I Am Unreal. vs T.r.oo.P
 

Battle Rules:

20-40 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Topic: Why? (Always wanted to try this one...)

3 to check, 3 to drop.

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 06-01-06 at 03:44 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

I Am Unreal. has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-30-06 03:27 PM.

Dear God:
I wish to make a deal. A proposition, if just someday…
-I pledge to be honest; I’ll even go to church on Sundays
Only for one thing… And I’m sorry I have to ask but…
Wait… Let me start over…
….You know I’ve always loved you right? Had faith and trust?
So why’d you have to go and abandon us?!
How much longer must I repent and cry?
I’ll resent and die, c’mon just tell me why!

Elated on air, Allah, here he sits and listens
Has no reasons for one’s trouble but christens
the poor Christian with a silent thought
Distraught, he wonders what was taught
through the rotting of his parent’s past
God sighs, then laughs…
He holds no response within his defining light
But applies the question to his mind, “Why?”
Why not?

Answer me GOD! Why won’t you help me?
Why, WHY?! Is it because you resent me?
Growing unhealthy, the Christian stops and blinks
Answer me now! His excitement rises, then sinks
As he averts his eyes to the kitchen sink, a twinkling object
sits, to be twisted into his wrists…
He slits, the blood spills the reddish tinge of conflict
Shit… SHIT I’m going to die!!

And there God thinks, But why?
Haven’t I made all people equal with a chance to succeed?
Provided the path, paved it, and they destroy it with greed
Now they’re pleading for forgiveness, ruined my work
The body is my temple and they destroyed it, those jerks
I laugh when they ask for a second chance…
And why?

Then with one last gasp the Christian asks, then sighs…
Why not?

T.r.oo.P has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-31-06 01:05 PM.

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righ.....this is why i dont battle here no mo.....

This was feedback posted for T.r.oo.P
 

This was a dope battle, I am's verse won it
but troop come dope dropping some really shit,...

Uping this for my boys stay up both

1~

Voted For: T.r.oo.P

deep thoughts from both sides but i think troop got this for being more down to earth with his concept...he spoke more on reality and his whole verse was so true...he had a better flow and gd sequence of the whole scenario..unreal had a nice concept there too but at lots of points i cudnt understand the question he was actually askin God..plus he talks about christians and then calls God Allah...outta point to me there...troop,yeah had more vocab and his verse was more touching...so with this he gets my vote

props to both tho....

click my sig...thank you

Voted For: I Am Unreal.

vote goes to Unreal... both had nice, unique interpretations, but Lucky fell off on the last stanza... u completely lost it... it was too... it's hard to explain... it was too song-ish, and lost reality... sorta reminded me of Jadakiss's flow, but u lost it when it was more about rhyming, and less about the story... both were good, keep writing... 1...

1-1 finally some votes

of course it was a good battle

its AI in the muthafuckin building

lol we run the show.... as for christians calling god allah: allah is just another term for god, it can be implied in all religions that believe in "God"

v/ rv vs ai.

This was feedback posted for I Am Unreal.
 

this battle sucked..you both need to do audio and quit with this gay ass text

Voted For: T.r.oo.P

Troop Gots my vote cus his verse was like a hook it kept draggin me into it more and more kinda like a stephen king book always wanting more out of it and shit. but yea I liked troops more cus his was more detailsh to me and also reminds me of a poem I wrote myself. unreal yours was good to but I wasnt feeling yours asmuch as I was Troops. So anyways Fam keep it up and keep droppin them good topicals.

my vote goes to - Troop.

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Voted For: T.r.oo.P

My vote goes to Troop

Flow-Troop
ur flow was on point, easy to go along wit nce structure n all

Story Telling-Troop
You def. had me wit da story, ha me wanting to keep reading

Lyrical Ability-IAU
your shit was more poetic n dat was a nice plus, keep work'n wit that

Overral
IAU-you really shuldnt look at it as a lost bcuz if it was any other battle u wulda won, so jus keep at it, it was real nice.

Troop-you won bcuz u jus kept it real, like it ws easy to flow to, nice story u had goin, good interlude, good drop mos def.

Vote/ Troop

4sho good lookin fam

Uppin 4 the win......................

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Voted For: T.r.oo.P

Unreal

Dear God:
I wish to make a deal. A proposition, if just someday…
-I pledge to be honest; I’ll even go to church on Sundays
Only for one thing… And I’m sorry I have to ask but…
Wait… Let me start over…
….You know I’ve always loved you right? Had faith and trust?
So why’d you have to go and abandon us?!
How much longer must I repent and cry?
I’ll resent and die, c’mon just tell me why!

