Nothing would make me Happier
 

Don't mind me I'm just clearing head



I would be elated to see you tortured worse than a POW you worthless peice of crap. Your head palmed in my hand hits the concrete with no interference from gravity. Now doesn’t that sound Nice? Better yet lets shove you off a skyscraper. Your screams no longer audible after the freefall has ended. All thats left... a big ass blood spot and dismantled body parts. It would be so much fun to just run you over with that big "Benz" your always sporting. Conceded piss head! How about I tie you up in a dark, drafty, and dreary warehouse. Very pleasant don't you think? Maybe we'll get lucky and it will have a rat infestation. How delightful to hear the scurrying little feet, Audible but not visible. Left in the middle of the room you will never be alone. Ha! Feel good don't it to have hundreds of small undesirable pest by your side. Poor boo-boo! Nothing would make me Happier, but I think I well save these thoughts until you really erk me.

damnnnnnn killah alot of emotion in this bitch right here i was def feelin it dawg

yo it was aite.decent vocab and flow, but man it was difficult to read it was all together. It would be alot easier to read if ya seperated each sentance with like a / but thats my opinino. aite nice drop check out my stuff if ya can peace out

thas deep....

Thanks! and illspitta4life I'll check out ya stuff and take your advice bu it was supposed to be like that because thats how I was felling... all scrunched together. Holla!

Oh yea and swiffyus boo I'm not a "dawg" I'm very much female partna

Niiice descriptiveness..vivid imagery. A little disturbing in some places but, ay.you got ur point across! Stay up
Peace

^that could've jus gone without saying......but w/e

Don't your dad got a Benz? Oh well, but anywho if you really do have such thoughtz, maybe you should take a vacation cuz that ain't right. But then again, you ain't right:rolleyes:........

cdfu....* takin a breath*... Issues...both of yall

Dyce shut up! Its just a poem!

And D you the one with the issues! You really do dislike your people

Blah

Bac at you heffa

u fucking crazy bitch/you could tie me up bring in some rats an when dey chew a hole in da ropes ill break free an tie u up an put army ants in ya pussy then fuck u wit a condom made out of sand paper then bite ya nipples off an glue em on ya back so i can see some titti wile hitting u doggystyle

umm... wtf?/, u lookin like a muthafuckin duck,/how the fuck u come at my nig like u big or some shit./ Imma show you how small u are,/ u gonna find ya fuckin dick im a mason jar,/ cut ya body up, /u full of scars and holes and shyt,/ u make me fuckin sick,/ next time u try to spit,/ try not to sound like shit.


stay up chica u kno who got ya back

whor are you kid? u got beef wit my girl or somethin?

Alright for some funny reason this begining was entertaining. At times you had good imagery but towards the end you lost it.

"Maybe we'll get lucky and it will have a rat infestation. How delightful to hear the scurrying little feet, Audible but not visible. Left in the middle of the room you will never be alone. Ha! Feel good don't it to have hundreds of small undesirable pest by your side. Poor boo-boo! Nothing would make me Happier, but I think I well save these thoughts until you really erk me."

The ending should have been executed in a much darker way. The begining showd much hatred for this particular person and then you gave him RATS, a not so harmful creature--keep writing i'll keep reading

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Thanks once again deacon. I got boared at the end I just wrote something because this topic was getting on my nerves I wanted to end it as quickly as posible and that's what I did. Thanks for the advice and for not being a bitch like that one perosn

bitchslaper I told you I was gonna call yo ass out but I changed my mind. But I got yo ass. You better hope I don't eva cross your path in life, it wont be pertty. I can tell you don't like youself very much tryna pick on me. If you havin problems I suggest you get help and stay outta my post.

to phantasia , i apoligise my boy was just showing u his male version of ya poem,ya i know it was fucked up but dats what happens when u let assholes on ya computer!!...me personaly i could be fucked up at times an very critical but come on not dat sick/an if we did ever cross paths in life we just might end up fucking(being fucked up)
off da subject you must be fine as hell, only sweeties get pissed off enough to leave a messege like dat in someones mail anyway sorry bout dat,peace
p.s. didnt really like dis poem dat much it was allright needs more hatered

^;)yes, she is fyne as hell, and yes she is taken so I don't think ya'll will be fuckin(bein fucked up)

peace out all

*wondering around RB and 'TRIP' falls into thread*

hmmm..........phantasia........pretty name.............'Nuthing would make me happier" awww pretty title..........then tha drop........................DAAAAAAAAMN i was expecting flowers and
cherubs not violence and death way to flip it up



'gone'

bitchslaper, thank you I think I can muster up more hate but I would have to go into physcio mode and that hurts LOL!

Dyce- Stop actin out, I got this!

1-N-Gone thanks