even darker when your alone--and lost
 

Journey with me to a place chained in place with hatred—
Where god and satan can switch places so fast they mix faces
for a split second and im stuck with seconds become extended the rooms illuminated from this new delayed combination—Now im sitting in the corner with the lights out sippin Ice house I got the rogue 45 sleeping pills and a knife out—im sick of life now I need the light to find the way out everywhere I look is dark I feel my brain split apart-- then my mind wonders and drifts to the thoughts of one little kid who was robed of gods gift to live that im so ready to give—blood dripped from the sky down to the pages im writing on I looked to the clouds into the faces of all my brothers who are gone
I continue riding on eatin out smear of blood and tears in a form of a dream my dead brother really appears and said “god gave you this right don’t let the devil take it from you—I felt a crack loud as thunder my soul confusion came from it---but I havent touch the gun yet-- I see the devils face plummet and the rise of jesus Christ light shine brighter than a sunset--the battles been won but yo the war aint done cause every day a wars waged for the soul of a lost prophet..


You wanted emotion---

This had some amazing lyrical skill in it. And to add with it, an important message. Life is a precious gift. I'm certainly feeling it and I understand it.

This definitly had emotions backing it up.

~Shalom~

hey thanks alot man--

i need to fix something though last line should have yet in it

"the battles been won but yo the war aint done yet cause every day a wars waged for the soul of a lost prophet..""

uppin for votes

hey i really liked this and understood it, yo u is skilled keep at it man

thanks for the kind words lets upp it a bit a get some more words

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I like this drop, it made me think. Good emotion.


Stay Up

thanks

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Yo emotions filled the page with inevitability that surpassed your thoughts. I felt this and understood what your message is conveying-we all know that life is a precious gift and to be able to be here is a privledge...keep with ya shyt

thanks and i agree

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uppin

it was str8

yo it's was str8. i enjoyed reading it. i could feel the emotion in it. nice!

great words guys thanks--i think i was pretty emotional when writing it lol alright

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Near brilliant (if not brilliant) with a slightly obscure and certainly well executed style that bought such effortless flow, and well, power....

...nothing more to say, i should say more maybe, but i wont....cos i don't think anything mor needs to be said, piece speaks for itself..

...resp.....

Thanks for the words man-- I find comfort in putting my threads down at this board..... great place and great people---

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uppin for more peeps. im selfish

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*~I'm Hella Late~*

Dayum baby I know I'm hella late but when I read the title I could'nt pass it by....this was eyond a "nice" piece this had emotion in it I had'nt really seen before, it was af I was on the outside lookin in on you as you were soing these things.....you have a very powerful way with werds my dear:) this was ill I liked it a lot:)

I'm hopin to see more pieces like this from you, cause this just made me wanna keep an out ya digg considering I'm new to the poetry forum well keep doin whatcha do and keep bringin this hotness to the scene and get atcha gurl when ya get a chance
*~Holler~*

lol thanks for the words---as for my words i have something im working on thats really heart felt it will be on soon enough

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