FIVESTAR GENERAL vs young money
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 02-25-06 at 12:30 PM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

Young Money has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-23-06 04:09 PM.

Im deadly in THIRD-PERSON as money hit this Busta the verb of HERB-WORSEN,

Ill show the action of a CURB-CURSE-SON that you couldnt 'Fly the craving of death' with bread like BIRDz-THIRST-ON//

-5star walk with a SIDE-SWITCH when i drop'em with WIDE-PITCH,

str8 aim at ya homo PRIDE-TRICK when it's 'ludacris magic to find his gender' Like "HIDE-BITCH"//

5star ur sixteen-u.dont.KNOW-the.MEANING-of.LOVE, grab da VASALINE-
n.go.SOLO-DAYDREAMING-n.member.da.GLOVE/

ur not even a full TEEN-u.cant.GO-n.be.SEENIN-da.CLUB, disect ur head 2 ur SPLEEN-oh.NO-ur.gurls.SCREAMIN-cuzs.u.dead.inda.TUB/

ur bitches name is karen, hope u might be sharrin, dont matter i see wut shes wearin/
i go grab her hair.n, smack her with out even "caren", she get all mad n starts swearin, clawin, n.tearin/

choke her so hard she cant get air.in, now she lays lifeless just staring, murked u n ur bitch wit des rhymes dat im baren/

FIVESTAR GENERAL has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-24-06 09:20 PM.

aite here i go-
This catz a foney loves ta talk about guns an killin people/
Money's a fake and hes sweet n' low like e-qual*/
I kill niggaz wit da flow, barz wit em hard like bullets/
If he gota revolver it mus gotta " push" sign on it cuz he wont "pull" it**/
You a imitation, a young counterfeit/
prolly runnin around his house ina ballerina outfit/
U notta rapper B, u 20 yrs. old got out n geta life/
ain gon amount ta shit,you jus a stay at home wife/
So don test me chump, give u a rumble if u wanna fight/
this a verbal shoot-out, an it lookin like u brought a butterknife/
U don stand a chance, Battle or run-don matter your decision/
Cuz at hittin movin targets im 20-20 like my vision/
pistol percision, launch strait slugs out da barrell/
Give u da buziness like anchor man will farrell/
You a jabber-jaw an itz startin 2 offend me/
U stay tellin tall tales about banging hammers like john henry/
Yea tha general, im nice an smooth like im "gellin"/
i don repect niggaz who like rappers who do tattle tellin/
This fag prolly jack off to the thoughts of a predicated felon/
ill pop ya melon, put a calico rite through ya cerebellum/
Thats enuff of that gun talk 4 now ima put away da chrome/
Neva seen a male so happy dat tony yayo is home/
Get off his dick,money stop bein a lil bitch/
Grow up, patna realize dat dis rap shit ain ya nitch/
Stop talkin bout sellin cuz in PE is tha only time you pitch/
Pussy,i hate to go ta war witta grown ass rookie....
But ima devoure u like cookie monster do a cookie/
it da general i "slipp knot", i hard rock it/
Dis kid needs ta start borrowin lines from andy milanokis/
cuz i cant teach u, shit itz beneath me 2 even defeat u/
U ain fuckin wit me money, ya cant see me like im see-through/
im lyrically robbin dis nigga takin his pension/
dis battle iz one-side an im tha only dimension***/
An in conclusion ya weak da weight u cant carry/
N u about as criminal as tha virgin mary/


Xplanations-
*2 diferent kinds of artificial sugar
** a play on words revolver and revolving doors the ones with the push sign and the pull sign
***refering to a one-dimendional object im tha only on winnin

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Voted For: FIVESTAR GENERAL

5 star easily had the better verse and the harder hitting disses... YM was harsh in what he had to say... but there really weren't too many actual disses in his verse... more over he concentrated way too much on just spitting multies... alot of which were forced... Multis will never win you a battle... at least not coupled with something else... like hmmm say punches

Punches: 5 Star
Personals: 5 Star
Creativity: 5 Stars
Complexity: 5 Star
Enjoyment: 5 Star

Vote: 5 Star... this wasn't even remotely close

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Voted For: Young Money

o/k to be honest neither is great, infact both need a fair bit of work

but

imma give this to young- had slightly beta punches, both had decnt enough flow although some of five stars stuff didnt rhyme, example last bar - carry and mary don't rhyme

anyway young gets this

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This was feedback posted for Young Money
 

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Voted For: Young Money

Seen as how your online, you can RTF In my battle with *Antic* :)

Fivestar:

too much man, you could of removed ALOT Of uneccessary rhymes from yur verse.

I kill niggaz wit da flow, barz wit em hard like bullets/
If he gota revolver it mus gotta " push" sign on it cuz he wont "pull" it**/
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that was aight, Nice creativity, could of used it a litle more effecitevly tho.

So don test me chump, give u a rumble if u wanna fight/
this a verbal shoot-out, an it lookin like u brought a butterknife/
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thats one of your better bars too...

You a jabber-jaw an itz startin 2 offend me/
U stay tellin tall tales about banging hammers like john henry/
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LOL

Ifthe rest of your verse would of been like those bars there, you would of ripped this dude, for real.



Money:
str8 aim at ya homo PRIDE-TRICK when it's 'ludacris magic to find his gender' Like "HIDE-BITCH"//
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that was aight, I'm feelin that...

besides that bar, nothin much else to quote

I'll brake it down:
personals (non really, but I guess Money had that ''Karen'' bar, so I'll go with him on that)
Multies = Money
Punches = Fivestar
Flow = Money

the mettas wernt strog here either

for more consistancy and fluency in his verse, Money gets my vote

RTF Money.

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Voted For: FIVESTAR GENERAL

Parlae to me sucks ass for real. his multis are retarted and are just there cuz he thinks they sound good. Iv'e seen how multis can turn a battle around and ur shit was a cheap counterfeit on the real. next time, make sure that shit made sence dawg. 5star....so ur a pussy ass sailor? look into the history of a 5 star general. Im voting for you cuz your verse made more sence but it really needs work as far as structure, flow and punchlines. keep elivating ya'll

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This was feedback posted for FIVESTAR GENERAL
 

I just want to check the polls .

This was feedback posted for Young Money
 

.checkin the polls....././.........................

uppin for sum fuckin votes

can somebody close this shit or vote on it or something

Voted For: FIVESTAR GENERAL

Mmmm...this is gonna be a tuff one...5star got it, Even tho' though Money had some serious flows, star got straight to the point with his punches

vote or close this shit can anybody tell me whó the mod is

Voted For: FIVESTAR GENERAL

This catz a foney loves ta talk about guns an killin people/
Money's a fake and hes sweet n' low like e-qual*/
I kill niggaz wit da flow, barz wit em hard like bullets/
If he gota revolver it mus gotta " push" sign on it cuz he wont "pull" it**/

i was really feeling these two bars.....lol they took his entire verus...

Voted For: FIVESTAR GENERAL

ok this battle was not that great to be honest but this was clearly a one sided affair though because while the first dude was just droppin all the bullshit he could as long as it was multies, the second dude was actually making a genuine attempt to throw actual punches

it seems like the second guy was the only one attempting to throw punches even though i was seein real weak shit coming from you, in future do less lines so you are concentrating all your punches into less space it would make the verse hit harder overall

also you both need to come with alot more creativity