onestepbeyond vs allik war
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Biting
no hata votes
no dick riding votes
votes must be given the proper way that is explain in this forums rules
and if you a bitch who talk shit or just simply be hating dont waste your time in my battle cuz i will make sure everything described above is respected :thefinger :thumbup:

btw good lil bitch

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 01-14-06 at 07:46 PM

Must drop verse in 7200 minutes after check in.

allik war has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-09-06 07:47 PM.

OneStepBeyond has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-10-06 11:31 AM.

10 days to check and drop... Lmfao.



We can battle text or audio..... Just cause I'm hott as hell,
I'll put 2 losses under your name... like you dropped the L's.
Ya sayin' you struggled... but sorry cuz this ain't a movie kid,
Only time your girls 'bye' is when she realized who shes with,*
You're fillin your raps worse......... i'm all killin this cat's words,
say i'm wack and ya dope? i think that raw killa is backwards,
Damn.... Look boy, I'd use your sig. against you but look it cat,
Scope the shit for personals and don't know what i'm lookin at,
You ain't gonna become black, accept that you're white dawg,
Ain't shit changin no matter how many pic's you take with the lights off...

You even suck at that, what you jumped off some kids boat,
And tried to drown yourself and forgot that SHIT floats?



*He says his girl is bi. Only one I feel the need to explain...

hated on cuz im white steadily scream nigga,
"man allik war jus 1 hell of fuckin wigga"
why the fuck ya'll tryin 2 steady figure
da muthafuckin man behind my picture?//

onestepbeyond said hes gonna beat me,
i gave my address 2 come meet me,
but continue's 2 do nuttin but e-greet me,
1 of 20+ pussies who wanna defeat me//

fuck a metaphor i'll spell it out 4 u F-U-C-K Y-O-U,
this a rapsite but ya aviator show u jus a punk dude,
bang yo head against this wall :banghead:..............
like eminem"to all the people ive offended...yea F*U*2"//

hate all you want I told you " i just dont give a fuck",
but 2day,2marrow,& da next day "I still dont give a fuck"

punchin ya keyboard the only time,u can punchline(s),
im barely breakin a sweat when its crunch time,
THA Q said u aint a rapper,so wuts up wit beinan actor
performin a bully role like we was set in a school lunch time//

i break barriers of luv & hate,give new meanin 2 luvin 2 rape,
onestepbeyond,while im beyond all steps yet he stuck by 1,
havin pure fun while he stuck behind the window like drapes//

fuck it dats good enough don't care neva said i was a battle rapper i write classics i save the battles 4 emcees like eminem......get started wit the votes but absolutely no hate,dick ridin,hatin votes...nuttin but pure honest votes from realpeople like my rues state good luck...peace

and for your information you dumb fuck the lights are oncuz thats the only way our cam will work properly is if there's light n im guessin u neva lived in an rv or even went on vacation in 1 cuz if u did u would know rv lights suckass....nice drop but the shit u spittin old...u sayin the same shit these otha hataz are towards me in my otha battles(reign/dopium,young unf,etc.)good luck though cuz unlike u i have a heart and i am human so i see past the bullshit i see ur computer shittin out....

and for your information you dumb fuck the lights are oncuz thats the only way our cam will work properly is if there's light n im guessin u neva lived in an rv or even went on vacation in 1 cuz if u did u would know rv lights suckass....nice drop but the shit u spittin old...u sayin the same shit these otha hataz are towards me in my otha battles(reign/dopium,young unf,etc.)good luck though cuz unlike u i have a heart and i am human so i see past the bullshit i see ur computer shittin out....rules*

p.s. bi as far as sexual prefrence is spelt bi not bye.....
oh ur closer dont make sense how u gonna jump out a boat and land in water and realize it floats?.....if u were anything close 2 smart and tried killin urself that way ud tie a weight on so when u jump u sink....stupid ass..nice try though...

Lmao, you're an idiot and don't understand punchlines.

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

Wow.

yes i understand punchlines,multi's,personals,structure,flow,everyt hing having 2 do wit writing a rhyme...and no im not an idiot im a intelectually impaired...my mind battles itself in a never winning/never losing battle...my cerebelum is compiled of adverbs and adjectices...cerebrol is made up of verbs and nouns...my cranium is composed of vocabulary,a dictionary,thesaurus,and encyclopedia. im not 1 to brag but my 8th grade teacher loved my essay's and stories...i had an a in her class the whole year.
and my mathmatics was always top of the line blowin away calcutors wit my calculations...but i choose 2 save my knowledge 4 work and school not a website sry ya'll htaz not worth seein my intelectual level! now uppin this battle!