Elated on air, Allah, here he sits and listens
Has no reasons for one’s trouble but christens
the poor Christian with a silent thought
Distraught, he wonders what was taught
through the rotting of his parent’s past
God sighs, then laughs…
He holds no response within his defining light
But applies the question to his mind, “Why?”
Why not?

Answer me GOD! Why won’t you help me?
Why, WHY?! Is it because you resent me?
Growing unhealthy, the Christian stops and blinks
Answer me now! His excitement rises, then sinks
As he averts his eyes to the kitchen sink, a twinkling object
sits, to be twisted into his wrists…
He slits, the blood spills the reddish tinge of conflict
Shit… SHIT I’m going to die!!

And there God thinks, But why?
Haven’t I made all people equal with a chance to succeed?
Provided the path, paved it, and they destroy it with greed
Now they’re pleading for forgiveness, ruined my work
The body is my temple and they destroyed it, those jerks
I laugh when they ask for a second chance…
And why?

Then with one last gasp the Christian asks, then sighs…
Why not?

ok this was a good piece theres alot i liked bout it..it had good imagery in some parts it also had some of emotion behind it..probly could of had more but not bad..vocab was good could of been better..but besides that this was a good drop

Luciano

*Stands By My Dieing Comrads Hospital Bed*

*Watches His Vitals Go Flat.......He's Gone*

Dear Lord "Why"....... didnt you Put us in a Better Position
"Why" .....werent we relocated to a better Living Condition
"Why".... .were we placed in this Situation in the 1st Place
"Why" did He have 2 Suffer From Severe Wounds 2 His Face
"Why"... is he Convulsing.... into this Functionless Vegetable
"Why" is a Brother who has Intelligence No longer Respectable
"Why" Do we Subdue...... 2 The Hypocritic Visions of Children
That in the End Turn there Back on who Fucking Built Them
"WHY" did He have 2 Die.."Why" must we Cry...................
For 4 Hours when you Knew he wasent gonna make it By......
The First Bullet that got Lodged Into the Skull of His Cranium
"Why" are we Weak 2 the Same Streets that are Playin Em...


"Officer"...
*Excuse Me...can u tell u give us any info on the shooting?*

"Jimmy"
*Wtf...is that all ya Care About...cant u see he's Dead*

"Officer"
*I just have a few Questions Sir*

"Jimmy"
*NO i have a few Questions 4 You SIR!!

"Why" do these Fucking Pigs.. not care about who was Shot
But Instantly Interview Me on Who's Hot Or Not on the Block
"Why" ...am i asking these Questions or these Speculections
"Why". do u Look at Us Blacks like we dont have Educations
"Why" do you believe your Billy Bad Ass when u get a Badge
"Why" if a White Women Calls you dont take an Hour & Half
But if a Black Calls it takes you 2 Hrs......"Why" do the Math
"Why" when you See a Homeless Pedestrian You Must Laugh
"Why" when you See Freestyling on the block..u end the Fun
"Why" do you believe your above anyone cuz u have a Gun?

"Doctor"
*Im Sorry We Couldnt Save Him...Does he have a Family?

"Jimmy"
*No...But can i ask u a Question?*

"Why" when he was rushed in...you didnt even try 2 Hurry
"Why"... if you dont have insurance you Stop the Surgery
"Why" do only care bout the Pension... and not Who's He
"Why" do White Doctors Outnumber Blks Twenty to Three
Do you feel your better than me..because you have a blade
"Why" ..if you cant pay your debt's you treat us as a slave
"Why"... with all your research cant stop aids when a Lens
"Why" cant u Pay his Debt if your gettin to work in a Benz?
"Why" do ya only wanna know...His credit type and his Name
"Why" do u leave the hospital in worst condition than u came?

*Fuck This....Gathers My Friends Things..Gives My Rest In Peace

Then Leaves........

im feelin this piece its greatly explained and it has good imagery
made it seem more realistic..could actually seein this happen
emotion was iight in this drop..prolly could of been better this drop was nice showed ur creativety also vocab was ok..could of been better..otherwise this was a nice drop

this one was kinda close
but i vote luciano for reasons above
V/Luciano

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Voted For: T.r.oo.P

I give dis joint to Luciano. Not only did u have a good flow but u talked about some real shit. I respect for that. Thats real dude. Yeah that joint was viscious. To my man I Am Unreal u was alright i like ur last verse da best. I did not feel u like i felt Luciano. Good delivery though for both parties. Much love ~1~