U.S VS IRAq (POEM)
 

Yo peep this.....


Thee shall come with forceful life
Life shall change with notion of force
Men will die in a graceless war
Iraq burning with a thoughtless claim
Oil- the vice of modernity,
Thousands killed, many more deprived
Homes are burnt, empires will follow

Humanity dispersed, the “Law” is ignored
Chaos will reign for decades to come,
Until Bush blushes in a blast
Blair will follow with boring brochette

But scars will be left without a doubt,
The orphan will ask, where is my dad?
Mothers will answer with devastation
The world will remain in anarchic state
America will vanish with its vanity
Europe will rise with a new confidence
Then the game resumes with remorseful result.

dont sleep on me people...........................

This was very well done...

...it was powerful and raw piece on a very relevant and important subject...a left-wing perspective maybe...some of the views expressed maybe a bit extreme...but in such situations, extermism is always apparent...and i've said it before, and i'll say it again, the right wing is suffocating the left wing to such an extent, that is is growin a bit desperate and becoming more and more extreme....

..anyway, i like the vivid imagery in this piece...the way you flowed from word to word, not letting structure restrain it too much....just leaving it as raw, but still well excecuted as possible..

...respect...

DAMN FInally SOmeone IS AWAKE IN RB...thnx VAr..for the comments and yo feedback.....Respect..fosho


UPPUN...........

i was feelin that right there...you see i am originally Iraqi...i aint tryin to front or nothin but i think this war is just for economics..tryin to change one regime and replace it with another one...anyways dunny nice drop..one

Thnx man doesnt matter if you Iraqi or American or African we all human spieces feel me and this WAR is just Bullshit...anywayz thnx

good ish...nice topik...well used words....

tHNx g........THIS ONE IS GETTIN OLD AMA WORK ON MY NEXT ONE.....LOL

that was ill

I think Bush jr. is gonna pull out just like his old man did and ultimitly accomplish nothing. Actually, I gotta lot of strong veiws on this war. Mine sorta coincide with yours too. I just aint never try to capture them in poetic format. Props to you for doing so, I don't think I could even if I tried. This was rather awe inspiring and I'd bet a rough subject to work on.

~Shalom~

Thnx for all comments it was hard to put it in poetic form....keep givin feedback and all make love not war...like people say....


WUn

this subject is fabricated----I think the depth of this matter is really shallow---

-1-

alright as for the poem not bad keep it up----

Deacon...lol u comedy dawg but thnx for the feedback

This is Bush Seniors War Not Bush Juniors. Bush Juniors Doin what his daddy tells him. An what makes it worse Blair does what bush junior tells him. But all in all saddam needs to be sorted out

G.I.Z seriously man lets just admit you have no idea about anything thats going on in the political world no one does--

I like how most of the people protesting the war only see what they want to see, and only hear what they want to hear. I don't feel like debating this again with anyone, and especially on here. I know people who are in Iraq now, and am just hoping they accomplish their mission asap. As for the poem, it was good, I just don't agree with it.

itpretty cool that im listening to the new system of a down video as i read this, war is fuckin bull shit, it pisses me off, it aint even a war, its us droppin billions of dollars of wastefl bull shit of a 3rd werld country, its like me battlin a 2 year old that cant speek, fuck it. its bull shit, george bush is a fucknut, hes a fuckin glory begger, fuck a bush, fuck a suddam, fuck a war,..... shit sorry, your drop was cool as fuck, [this ismy furst ever adventue into the poetry forum, my open mics are very poetic so i came to write,] ill up this for you cuzz, oNe

eyo dawg i felt you on this one...Bush is a bitch who needs to be slapped back into reality. this aint even a war hes fighten..hes sendin others to do it for him. this is a personal war for Bush cause Sadaam tried to kill his pops..
nice flow-keep on

Yo thnx for tha feedbacks people i apreciate it