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

closer was funny as hell and good punch man by OneStepBeyond...why battle in this forum dawg....you got skills go to Elevated I will be thewre soon...I am newbie as they call me althoguh I ain't too bad....anyways.....good drop dawg...found it funny throughout and good punches that hit pretty well...!

Allik you are a newb....(these prove it /////)

v/OSB

o.O you the newbie yo ive been doin this rap shit since i was 15 and im 21 now...im not really the battle type ive made that known but i do it 4 practice 2 get betta at battlin but i guarentee i can write a hot song quicker than u can drop ya best 16!...
dont be like these handful of dick ridaz and hataz and come on here str8 startin shit like u kno who da fuck i am...btw no hatin but osb's closer sucked cuz made no sense if u read it and think of it...i described shit wrong/backwards dude can even spell bi* rite since my girl bye* like he said..lol loaser ass bitch...btw 4 future voters dont waste my time...remember that read the rules if u are sumtin in it than leave and make sure the link hits on ur way back 2 the other forums...n e ways thanx 4 the vote dont care who u vote for just dont b startin 2 talk shit like these other dicks who act like pussies! uppin 4 honest votes...

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

allik war

Open:weak
Close:that could've been good but the wording did it in for me
meta:No the meta's were weak
Punches:The punches had potential in a few spots but never really got done right
Multies: I guess technically the same word counts but they weren't used right
Personal: tried to use his name but wasn't great, couldve been though

Osb
Open:It was little more then decent, punch was weak but the concept was good
Close:funny, i actually laughed at that one, Not out loud but it was funny
Metas: pretty good actually
punches:I don't think the punches were so hard hitting but better then war's
Personals: pretty good actually, nothing but actually

v/OsB


war you should stop with the paragraphing, try to work on dissing more and better, be more clever with your metas and punches.....start there, osb you need to hit harder with the punches




this type of voting is wack......by the way RTF or vote wil be erased

would've been funnier to if you'd just put

:( 50 characters..................................

again i careless if i win or lose all i care about is honesty and real niggaz who dont vote simply cuz they beefin and jus bein asshole's...keep the real votes and real people and save da cryin 4 the babies!...uppin this 1 peace

You're a sore loser...............................

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

allik war-That was str8 garbage nigga it sound like you rushed through the whole thing, dissed yaself, made it look like you an eminem wannabe.

OneStepBeyond-You had this one from the start, if you just had the first two lines as your verse, I still would've voted, that topped his shit right there, better punches, everything was better.

Even when I started rappin I wasn't as bad as allik and I've only been rappin for bout five months.

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

DAmn. This wasn't even fair. But hey you tslk shit you get put in your place aye Allik? lol

aint no one put in no ones place any one thats anyone and know's me here on rv know's im not a battle rapper i jus do it 4 practice....and ya'll retarded his closer didnt make sense 4 shit if u think about it and his punches oo sayin the same shit the nigga b4 him said about me in battles b4 me n osb...and osb ur fuckin retarded wut u talkin about im a sore loser? I SAID PLAIN AND SIMPLE I DON'T CARE IF I WIN OR LOSE IM NOT A BATTLE RAPPER I WRITE MUSIC EVERY AGAIN EVERY ONE WHO'S N E 1 ON HERE AND REAL AND REALLY KNOW ME KNOW I DONT DO BATTLES MUCH I JUST DO IT 4 FUN AND PRACTICE....AND FRANK WHITE IVE BEEN RAPPIN SINCE I WAS 15 AND IM 21 NOW I KNO A WHOLE LOT MORE ABOUT HIP-HOP/RAP THAN U DO TRUST ME...IVE BEEN LISTEN 2 HIP-HOP/RAP SINCE I WAS 5 SO DON'T COME ON HERE AS A NEWBIE TALKIN OUT YO ASS KEEP THE BATTLE GOIN! ya'll sleepin on me but you'll see when i drop my next om/audio writin special 4 all u hataz n bitches sleepin on my skill

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

checkin polllzzzzzzzzzzz...........................

I could have swore you were telling OSB to battle you. SO for someone who talked big you just got lyrically ass fucked. Have a Nice Day.

And I'm a Essex County former EO runner...moved to Trenton..I rep 973 and 609. Word.

