Metaphor-Phesus (similies)
 

razor blades, box cutters, realize brothers , we're engaged in age
politics, patriots have raped colonies with rage
northern policies
stop you in a new state
new date, as your head jerks
step back like massages, shiatsu experts
caught your decapitated head burst
affidavit signed for these institues and Feds work
actin like you know me though
roll with plent keys, and coded like mp3s
known for steady speech that'll band your ass like Antonio
holy words like Miswaks
if you miss this talk (you cant even grasp this)
then your kids are mistaught
my mainfested grasp spit like Llamas ans Asses
the reason i'm shadow dodgin
is cuz Osama Bin Laden has been lodged in large amounts of toxins
ready to test our fear as he walks amongst us...
by the american congress
i speak for those thrashed in trust, with no stress
just bust like chests
and get the fuck outta here like bankrupt porno sets
no bets, my steps to go slow like batteries used up
fuck kats like feline beastialities
and cut tracks like suicidal heroin abusers...with...

razor blades, plagues, gernades
a.i.d.s. get your raced erased
off the earth, before your place is taken
cop your hearse and stay awaken
stop by your local Mosques, Churches and SYnagouges
Metaphor-Phesus, this shit is institutionalized
please help me God

can yall tell me what you think of this one please...thanks

there were some really awesome lines in this
there also were some really not so good shit
it felt inconsistent, maybe thats what u were goin for
but either way the thoughts are sorta all over the place
I did like ur last set of similes (porno, kats, cut tracks)

PS watch for my next open mic
"Hooligan X" its gonna be some
of my best shit, thanx

thanks for uppin and the feedback...i will peep your shit and tell you what i think...good lookin out

pretty good

my flows is the best

yo stupid ass is so stupid you cant pass a kindergarden test

i think i won

you couldnt make up for lost time if you covered a misplaced foriegn watch with lipstick and eyeliner...


nah dawg you lost

here's another one...

follow shit that your boys and parents teach you like trained parrots/

and another one..

claim beef on cuts but you create the sandwich meat type baloney/

dont think you wanna fuck with this your fuckin amatuer...learn some skill namsayin...one


oh yah you just lost again and again

what happened terell no more stupid half assed comebacks...

lmao @ " I think I won" rotflmmfscao.... wtfeva on that one.. anyways Nar you did a great job on this one to.. I love the way you throw the vocab in to try and make people look stupid lol. It never fails. OoNnEe

lol...i would never do that...lol...its just the way i like rhyming...throw in big ass words that i know what threy mean and shit...anyways good looking out girl...wahid

come on come on come on...whered that cat go?i won my ass,you start somethign have the power of 9 majesties hammerin down nahmean,gonna come out osmehitng flat...come on post back i wanna see bloodshed...ahhaha...sory felt liek tlakin shit....ill ill spit narc,liked your lines was real constant as always...vheck your pm cat

that fool thought he could fuckaround namsayin...with his/her half assed comments or whatever....no doubt kat i will do that...wahid

With little due respect, don't be an idiot. Your posts in this thread have been pointless.

And same goes for anyone else who posted stuff which has nothing to do with this piece, or the poetic scriptures.

If you want to battle, there's forums on this board just for that. Or you can PM each other. Just not in here.

onto the piece..

...i felt the 'stop-start' thing you had going made it fairly powerful...

...even though at times it felt off from the overall style and piece, you still pulled it off well...giving an original approach and not conforming to a style or something, just keeping it raw, and 'on the edge'....

...resp...

^^thanks dunny...you should check my other shit out man...it always gets slept on in here...good looking out...wahid