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Alias-C 03-14-03 05:18 PM

~Lost 'N' Found~
 
Yo! I haven't been here in a minute... maybe cause I was dealing with the concept of this post... kinda long... but it's all understandable... check it!

What can I say to sustain my reputation,
creativity’s delivery sparks from mind-elevation,
but I’m facing some frustration,
over lack of comprehension...
when it comes to mathematics, I don’t get it,
meant to be all automatic when I spit it,
now fanatics don’t give credit, shit’s pathetic/
yo I’m facing devastation,
I’m so desperate for creation,
I’ll allow my mind’s cremation,
to ignite imagination…

See the object, is progress,
but I’m kicking nonsense/
everything I write is boring,
exploring with page after page,
and I’m just storming with rage,
can’t believe that I started out sage/
shit just tends to decline,
cause now very rhyme,
ain’t as good as the last fucking time,
every line... has some bumps, has some gaps,
and I’m tired of that,
what is wrong with my rap,
if I’m whack, then I’m whack,
but I’m not, that’s a fact,
I just gotta relax/
think of something,
I’m slumping, just sunk in… my sit,
and I’m sick, of not thinking of interesting shit…

Yo have you ever felt the feeling,
that you’d kill to be revealing,
all the skill conceived in lyrics/
but it cannot be done,
that’s what I’m facing here son,
it’s like my chances are gone,
and if I have’em then it’s only just one…
I got to grapple with my pen,
and we gon’ battle till the end,
till we rivals or we friends…
Cause I’m a fighter, rhyme writer,
can’t keep stuck up in the cipher,
with the pencil in my hand I pull all nighters/
see I’m racing, just chasing,
to flow amazingly, patiently waiting,
I’m still rehearsing, just nursing this style,
but haven’t pulled shit off in more than a while…


Delete the page, crumble the paper,
I’m a slave to my eraser,
shit’s become like second nature/
just edits and edits, man I’m ah dead it,
forget it, I want an end to this headache/
It’s like I’ve given all I got,
I’m off track, I’m off rap,
and I don’t know how the fuck to get back…
Blocks in every direction,
I got to head for redemption,
my rap just crumbles in sections,
not how it was at it’s initial creation/
Went from infinitive, to limited,
the shit sounds all repetitive,
started off hard, but going sensitive…

My energy getting thin,
can feel I weaken within,
but then I feel one more wind!/
it be my second, and in seconds,
I strengthen, spitting like caliber weapons/
shower the paper with lyrics,
hotter then vapor from skillets,
and I don’t care who don’t feel it...
Shit…
so now my goal’s to reinstall,
what I left at my fall,
come back and stand tall,
in front of every one of y’all…
and I promise to keep flowing,
pay homage to sick flowing,
and mange to think of something,
till six feet under within my coffin…

If you made it down here... thanx alot... Peace

inspire 03-14-03 07:27 PM

i can feel what your saying here... i tried this concept a few weeks ago and it wasnt even worth reading... hard topic to write about... your flow fell off in some places but otherwise a good piece... keep rhymin

Orikle 03-14-03 07:56 PM

Yo Alias, I like it man, rhymes well and flows good, an overall nice piece dogg, Keep the hot shit commin... little shorter next time but haha!

Peace Out!!!!

Low Key 03-14-03 09:39 PM

yo dog,
you hit that topic well man, it's every writers nightmare to be fighting writers block. You got on top of that shit dog, rhyme was hot.

It’s like I’ve given all I got,
I’m off track, I’m off rap,
and I don’t know how the fuck to get back…
Blocks in every direction,
I got to head for redemption,
my rap just crumbles in sections,

feelin this.
Stay up!

Alias-C 03-15-03 02:31 PM

thanx y'all, yeah yo you liked that part... thanx, actually my favorite part was the first verse... and also I think I rushed at the end... it's just that I didn't want to make it too long...
Keep telling me what y'all think y'all

lil_roxy 03-15-03 04:03 PM

Alias-C yo dat woz a nice ryhme nice and yeh i did get to tha end. im feelin wot u sayin, qestionin if u belong in rap.keep it up
peace ~roX~

Alias-C 03-16-03 05:02 PM

yo, good lookin' out!

Alias-C 03-17-03 05:03 PM

Yo come on... I know y'all got something to say

Domain 9 03-17-03 08:50 PM

I don't have enough time but I'll come back and edit this post with a reply... FYI..

pz

Alias-C 03-18-03 11:00 PM

damm... this is gettin' frustrating... lol...

The 13th Apostles 03-19-03 08:47 PM

I don't like your verse structure much, it throws the whole flow off, thusly making your verse not as good...I suggest making your bars a little longer, and you'll be alot better..other than that, there's not really anything else to tell you...

Nice ass drop, i enjoyed reading it...

8/10

P.e.a.c.e.

Alias-C 03-21-03 11:00 PM

yeah... yo I would have appreciated more feedback about the rhymes, flow, and concept of it from a mod... but it's aight.... thanx...

smokedout411 03-27-03 07:29 PM

phat rhymes... kinda sounds like eminems song run rabbit run... still phat though

ehustle 03-28-03 07:31 AM

that shows u back.i felt that man

kmfrob 03-31-03 12:48 PM

fuckin ell that was long. nah man it was nice. ya topic was good but the fact that ya verses worked sorta comprimises wat ur sayin if u kno wat i mean. ya vocab coulda been better but the rest was nice. i agree tho sumtimes ya structure was a bit off sumtimes the rhymes diddnt end wen i thought they were and it threw me off a bit. anyway nice attempt. 7.5/10 Aight peace

Alias-C 05-13-03 12:31 PM

yeah I know what you mean...
"the fact that ya verses worked sorta comprimises wat ur sayin"
^not really... cause I'm saying what I couldn't before, since I had that mental block and shit... when I got over it.... I dicided to write about it... anyways, thanx for the reply

R-Cypher 05-13-03 12:36 PM

i thought the flow worked for me. I got it rite first off. But ppl have different flow techniquez. But it was simple and strait to the point. Kinda defines the quote "Less is more".

Good stuff.


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