Wow Want A Cookie...i Was Born In San Diego,ca, Lived In Alexandria,va And Finsihed My Teenage Life/high School In East Brunswick,nj...so Ur A Track Star...does Dat Mean Ur Tellin Me If I Come Lookin 4 U Your Gonna Run Like A Bitch Screamin "u Can't Catch I'm The Gingerbread Man?"...btw Im A Good Runner 2....just Call Me Forest Gump,fuck Drive By,i'll Do A Run By And Leave Ya Body Lumped!

Lmfao at him trying to rhyme in every post........

Who said I ran track? I was a runner as in I ran the fuckin music scene. Fuck school athletics. And dumbass you asked where in Jerz I was from you dumb shit.

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

OneStepBeyond took this. allk's flow was good, I felt Onestep's flow more. Onestep took punches, as well, they hit a bit harder than Allk's. Multis were about even, both used a lot of 2 syllable multis that were good, I didn't feel one was better than the other. Onestep took personals because he had more of them, and they hit harder. Alik had a personal in his 2nd to last bar, but it just didn't hit as hard. Wordplay was even, it wasn't spectacular, but it was there.

Vote-OneStepBeyond

@l*f*s# and with short term memoy bein shot u think ima rememba that dummy...either way i bet my brother and his crew jersey devils betta than u anytime
his nam d.n.a. bloodline a.k.a. punch drunk but either way u wouldnt get pissy replies from me if ud jump off these hataz nuts and quit talkin shit like the rest of them...
antic thanx 4 the real honest vote....sum1 finish votin this shit who cares if i lose again cuz again im not a battle rapper i jus do it 4 fun,practice,and 2 prove i aint no bitch 2 back down 2 anybody...now thats real talk htain bitches of rv!!

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

OSB
We can battle text or audio..... Just cause I'm hott as hell,
I'll put 2 losses under your name... like you dropped the L's.
Eh, not the best punch. Nothing that original.
Ya sayin' you struggled... but sorry cuz this ain't a movie kid,
Only time your girls 'bye' is when she realized who shes with,*
Lmao. Nice personal.
You're fillin your raps worse......... i'm all killin this cat's words,
say i'm wack and ya dope? i think that raw killa is backwards,
Good play on his name.
Damn.... Look boy, I'd use your sig. against you but look it cat,
Scope the shit for personals and don't know what i'm lookin at,
Eh, not feeling this personal.
You ain't gonna become black, accept that you're white dawg,
Ain't shit changin no matter how many pic's you take with the lights off...
Ohhhhh ish. Nice personal.
You even suck at that, what you jumped off some kids boat,
And tried to drown yourself and forgot that SHIT floats?
Eh, this was ok.

Overall, you've got some nice punches, but you also have some lines I don't like. Just keep getting better bro.

allik war
hated on cuz im white steadily scream nigga,
"man allik war jus 1 hell of fuckin wigga"
why the fuck ya'll tryin 2 steady figure
da muthafuckin man behind my picture?//
No punch.
onestepbeyond said hes gonna beat me,
i gave my address 2 come meet me,
but continue's 2 do nuttin but e-greet me,
1 of 20+ pussies who wanna defeat me//
No punch.
fuck a metaphor i'll spell it out 4 u F-U-C-K Y-O-U,
this a rapsite but ya aviator show u jus a punk dude,
bang yo head against this wall ..............
like eminem"to all the people ive offended...yea F*U*2"//
No punch.
hate all you want I told you " i just dont give a fuck",
but 2day,2marrow,& da next day "I still dont give a fuck"
No punch
punchin ya keyboard the only time,u can punchline(s),
im barely breakin a sweat when its crunch time,
THA Q said u aint a rapper,so wuts up wit beinan actor
performin a bully role like we was set in a school lunch time//
Finally, a punch. Weak and played.
i break barriers of luv & hate,give new meanin 2 luvin 2 rape,
onestepbeyond,while im beyond all steps yet he stuck by 1,
havin pure fun while he stuck behind the window like drapes//
Bad attempt at personal.

Honestly man, this verse was straight out the worst thing I've ever read. You had two punches, which both sucked. You just tried to anticipate his punches, which didn't work. You need to work on actually making punches. You self glorify mostly.

onestepbeyond said hes gonna beat me,
i gave my address 2 come meet me,
but continue's 2 do nuttin but e-greet me,
1 of 20+ pussies who wanna defeat me//

Try this:

I leave this dude like the other pussies wantin me, down,
I gave him my address, yet I'm still not hearin any sound.

Or something like that. I'm not the best text battler, but you need to really diss, not just try and counter all his p unches.
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Overall, OSB got this easy.

OneStepBeyond