Yvonne-Early In The Morning
 

Aight...ill be as constructive as I can..

OH MAN..U need to send this beat....

I like how youre delivery on this was..laid back...u got too many hi's in ure voice...add a few lows here..damn I like how you did this..relgious shit beautiful...

im feelin how u came on this...lyrics real...old shcool real shit..here...I think you cudda switched the flow later on..but this is good..ya pronounciation is good...oh u did switch the flow I like it...

yeah this is the best shti Ive heard from you ma..

emotion was str8 too...things can be improved..however for what u at now this was real bumpable..I liked this alot..keep at it ma

word already used this beat.....so u know im feelin the beat....


first off...u for real need a new setup and what not...the mic quality is taking away tons from your ability...your better than what the track is showing....lyrics are coo..flow can be worked on a bit...a couple times you pause to let the beat catch up..

thats really the only problems i have with it for real....not bad

im feelin this beat. real cool and mellow

lyrics are real nice. kinda caught me off guard with what you were saying. didnt know that this was what you rapped about. the only thing i can say about the lyrics is that the rhyming is real simple. like down, clown, brown. that kinda stuff

flow was on for the most part..you did fall off at a few spots but it wasnt that bad. try to switch it up a little. i been working on that myself. but after a while the same flow gets boring.

as for the emotion on the track, it was cool. it just kinda sounded like you were whispering. i dont know if thats what you were going for but after that ying yang twins whisper song came out, i hate the idea of that.



basically this is probably the best track i heard you on. you're definitely improving, but then again theres things that you need to work on. just like the rest of us. keep working at it.

Ur voice cudda been sexier at the start...maybe like 'uuuuuh,, ooooooo'///somethin like that


beat is slick...flow is fine...Vocals need a bit more magic to bring out ur delivery...lyrics sound coo

after a while, the flow became monotonous...but still on beat


not a bad drop MOMMY





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i thank you all alot!

implicit...nah i wasnt trynna whisper!

ike...thanx a lot..guess ima have to get rid of the samson :-(

ight the beAt is chill i like it delivery i think needs to be upped sounds monotone....your vocals need more definition they sound liked they u rappin ouuta a megaphone......this wuld be coo if u mixed it better......lyrics is coo and i like the direction but like ike sed quality is takin tons from ur drop aight ma stay up and check out my track called twisted

lol...



o well..yeah im trying to redo the flow...

and can some1 gimme some mixing advice?


like after eq'ing,reverbing,and adding a chorus effect..what else do i gotta do to up the vocal mixings?

im officially NO LONGER GONNA USE THIS BEAT...since i found it...4 people have used it --__--...but i'm liking the flow...the mixing seems a lil funny...you sound robotic...but flows nice...delivery is cool...lyrics are cool too...i think ya coulda upped the emotion up a lil...but it's a good joint...:thumbup:

LIstening:
Beat: not bad just my type,
Flow: Flow is good but kinda boring you know, you need wayy more emotions, you sound like it was 3 in the morning and you were about to go to sleep, your flow is good all away so far
my first time hearing you and its pretty good, dope drop

fuck the tag on it... i almost used that same beat but i hated the tag lmao...

now... lets see... u sound too mono tone... try to apply some feeling. productions wise this aint real great. need to work on ur mixing an shit. it really sounds like ur talkin through a toilet paper tube... just do some research on mixin an try new stuff.

rtf http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238373

aight, listening...

beat sounds good, nice natural feel to it... your flow fits the mellow feel, but a little emotion is still necessary, its just about finding that balance, so work on that... lyrics are dope, i like what you're trying to do, its just almost like you're flow is half R&B half rap...

okay to start the beat to me sounds like a grown sexy beat n you flipped it to early morning retrospective....thats different, and different is good

you have some good lyrics burried in the smooth flow...try not to do taht as much, so they stick out....the smooth flow doesnt fall off, but it needs more umph, like sound more sorry or sound more devoted, that will come as confidence grows...for flow, the begning is strong but it doesnt get better, it goes down and then might get back to where it was.....i dont know why....

after that some of the production things i noticed.....lil too much echo in it, maybe too much reverb, dont know exactly you did sounds like reverb, turn that down a bit.....your hook needs to mixed different from the verses to stand out more, just sound like the verses are all one thing.....makes it sound repetitive...

not a bad track, things could be improved, things are already on their way there it sounds tho....good stuff first time ive actually heard stuff from you, so ill look forward to see you get better

:)

thanx thanx!

Okay ever since I copped this beat everybody been using it lol...wow u filtered the shit outta ya lyrics that drowning sound to ya vocals is a clear overlimiting/overfiltering sign...ok ya flow gets better am better with every track...u over dragging out sum words cuz ya line structure falls short sometimes...u need to vary ya rhyme scheme an rhythms more...I like what u talking about lyrically..I feel ya religious focus...but ya repetitive flow...an your non-separate hook make the song drag...sonically it wears on the ears to listen to the same tone an rhythm for 3 plus mins...you'd lose alot of listeners after the first 30 seconds....delivery was good but again to repitious u didn't really vary the tone...ya quality took away from ya delivery as well so dont take that critique too far cuz the quality took off alot...beat choice was ill I love this beat, also lyrical focus was nice..I'm not use to u spitting about something which is a nice switch around

And its a WRAP!

ok im lovin this beat. what i dont like is, w/e effect it is your using is drowning out the vocals. also i see you got the layed back thing goin on but you almost sound sleepy. u still need more support n emotion in your voice even though your sorta wispering. hmmm, change up ya rhyme scheme some too lol im feelin the message though. the lyrics n everything, somethin alot of people can relate to. still got a sexy voice, iunno why but i love your accent lol

yeah u need to make your accent pop more and be the center of the song. turn up the vocals and pan your dubs, and have more dubs. the few adlibs helped but pan them more and turn all vocals up, along wit emotion so your voice and accent pop more.

k listenin...beats nice, quality is ehh lol...like the laid back flow for this track but sometimes seems to drag a lil too much...i hear soem good lyrics...i like how you took advantage of the samples in the beat...not bad track keep it up