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carmelo vs Premanition
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6 - 10 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 03-04-06 at 03:22 PM Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in. |
Carmelo has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-04-06 02:42 PM.
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Premanition has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-04-06 02:51 PM.
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prems the type to cause hype and immitate Vets Style.
Next he'll be ''knittin yarn'' for a better Text-style (textile) Not that your a biter, I'm sure deep down theres a Fighter.. But Your Mind must be like ''Dim Authors''.. ..................................I think you need a Brighter writer. Ignite your pen with a lighter, Shit call on the Brigade!!... Or you could resort to plan B... ...........................And tell everyone you have aids Atleast nobody gon fuck wit ya, hold your head up high Cause if I was you & I started rhymin .........................................even i'd be askin...WHY? |
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. . The chance of melo hurtin me is like a daylight burglary Its minimal u learn from me with scriptures causin surgery can’t compare me to you, no debate, god damn bitch elevate you far from great, carmelo only poetical when he masterbate five thousand posts, no life and still you learning the basics this fake kid neva get the picture, so I grab a pen and trace it face it you excavate in life, as a personality you not distinct not good with words but ur record indicates ur hot with links carmelo? Yeh but Anthony can reply when the orders tall whereas you can’t ‘hit’ anything, you must have swollen balls * . . . . *swollen balls – himself & swollen ball not goin through hoop |
Good shit....
Lets get some voters on this... Bump. |
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Voted For: Premanition
Premanition: The chance of melo hurtin me is like a daylight burglary Its minimal u learn from me with scriptures causin surgery 5/10 - Good Opener. can’t compare me to you, no debate, god damn bitch elevate you far from great, carmelo only poetical when he masterbate 5/10 - Good Punch. five thousand posts, no life and still you learning the basics this fake kid neva get the picture, so I grab a pen and trace it 7/10 - Niice. face it you excavate in life, as a personality you not distinct not good with words but ur record indicates ur hot with links 5/10 - Good Punch. carmelo? Yeh but Anthony can reply when the orders tall whereas you can’t ‘hit’ anything, you must have swollen balls * 3/10 - Weak Closer. 25/50 You used a good verse here, your punches where hitten hard good personals and wordplay. I liked your flow it was a overall tight battle verse. Im Carmelo Yall: prems the type to cause hype and immitate Vets Style. Next he'll be ''knittin yarn'' for a better Text-style (textile) 2/10 - Weak Opener. Not that your a biter, I'm sure deep down theres a Fighter.. But Your Mind must be like ''Dim Authors''.. ..................................I think you need a Brighter writer. 6/10 - Good Wordplay. Ignite your pen with a lighter, Shit call on the Brigade!!... Or you could resort to plan B... ...........................And tell everyone you have aids 5/10 - Good Punch. Atleast nobody gon fuck wit ya, hold your head up high Cause if I was you & I started rhymin .........................................even i'd be askin...WHY? 4/10 - OK Closer. 17/40 You had a pretty good verse, you used some decent punches and good wordplay, it flowed good as well. OVERALL - This was a good battle right here. But Prem gets the vote becuz he used funnier punches and good wordplay, his also flowed better. His vocab was better and it rhymed niice. Carmelo you had a good verse as well, your vocab just wasnt as good, and you didnt use as many punches. Vote - Prem RTF in SIG! |
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Voted For: Carmelo
prems the type to cause hype and immitate Vets Style. Next he'll be ''knittin yarn'' for a better Text-style (textile) Not that your a biter, I'm sure deep down theres a Fighter.. But Your Mind must be like ''Dim Authors''.. ..................................I think you need a Brighter writer. VS five thousand posts, no life and still you learning the basics this fake kid neva get the picture, so I grab a pen and trace it carmelo? Yeh but Anthony can reply when the orders tall whereas you can’t ‘hit’ anything, you must have swollen balls I got this tied on quotables but to me teph came more consistant with punches, his textstyle line was executed well. Prem, you had a couple of ok punches but your verse wasnt as consistant. you had the better flow but not as hard punches. V./ carmelo NO HATE RTF IN SIG PLEASE |
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Voted For: Premanition
Vote - Premanition Pretty decent drops from both, here's my breakdown. Flow- Carmelo. I could see that bein' done in audio, it flowed well. Premanition had an alright flow, but it wasn't as nice as Carmelo's. Punches- Premanition. Played punches from both. Neither cat had any punches that made me go "ouch"...Premantion had more heat on his punches, more of a "fuck you" tone to his punches. Carmelo had some alright punches, but I just felt Premanition's more. Personals- Premanition. Check his last bar, that was the only hard hitting personal in the entire battle. No attempts from Carmelo for personals. Wordplay- Carmelo. His wasn't as played Premanition's wordplay, though both cats were pretty basic with their concepts. Multis- Tie. Some decent multis from both, but nothing that made one cat stand above the other. So there you have it. I thought Premanition had harder punches, and a better closer, i.e. the personal in the last bar. If yall could RTF in Antic vs. Rexless, that'd kick ass. 1 |
Uhhh, Nah.
