Best Song I've Ever Done!!!!!!
 

Yo, I'm really feeling this song, so I could really care less what anyone else thinks, but I feel I should atleast share the dopeness :thumbup:

But for real, it's a song about my kids that I did for the audio topical league that I think turned out real good, so criticize away....

All That Matters


PS.....B. Magik Made This Dope Ass Beat!!!!!!!!!!!


Leave a link.....I guarantee I'll return the favor :thumbup:


Links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235194
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235210

wow dude, I love how you wrote this for ya kids. Something they can listen to when they get older, that's so fuckin deadly!. I love the hook it's very catchy and I think I can agree with you on this being ya best shit. The lyrics are so deadly and true from the heart. Your flow is on lock with this beat too, overall this is gettin downloaded and what not. I love your shit man peace! rtf please: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235147

listning-beatz nice........first verse....flows nice.........deleverys sick as hell.......lyrics r dopness hookz on nice real fast an its ill.....second verse....fuck man this is some dope sit fer real lyrics was deep as hell i gotta baby boi due any day......an werd this track is fucking hott im on my way to bed or i woulda left nicer feed third verse is also sick u killed this shit period dogg hott ish
10/10 propz famo

contolled chaos hahahha.... sickness right here....

this is hittin hard cuz we spoke on some of this shit in this verse.... so i can relate to this track a lot more.... im lovin this ... puttin down the mic to watch dora explorer with your daughter.... thats real son... you came off as a centered family man... and this track solidifys that for me.... this is real man... most deff something imma DL and bump in the whip...

ps... my girl takin a Pregnancy test today... she late.... so... there might be a baby Bronsky on the way... lol.... Stoked....

FAMILY IS ALL THAT FUCKIN MATTERS


werd to that shit

10/10

-Don Tito Bronsky

i like the beat. real smooth. flow is a lil different, but it seems to have some rhythem. lyrics are good. delivery is decent. chorus is nice, flow gets better here. 2nd verse is better then verse 1, but theres not a large difference in sound, im feelin it. verse 3 is better then verse 1, but not quite as good as verse 2, good overall track. sounds like some kanye shit.

show this man some love

I like it alot.

Yeah, thats gone be really cool for your kids when they hear it in a few years.

Beat is nice.

Flow is nice.

Ya put alot of passion into this.

wow, i'm not even gonna leave much feed here cuz im lazy
but basically, this track was for the fam....more specifically your kids....sounded good.....and came from the heart

you get a 10/10 just based on that

pz

Word....thanks for all the love on this track fellas :thumbup:

ths sounds like the type of shyt i would write! i got songs like this that i never recorded... this shyt is a perfect 10, dunny!

the flow...the beat... the lyrics.... the whole damn thing was just off da meters... (damn, i gotta up my game after this one)...

now, y'all know i don't usually leave feed on the OYD fam cuz of all the hataz and shyt that claim how we be riding each other and shyt.,.. but this is one of those exceptional tracks that i just had to say sumn about and show the love... this shyt was genuine and from the heart...

and being that i got 3 kids of my own and just happened to be former military i can relate to every aspect of this joint

Definitely going in the whip!

Word....thanks man :thumbup:

LOL sounds like some elavator music!!! i like it lol beats tight

On some real shit lyrics were really tight....flow was really nice...good change ups.
Had me bobbing my head

Hook was Really Good.....

You should have turned up ur vocals up a little bit and it'da been better

but this shit is really good

keep it up man

ayo i left feed on this from the tournament but i'll do it again.

when i first read that u made it for ur kids, i thought i might not give u honest feed cause its for ur kids. but this song was actually a cool song. jus the fact that u made it for them says a lot. i thought that was real cool.

lyrically u kinda opened up quite a bit. ur flow was on point man. theres nothing i can really say about this. good job. ur kids should be proud of u

uppin this for da fam..... y'all gotta feel this!

best song you ever did? isn this the first ?lol uppppppppppppppppppp

By The Way I Made This Fucking Beat! Where The Fuck Are My Production Credits You Fuck?!?!

They're in the desription of the song ass fuck :thumbup:

haaa he said assfuck

Alright before I start I want to say I applaud the idea, an the intention of this track. Writing a song to your kids is great. an I agree this is the best song I've heard from you, never heard you get personal or tell a story before. Now, all the sentimental stuff aside, from a technical an sonic side this song falls start of the mark. First you used the same rapid fire flow u use on bangers wit less intensity, I mean I am putting myself in the shoes of a kid listening to this...most kids aint gon catch what u saying... slow it down, take the time to pronounce your words...give your kids something to grab on too. throw some personal catch phrases in the verses(I.E. Tupac in dear mama "even though u was a crack feind mama/ u always was a black queen mama!"get me?) delivery again...completely unpersonal...u was focused on flowly fast instead of getting across how you feel about ya kids...u was contorting words to make them stand out with funny pronounciations, which is ill in a hype/club track but completely unapproiate here. Lyrics were fine but your writing technique from a songwriting standpoint was completely incohert...you opened first verse talking to your kids then towards end an for rest of the song you talked in third person...killing the interpersonal vibe thats necessary for a track like this...in second an third verse especially u came across like u was telling a stranger a nice story about your family instead of talking directly to your family. You want a song like this from beginning to end to be like your sitting with your family telling them this or even like your family is reading a letter from you. But u wrote it like 1 paragraph in a letter to a friend u aint seen in yrs thats jus talking about how life's been for you. the hook was too rapish...you definitely should have had a melody in your hook to give it that extra emotion that people an more importantly your family would connect with. All in all it was a decent song that came across like it was written from a amateur writer. Dont get me wrong I aint saying u a wack rapper, I aint talking bout rapping at all. I am talking about the principles of the art of songwriting, u didn't use any of the formulas necessary for writing a compelling interpersonal song. Also mixing coulda been alot better...vocals need to be eqed over a boarder range to make it sit upfront in the mix, its more the eqing then the actual volume of the vocals, but anyways no hate at all kid, jus realness.....1

Word....thanks for the input :thumbup:

I like this track actually. I don't like tha flow that much, and tha beat is nice. It went good with the vocals. I think ur vocals are too low though, you might want to turn those up, cause some spots you cant hear tha lyrics.
This is a hot track...tha beat is bananas though.

I like tha concept of tha song. Overall this is a coo song. It kinda got boring near tha end. But, its all good. Good song.

Peace!

Sneakin to the top again.....lol.

That beat is pretty dope, man. Where can I get dope beats like that?

cool man..................nice track 4 real.................good job nygma, wrote well, fits the beat nicely......flows nice n shit..nice message man...........props

You can find beats similar to this one at www.soundclick.com/bmbproductions(us)


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yeerr was feelin' this a lot man..beat's sickness...lyrics are really well written like cho said..deliverys cool...didn't hear the flow go off...yeerr good shit man