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Hustler Book 1
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'the alarm buzzed nosily'
I suggest you don't continue a damn thing until you make sure nothing has any spelling errors or doesn't make sense.. or you can just put the whole shit together, call it a rough draft, and throw it at somebody and pay them cash to have them do it good luck with your book but I'm not interested.. |
calis cred = zero. his talent as a writer = zero. so, basically he's as good at those, as he is at audio. word.
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^^ im guessing he's not your bestest friend in the whole wide world, is he? lmao
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well phenom is gay and i believe all homos should burn in hell so hes mad because he doesnt want to be in the fire and brimstone but he cant stop sucking dick cuz he likes the taste and he cant stop wearing pink panties cuz he likes how they feel and he cant stop getting fucked in the ass because he loves his boyfriend so he is mad............................................
anyways the book is checked for spelling errors and its ready for publishing in january.this is a sample for people to check out before the book comes out. |
In general it is pretty good. Obviously the spelling errors will be checked before publication. For me though, the way you describe everything is pretty bland.
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It's slightly longer, but it sets the scene and gives it a bit more of an atmosphere. |
ahahaha, fletcher just took your own book and fucking ripped that shit
he should just re-write your whole book and put it out in stores lmao |
no he took a urban ficition book and made it too intelligent.you have to understand your audience.thats why young jezzy goes platinum and canibus goes wood.the audience who reads urban ficition are mostly ghetto people with lack of education or educated people curious about how people in the ghetto think.
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How is that too intelligent?
I wasn't trying to hate or anything, but if you add in a bit more descriptive writing to make the whole shit have a bit more depth, imagery and atmosphere then you will appeal to a larger scale of readers. If you think your way will appeal to the specific audience you are targeting then do you and props for that. :thumbup: |
Don't sweat it Nick..
Retards need to write for retards.. I get his point. |
Yeah and nick, your attention to detail started out nicely but quickly fell off. You couldn't rewrite his whole book but you'd be a nice addition to it I'm sure lmfao
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Hope this goes well for you. Let me know when it gets published. Where is it gonna be published?
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rofl, it wasn't even meant to be anything special.. just a point to show that it could be improved. I beasted that in like 5 minutes. Given enough time I could rewrite his book. But that would be to a way I like it. I am sure if you rewrote it, then it would be to a way you liked. And the way CALI has wrote it is to the way he likes. Its all difference of opinion, but if he's already got it lined up with some publisher then his way has apparently appealed to some people. |
...Shouldn't your avy say "Better THAN you?...Just a question.
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^ Dude, people told him about that a long time ago... he still hasn't corrected it.
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No I was gonna bring that up also but I found intelligence in his retardation
#1 comes first Then You :| |
Here.. it's a better dumbed down version..
An irritating buzz caused Mack to stir uncomfortably in his sheets as he glanced over to read an illuminated 6:00 on his alarm clock in the corner. His body was begging for a few extra minutes of sleep, but his mind knew that he’d have to shut the alarm off due to the state his mother came home in the previous night. As he walked across the cold apartment floor and switched the alarm off his mother let out a sigh of relief and clenched the comforter tighter before falling back asleep. |
heres and even better one...
that dude mack was salty as fuck cuz that damn alarm kept buzzin...knowin his junkie ass moms and them wasnt gonna hit the fuckin snooze buttin...this cat right here threw that fucker against the wall...then his mom farted...beledat |
lmfaoo if you go by what Cali was saying, then that would be a new york times best seller
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rofl @ summers version
i'd cop it |
word you should al write your own books instead of just trying to rewrite mine.
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Buhhh, I already am.
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Man, it is uncanny how many people I have met online through these rap/hip hop sites who are actually writing books. Limited Edition wrote one, CALI has wrote one, I am writing one, Adam is apparently writing one although you can never tell when he is being sarcastic or sincere, rofl... In-Vision is doing one, this dude Vivify from RM is writing one, and I know SPuL is thinking of doing one also.
Word, the fucking Writers Guild of RapSites. |
I am, for realz.
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well do to the fact that it costs over 1500 dollars to get your book edited most peoples book wont be coming out cuz thier broke.i wrote 9 books not one and will be posting them all on myspace over time.lastly books take 3 months to a year just to get reviewed and cost 47.00 a piece to prepare in manuscript form for the publishers.hence why i will probally be the only one whos book goes in a store. |
Limited Edition has already beat you to it, he was published like 2 years ago.
And as for manuscript form, if you got a computer, a printer with some fresh ink you can do it all at home. Then pay for postage to send it to publishers. And if any publisher asks you for money then they are trying something fishy. Because the idea of publishers is that they see your work as a way to make them money so they wouldn't ask you for anything if they are truly legit and do see your work as being successful. I know about six people who got published and it didn't cost them a thing. So everyone on here who wants to write a book has a chance of being published. |
 That is LE's book. And word to the fact that he used to upload shit on that same site I told you about, the one I upload my stuff onto. |
fuck it cali pay me to fix up your fucking elementary school book lol
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Haha, you're great. |
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i dont want to argue but i know what im talking about and it does matter.editing has to be done by someone else.maunuscripts have to be sprial bound,with clear covers,have to have synopsis letter,contact info anf have to be one inch on each side not to mention it has to be double spaced as well.publishers will throw your book out if it dont come like that.as far as being published anyone can do that but its about who publishes you.im working with triple crown which is major for urban fiction.if your writting regular novels then penguin or pendington are huge.your publisher matters because they get your books in stores and to the masses.minor publishers do bad jobs while majors do great ones. :thumbup: |
Wow At this bullshit.....
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Dude, I know all that shit.. I was more focused on the you paying some publishing company to publish your shit, that's bogus. They shouldn't be charging you anything because they are looking to make money off of your book.
Like I said, I know about 6 people who all got published for nothing except the cost of paper, ink, and all other shit they needed to piece it together to send off. And 3 of those dudes were published by Random House which is a good company. |
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naw you dont pay the publisher you pay a editor who has nothing to do with the publishing company |
yeah word, i know that
it just sounded at first as if you were saying you were paying the publisher when i have mine finished it won't cost me a thing because my uncle is an editor so i'm just gonna get him to do mine for free, or at the least a cut price.. |
Look at C.A.L.I trying to be Iceberg Slim.
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^whats even funnier is you trying to be straight when we all know your a dick sucking closet freak.
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I hate ur guts.
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i love you little sister though:)
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Your mom has a pegleg.
See? I can make shit up too. |
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