H.D. vs BlAzInHoT
 

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Topic: You Envision Your Own Death, Explain What It Is And How You Go About Preventing/Avoiding It. Are You Successful?


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Check in by: 03-01-06 at 01:42 AM

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H.D. has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-26-06 07:53 PM.

BlAzInHoT has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-27-06 02:38 AM.

I pop damn quickly up from my~bed, got sweat covering my~head
from the dream i had of what lies ahead that left my life dead

turn to look at the~clock, only 2,heartpumpin from the~shock
to my bathroom i~walk, drink some water than a lugee i~hauck

return to my~bed, try to sleep but the vision of when i~bled
afta my friends gun fed all them golden bullets into my~head

still fresh in my~mind,but thinkin its a nitemare,hes my~kind
drift away, fallin bak to sleep he wouldnt do that i~remind

myself, the next morning i hear banging on the door,open~it
its him Lue, and he says look at this as his hand opens~shit

i think, then he says he got them this morning golden bullets
his voice happy telling me how he got em n how fukin cool shit

i say in shock i stumble~back,he says you ok n i grumble~back
and that i didnt feel good n he left as he replied thats wack

searching my brain for my nice~dream,remembered we had ice~cream
when i was shot by one of my team, and that Tyra had screamed

hadnt seen that bitch in a year~though, shed moved a year~ago
den my phone rings n a cheers~goes IT TYRA, n the spear~goes

into my heart, could my dream be~true, i ask is that really~you
she says yea n asks if we could do something, she said ill see~you

when we get some ice~cream at the mall,say mabye as my advice~dream
pops into my head, tell her ill call her latta bout that ice~cream

then i say wait, how bout pizza at~Jays, she agrees says thats~ok
we say goodbye and hang up, afta that i lay down for a nap~may-

be ill have different dream of my horrifying future ahead~now,
i start dreaming n a picture of me at jays flashes there dead~now

i wake up screaming, can i exscape~it? its my dream cant i shape~it?
quickly fall bak to asleep n see the gun next to me head n awake~sit

up i didnt die in my dream, will i tonight? to live ill try to~fight
i go to Jays shivering from fright wit my skin pale almost white

I see Lue he gets up says what the fuk man, why you sleeping~wit
my girl. i say dont no shit man, then the bullets start leaping~get

hit in the chest fall on the floor, says good bye n i get more
Last sound i hear Tyra screaming STOP IT, I CANT TAKE ANYMORE

Damn I’m so tired, I feel my eyes seal, and feel the call of death’s beckon
Oh shit, I steel my life away from death by nanoseconds, grab the wheel
Swerving just outta the path of extinction, in a state of panic make a left
But lose control; flip the car set it a roll, into a massive telephone pole
Ahhrrr I hear moaning, I must be zoning, I’m honing in on hell’s sonar
Like my soul pick’s up devilish radar, I envision depicted imagery of me
Becoming a casualty, laying on a curb, but the details appear blurred
That’s when I heard, “gimmie your hand” it sounded like a demand
I open my eyes to a policeman, “we had to use the Jaws of Life device
But you appear aight… minor scrapes and bruises, contusions
A knocked tooth in, but if you’re picky Lucifer’s choosin’, what happened here?”
I answer em swerved to void an ambulance, lost control and hit a pole
That’s all I know, must been knocked unconscious, he said “proceed couscous”
I talked to the medics a bit, than told em I needed some time to myself
Thankx them for their efforts and told them I’m in good health
This shit’s a shock to my system but at least I wasn’t a victim
And no one else seems involved, harmed or even really alarmed
My charm seems to work on more than just women, but those visions
Gotta shake em, get my thoughts in order, where’s my lucky quarter?
I’m concentrated poking around on the ground when I see it on the curb
Blaim it on my ADD, cause all I heard was muffled words, than nothing
………

A tow truck driver realizes he just backed over something
A headless body with blood gushing

come on yall this has been up since last month...
and there still hasn't been a single vote yet...
Fucking vote people...

yeah some I'm gonna have to up this...

yeah pretty much...

Vote mutha~fuckas

yeah soooo I'm uppin' this again

yo homoooooooooos fukin vote would ya





NOW

yeah so I'mma gonna up this again, and again, and again... untill yall start voting on this shit

hmmmmmm yeah this has been up a couple of months now...

So if somebody voted... it would be real nice...

Don't you think?

Voted For: H.D.

how do i say wak in 50 words or more?..............just copy and paste both ur verse together.lmfao@ this fucking battle

^ my bad...that was actually feedback...get the vote taken off if u want.

^ you vs. me Topical... pick a topic ... Put up or Shut up

.... ... .. . still need some mutha~fuckin' votes... ante up

This was feedback posted for H.D.
 

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Voted For: H.D.

H.D.....it was really hard to get going in yours at first...but in the end it really flowed sick...i saw where you rhymed n shit...it was just a bitch to figure out at first.....other dude was just to forced.....otherwise he could have taken it...

good job to both