Shinobi life
 

The darkness inside the room blinds my eyes to the truth
The blackness of the situation at hand only tightens the noose
The rain beating hard I understand every last drop
Stop for a second from my task to break into memories from atop
The honing of skills confined me to this world of death
The blood on my hands shows the brutality I posses
Connect with another force into this falling planet
Stabbed forward with eyes closed into the after-world I banish
Thunder awakens the mind I study his mind pattern
The evil standing just down the hall shining red from the lantern
Quiet like a phantom
I traverse behind the pillars towards my final position
In blurred vision I complete the last ever killing of my mission
Thickened blood pours out from the man’s neck
I got feelings deep inside of me but it’s too late to regret
The alarm sounds suddenly everything becomes hectic
I got my sword poised and ready for the next hit
My route is marked I run straight for the stairway
Gunshots whisk past my head no more than a hair away
Unsheathed I decapitate those at close range
Using body as shields I finish those who caused pain
The rain is getting harder I feel myself slipping
The halls drenched in blood and my awareness is missing
After a few seconds I see my chance to escape
The fire exit descends and I aint got not time to waste
When into the streetlights I feel I’m bleeding
Mixed with the cold rain my leg is wreathing
Gleaming I can see the candle calling me back home
Climbing 3 floors and I feel alone
Sit down on the tatami and prepare for my final calling
Bow down in shame to my ancestors my visions falling
See the steel shine this is how it must always end
My stomachs slit open and into sleep I descend
The darkness now feels more welcoming I’m warm
The silence resounds and I’m torn
Everything closes down and I see the truth
It’s just a shame now it’s no use


Aight incase u diddnt clock on this songs bout a ninja. aight hit me up no bullshit ive only read 3 lines of wat ya wrote shit. only proper feedback

nice piece, flow and vocab were on point, wasn't sure of the topic if any.. that's all I really have to say, stay elevatin'.. peace

nice piece pappi keep spittin i like that!!

Good vocab, nice topic...original...Keep it movin'...

bakardi fuck u u not gettin a response for that bet u diddnt even read the piece. u others aight cool thanx for ya feedback

yeah good piece man
liked the flow and vocab told it well

Liked it flowed well....Keep that ill shit going....
Check on mine FUCKEN HATERS ..holla

aight thanx for ya feedback uppin

i like this ryme since i love the shanobi game series.. i could feel on the shanobi life ///

mad props homie

Tight vocab yo and all the shit went to the point Nice am just showing some luv back since you peeped my piece Dedication to the Motherland.

Wun

aight thanx for all ya feedback appreciate it uppin

uppin

Nice drop son, you stayed on point, i saw what you were sayin in the piece too, it was great, keep pushin more drops like these.

8/10

that was a tight drop...i liked how you created a visual landscape thru words i like that shit in a rhyme...the vocab was nice, the topic was illness and original...

Unsheathed I decapitate those at close range
Using body as shields I finish those who caused pain
The rain is getting harder I feel myself slipping
The halls drenched in blood and my awareness is missing


i like those bars they nice...anyways keep spittin god...one

uppin

Uppin dont sleep

i got ur uppin hangin, lol j.c dogg, tight drop the sht was ill, i tapped into the topic right away, i studied the ninja story, the way they were pushed out of their village by the shogun and retreated to the mountains of Kai, then honed their skills and revolted, i liked this peice, ill up for ya

uppin

Due to my forced fascination of ninja's, I really got into your verse. I liked the line 'The rain beating hard I understand every last drop' cuz I'm obsessed with rain it made me think about how one would understand it....literally....still thinking. And the idea at the end (hopefully I got it right), that you find a sense of devine meaning and understanding in death, but cant use it... was cool. Props.

aight thanx for all ya praise uppin

what i meant by seeing in the end was that a life of a ninja has only brought murder and death but its only within ones own death that you understand the futility of it all. One of the emotions i tried to get across is the idea that the training has masked the ninja into not really seeing what he is doing i.e. murdering but with this his final killing he suddenly starts to see glimpses of the truth. the rain is symbolic of his emotions and the direness of his situation.

Uppin dont sleep now

uppin this dont sleep

fuck this uppin

fuck all this sleepin uppin

YO i though thiz piece wus tight flow wus 9/10....and contend wus nice.....

peace

atlast sumone replies thanx. uppin

Fuck off. You up'd enough. Don't be gay.

fuck u fool id been uppin cos i was replyin to everyone elses shit (including yours) and none of the little fuckers would reply so fuck you.

1. Calm the fuck down.
2. I'm doing my job, don't get your panties in a bunch. If you don't like it..well tough.
3.

I'm gonna start with I usually don't like story telling, I dunno, its just not something I'm into. ...but illness is illness none the less.
The perplex imagery throughout this was just fucking amazing.
I thought the ending was good, I thought you would have made it better through describing his death more vivadly, but its all good. So basically the ending was the only part I wasn't loving 100%..but the rest...the rest I did.

thanx for the response on my rhyme
....dude your shit was ill.
for vocab was good to the point i couldnt even understand i was so lost in the big words...but that makes a rhyme sound awesome on audio
keep postin

lol bruklor sorry i was tired and in a mood. thanks both of ya for ya reply im glad you liked it. uppin

I though I replied on this already... must have gotten' erased... lol... my bad... yo man, I was feeling this, no doubt, yeah as I was reading it I figured it was about a ninja or samurai... I liked the way you told the story, shit had a good flow and wordplay was straight... -1-

oh wait, wait, now YOU can return the favor and reply on these...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=34047
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=31860

... if you get a chance... lol.... peace man

aight thanx for replyin again anyways up we go

its all good,

aight this is ya last chance uppin

nice