's...you and ur dick ridin possey are the ones hatin on me sayin im wrong for sayin nigga yet none of u bitches talkin shit are even black except maybe 1 or 2 of u the rest are jus other whites jeolous of the fact where ya'll from u get punked n bullied for sayin nigga but u kno wut bitch news flash all of america's citizen's arent that much of a baby 2 cry over spilled milk...they got bigger shit 2 worry about....war in iraq...the shit that happened on 9/11 this is now 2006 not the slave days where it was wrong 2 say shit compared 2 nigg** in any way...nigga is a ghetto term used in place of friend,homie,etc... so change ya maxi pad grow up and get over it i do wut i please online and off inside and out so fuck you
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lmao i aint ghetto and u aint ghetto niether...*uses sarcasm* yes im sooo jealous that u the most powerful white perosn out there u have the power to say the n word...dude we aint gettin bullied by u cuz u say the n word we bullying u cuz u sayin the n word....wake the hell up and stop droppin this bullshit in lil cs thread put it in the beef threads or some shit |
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