Fuked up war
 

After 9/11 the worlds been descendin, into a conflict/
exploding into iraq the search for osama was quick/
couldnt find him so on to the next prick,an international convict/
u all know his name sounds like so-dam insane/
a mentalist cares more for his oil while citizens are slain/
bush and blair strike but whats to gain?is it all in vain?/
saddam will use any means necessary to ward off defeat/
he has invisible weapons made underground away from the heat/
powers and murderous no doubt lets hope the soldiers can win before the light goes out/
evil weapons capable of mass destruction like a 'volcano' ready for eruption,bred from dictation and corruption/
the outcome is more dangerous than molten 'lava',poison gas and munitions from the Iraqi 'father'/
the people are the victims stuck in the 'middle', in the 'east' so poor barely able to afford a nibble/
they're like aliens in their homeland,no expression or freedom Husseins command/
the trouble is its an unprovoked attack by the US and UK,not backed by the UN not given the ok/
but bush and his lapdog hastened to war with no delay, not listening to the majority opinion and what they say/
but it's started now,stop it how?find the leader theres only 7 body doubles now/
hope this shit is finished before the people of iraq are diminished/
bodies pile up evolved from life to death inhaled their last breath/
innocent people like u and me difference is they no longer see/

let me know what u think
its a bit disjointed but it gets the point across

i really liked dis... fgee some ill ryhmes......

i really thought dis was ill good work...

Give us somefeed back on mine

FUCKEN HATERS.......is mine

peace fgee

ill shit yo...i was def feelin it....got the point across....stay up...1

daaam , i really, i honestly and think this is a masterpiece in your book or rymes my brotha//

dope , dopest shit i heard lately...

thanx man
keep the rhymes flowin.......

yo I liked what u was saying here, your against hussain and against the war, pretty decent anti-war verse... rhymes where aight, flow was a bit choppy, and vocab was straight... good shit man, good shit

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was nice dog, good drop, real deep, THE dopest shyt of the day * gives fgee the crown and sash with miss america crossed out and written dopest shyt of the day*

not bad, obvious topic that needs voicing... you pro'lly could've come across a little stronger, up the impact a little, you were using pretty generic analogys... "saddam will use any means necessary to ward off defeat/
he has invisible weapons made underground away from the heat/"... not an analogy but pretty basic vocab... I'm not at all say'n it isn't good, 'cause it is pretty tight, I'm just telling you how it could've been better... peace..

appreciate what ur telling me

yea i agree sum of ya points were a bit generalised about iraqs threat but i aint gonna start a debate on ere. still good to see u against the war. As for the actual piece it was nice quite a good flow but like ya said just a little disjointed. 7.5/10 check mine shinobi life aight peace

thats a deep meaning piece

i like the way you linked ideas in this, like this

u all know his name sounds like so-dam insane/
a mentalist cares more for his oil while citizens are slain/
bush and blair strike but whats to gain?is it all in vain?/

heavy piece...but try to use multis as i think multis can up the deepness

keep uppin

I like the perspective your piece took on the whole war issue. Fuck, there's way too much media propoganda as it is... and being that I study journalism, I wanna scream every time someone takes shit outa context. I didn't wanna scream at you. haha guess that's a good thing huh?

fav line: u all know his name sounds like so-dam insane

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