Intangible vs Desipio
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 05-13-08 at 07:39 AM

Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in.

Intangible has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-12-08 07:40 AM.

Desipio has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-12-08 07:43 AM.

i come with hard rhymes n punchlines, you better take measures
you wanna be husslin? you cant even deal with the pressure
while my style is forever, you better get it right man
i beat you to pulp with a firepook and litteraly make you white trash
my lines are to complicated for you to understand bitch
its like laid, you just cant get it
forget it, im the playa who's balling your sister dead
while you cant even come close if you jerk of under your sisters bed
my shit is fat, so what the fuck why would i hesitate
to smoke someone who thinks he can go heads up with a fraggrenade
not even trying.. if you wanna battle me in rap, you're wasted
cause you even get smoked by astmapatients

That's right I'ma Ball out and buy a rose basket for you//
But unlike the callout, this finna be a closed casket dude//

I got the ratchet too, I'm bout to leave this snitches game in a blunder//
Rockin' WNBA Jerseys only time you get a bitches name and number//

Your games in a slumber, Smell the coffee and open ya bum peepers//
I'm bout to sneak up on Smoke and slam him, like I was some Kreeper//

I'm more of a Reaper, the keeper of this game, and I got it locked//
Listen 'Cheech', I hope you have 'Nice Dreams', when the 'doc leavin you Shocked'//*

Fuck your bite punches, my smite crunches this joke//
Cause honestly 'Smokes gettin blown out' and I ain't lightin a Toke//

Expo
* - In Nice Dreams, Cheech & Chong had a doc making some new kind of electrical current ganj.

Voted For: Intangible

wasnt really feeling this battle so im not going to break it down..
the only decent bar in the whole thing was
I got the ratchet too, I'm bout to leave this snitches game in a blunder//
Rockin' WNBA Jerseys only time you get a bitches name and number// and it wasnt really that tight.
both of you need to work on your personals and actuall disses.

i made that in like 5 minutes bc i forgot that i set it for a short deadline soo it was rushed

This was feedback posted for Intangible
 

Intangiable is fucking horrible

so are u lol i ripped u just accept the battle and u cansee what i wrote bitch made

jeah made it in 5 or 10 minutes also
but i normally dont do english battles so i thought it was a good start

that shit is so fucking true, this kid has got to be the WORST thing on the site. :shocked:

i fucking bite as in a question ur maken ur self look fucken dumb!

did you just say you bite?? dude that sucks

honestly u still suck soo why are u on rv u dnt battle u just talk shit e-gangster...
just leave the site or accept my battle u fuckin need to man up
and stop playing wit ur clit

why are you on the site, dont you just cheat?? yep.

Voted For: Intangible

intangible > desipio

tanj...
you barely pulled this one off bro. i pretty much gave you the win because a couple of your lines were a bit more memorable. your flow was cool, but overall, your verse was generally hit or miss. in the future, try not to self glorify at all in your bars...unless you're able to hit dude with something back in each line...because it could hurt you in the long run. i've lost some of my earlier battles over that shit. lol. also, get rid of the "//" after each line and work on your structure a little bit.

des...
pretty simple drop my man. no hate, but i wasnt really entertained. i can see that you got some potential...but i didnt notice that "eye of the tiger" (hunger) that i dig when peepin' battles. either i want to laugh out loud sometime during the battle...and/or i want to leave the thread with a memorable line burned into my skull. so, work on your flow, sharpen up your punches (you're close) and straighten out that structure of yours.

best line of the battle:
I got the ratchet too, I'm bout to leave this snitches game in a blunder//
Rockin' WNBA Jerseys only time you get a bitches name and number//

keep the front lines alive my fellow battlecats...


...s.v., c.s.

This was feedback posted for Intangible
 

checkin pollsss

Intangible- You need one more vote before Desi gets a vote and then you can post the link into this forum to have it closed.
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=246282

Voted For: Intangible

I got the ratchet too, I'm bout to leave this snitches game in a blunder//
Rockin' WNBA Jerseys only time you get a bitches name and number//


vs. nothing.

desipio..i felt your verse was very weak, you had no personals..no real apparent punches either...u just kinda went on about how you werent trying...never underestimate your opponent....your rhyming was a bit off i felt some lines you really forced your rhymes...just had a hard timing liking your verse...keep up and try and establish a flow...

intangible..i felt your verse was ok...nothing to special..but you had a better rhyme scheme and set ups for punches than your opponent..all your lines rhymed and even had some multies..which made the flow a little easier to catch..though the way you set up your lines makes it hard to establish the flow...but you had that 1 bar that just stood out from the rest..which is why you get my vote

v/intangible

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