Buuuumpin'.................................. |
Voted For: Premanition
it was a good battl3 n all but i say u won u had peace Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Carmelo
premanition: The chance of melo hurtin me is like a daylight burglary Its minimal u learn from me with scriptures causin surgery ^^^UHH NOT REALLY A DISS 2 ME can’t compare me to you, no debate, god damn bitch elevate you far from great, carmelo only poetical when he masterbate ^^^NAH five thousand posts, no life and still you learning the basics this fake kid neva get the picture, so I grab a pen and trace it ^^^WEAK...PICTURE LINE'S R KIND OF PLAYED face it you excavate in life, as a personality you not distinct not good with words but ur record indicates ur hot with links ^^^NO carmelo? Yeh but Anthony can reply when the orders tall whereas you can’t ‘hit’ anything, you must have swollen balls ^^^BEST LINE IN YA VERSE carmelo:prems the type to cause hype and immitate Vets Style. Next he'll be ''knittin yarn'' for a better Text-style (textile) ^^^GOOD OPENER Not that your a biter, I'm sure deep down theres a Fighter.. But Your Mind must be like ''Dim Authors''.. ..................................I think you need a Brighter writer. ^^UHH DECENT I GUESS Ignite your pen with a lighter, Shit call on the Brigade!!... Or you could resort to plan B... ...........................And tell everyone you have aids ^^NAH Atleast nobody gon fuck wit ya, hold your head up high Cause if I was you & I started rhymin .........................................even i'd be askin...WHY? ^^^^LOL DIS SHIT WAS WACK.. V/carmelo...easily |
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Voted For: Carmelo
Damn, BoTh Had Hot ass Shyt.....but I liked the way Carmelo Ended his Shyt better..... . .Overall FaCtz.. PRE: dude you had some mad hot lines, only thing u fucked up was ya shyt got borin at the end.. the swollen balls thing.....*thump* if u would have left that out, u woulda got my vote DAWG... ya best lines to me was... "five thousand posts, no life and still you learning the basics this fake kid neva get the picture, so I grab a pen and trace it" lol.......nice personal...datz fucked up though 5000 still in front lines..haha.. overall...ya verse was banging, ya last lines just fucked it up...and i dun like the way ur verse looks either...its too plain...lol....put some dots...ore some slashes...nice shyt though.. Carmelo: Ya Shyt, Flowed well even though u didnt have multis and i think there was a personal i dunno but newayz , i hate the ............ thingy, but i guess, it makes the Point....Ya best lines to me was: "prems the type to cause hype and immitate Vets Style. Next he'll be ''knittin yarn'' for a better Text-style (textile" that was creative, and str8 liked that much... "Atleast nobody gon fuck wit ya, hold your head up high Cause if I was you & I started rhymin .........................................even i'd be askin...WHY" lol....that was funni.....cuz u left dude grimey with that, i loved the outro... Overall ya Verse was onpoint, i just hate them damn DOTZ....u got em.. sO VOTE:cARMELO.. But i was more into |
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Voted For: Premanition
alright i wasn't enjoyin in this at all..the lines for melos verse were stretched, not hard hitting, un-personal, and not very dope...the punchlines where whack as a matter of fact...and premanition..your verse wasn't much better..but you had a couple decent lines that won it over for me.....i feel like you should have been able to do a lot better than this too...but this battle was a waist of my time to read..wasn't even worth the 25 rv Crew vote removed |
crew vote?
shit i didnt even know he was in A.I uppin |
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Voted For: Carmelo
i voted for carmelo he had better rymes and flow pre. u had some good stuff but carm just over played u no hate Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Carmelo
yea that aids line was pretty funny lol. anyways really like this and didnt take much effort. but pre did really good too. so keep yall heads up players and keep it droping. Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Carmelo
The chance of melo hurtin me is like a daylight burglary Its minimal u learn from me with scriptures causin surgery dis line wuld of been good in a freestyle can’t compare me to you, no debate, god damn bitch elevate you far from great, carmelo only poetical when he masterbate waznot feelin dis five thousand posts, no life and still you learning the basics this fake kid neva get the picture, so I grab a pen and trace it dat wuz ight face it you excavate in life, as a personality you not distinct not good with words but ur record indicates ur hot with links boring carmelo? Yeh but Anthony can reply when the orders tall whereas you can’t ‘hit’ anything, you must have swollen balls gud name play prems the type to cause hype and immitate Vets Style. Next he'll be ''knittin yarn'' for a better Text-style (textile) gud opener Not that your a biter, I'm sure deep down theres a Fighter.. But Your Mind must be like ''Dim Authors''.. ..................................I think you need a Brighter writer. dat wuz ok Ignite your pen with a lighter, Shit call on the Brigade!!... Or you could resort to plan B... ...........................And tell everyone you have aids Atleast nobody gon fuck wit ya, hold your head up high Cause if I was you & I started rhymin .........................................even i'd be askin...WHY? i liked dis closer dat woz nyce oonly da closer and opener seperated da 2 verses so carmelo getz mah vote |
Voted For: Carmelo
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Voted For: Carmelo
OPENER-CARMELO CLOSER-TIE PUNCHES-CARMELO MULTIS-CARMELO GOOD BATTLE |
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