"Wishing On A Star" (Keystyle)
 

I know it's short but bear with me....

[3:40 p.m.]
I'm at the pinnacle of greatness, and damn it, I'm bored;
Ominous creatures test me, so I brandish the sword;
I extirpate those that oppose the movement of me;
The union of Kings, sent to destroy illusions of peace;
My dreams are painted black, by my somber emotions;
So many tears shed, it's like I'm the God of these oceans;
Cast into eternal darkness......plod and corrosive;
Thats the odd consequence of my squalid devotions;
[3:42 p.m.]

Holla back....

P.e.a.c.e.

nice... 2 min.. seems about right... good use of vocab off tha top, an' it flowed pretty well.... NE way can't really give an in-depth critique on such a short piece... uppin'

p.s. can u linx some feedback on my shit

Thanx for the reply...I'll hit your shit up...

P.e.a.c.e.

^^agree with blunt... was cool... next time your drop a keystyle... make it longer... anyways its another masterpiece from 13th... keep rhymin

^^^Thank you. I'ma take this key, and write to it, and make it a finished product, and re-post it soon....

P.e.a.c.e.

yeah, i thought that was dope.. exceptional for 2 mins. Agreed with blunt and inspire. I want to see the finsihed product.

^^^You will soon...gimme a day or two...finish it, and flush it out...

P.e.a.c.e.

Good drop Apostle... although I piss longer than that... lol.. It had some good vocab for that short piece too plus some good lines. Dope... keep droppin

pz

Good looks....

P.e.a.c.e.

This was highly dope for such a short piece....I liked how it flowed thru....And tha message....Keep this up 13th....Peace

^^^^
said it all...

^^^Thats about a freepost and a half...lol

Good Looks everyone..

P.e.a.c.e.

I'm at the pinnacle of greatness, and damn it, I'm bored;
Ominous creatures test me, so I brandish the sword

The first line said it all...the worst rhyme wasn't even written yet.
Your style is tight...I feel it.

Thank you....

P.e.a.c.e.

your style is familiar ... so is your name actually.. very nice... short but sweet just like a resume... OoNnEe

Thank you...where have u seen my name before?

Holla back young'n...

P.e.a.c.e.

same thing I said to the last cat I replied to... Had the multies, the flow and the vocab on point... but... shit was definetily short, it seems like an intro to something... something that could've been hot... but it's a keystyle, yous probably got tired or bored and just let it go... I dunnah... from what I read, it was pretty tight....

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Thank you all..no if you'd all be so kind...please check out the final copy...

P.e.a.c.e.