[1] Domain 9 vs [2] Avalon Heavy Shit!
 

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Topic

you left...come back

wow, already going for heavyweight... I hope this is a good battle... Good luck Avalon

pz

#2..? hum...


you left..? Come back..? hum... that's the topic..? Let's see what I can do...

This sha'll be good. Can't wait...

Odd topic...But I like it, gotta feeling this will be interesting...

Goodluck Both.

lets see some battlin, some hardcore rappinin, all I need now is some tight ass slappinin.

lol, what a great first post, i can see what to xpect from u now

you left... come back...


Avalon: I love you Tory...


DarkHistory: I love you too Av...


~*~ 2 months later... ~*~


Hi there... damn... I missed you today and how
come back please... and end this dismay right now...
can't believe you went like that... left me stranded
I have no idea... where the fuck you could have landed...
ran away in a flash... shot in the dark... and could I add
pushed away so hard... shot in the heart... stopped pulsin at last...
kissin and huggin... while sentences where hummed and
I never felt this way about a woman... but you left to abrupt and...
if I could take you back and get ya back in my system
I'd listen... push first... ask for no more positions...
no more collisions... I swear I'd be keepin you held tight
you felt right... but... wasn't meant for you to leave that night...
shouldn't have let you go... and now I know the truth
8 weeks later... now you and I can see all the proof...
turned nothing into something and a life of regret
my life is to bet... back and forth we go... mine if finished...
in this life you can't grow... in time I can show
you everything but not know... come back and don't go...
Felt so good... I know I should have stopped and pulled
my hands and your face... should have stopped and pulled...
dna manifested in skin so supple and fresh
I'm buggin this mess ... no longer here from us... tuggin the flesh...
everytime I hear ya name called... I'm mourning
long gone... how you peaced out... and never gave warning...
two old friends... broke up over a broad
that's fucked up right..? Hey yo... that shit was lame dog...
crept in late nights... never left my side
what happen the same night..? guess it was all my pride...
had to stay... now at night I only pray for the best
couldn't run away... had to stay in the flesh...
into dark holes so small and so soft and wet
if my sprem came back to me... she wouldn't be preg-a-nant...


*DarkHistory interupts*

DH: Brandon..! BRANDON!!!

Av: WHAT?!

DH: What are you doing honey..?

Av: Writing... why..?

DH: come and rub my feet... :D

Av silently: DAMN..! I wish ya ass wouldn't have left...

DH: What..?

Av: Huh..?! nothing... here I come...


THE END...


Now that's classic... :D

Remember the night you wish you could live again?...
The night that will forever be remembered...
Meet Zack, an 18 year old senior in high school...
This is the story of the night he will never forget...

December 31st 2002, New Year's Eve, this year is almost through/
Jesse and James will be here at eleven then it's off to get more boo's/
Leaving the corner store we're set to party the rest of the night/
A girl named Kristie said I was cute and her pussy was tight/
A few shots later she was lookin better but it was wrong I had just met her/
Friends tell me not to sweat her she wants on my jock but I won't let her/
Before long I can't taste it taking double shots cuz I was wasted/
Took Kristie to the basement, you know the rest... I don't have to say shit/
The rest of the night is a blank, woke up late to find my ass at the bank/
Walked home to the party that sank Jesse said I had too much to drink/
3 months later was a repeat, Kristie showed up first now we're rollin 3 deep/
3 deep?.. I was confused but fuck it the crew showed up now the party's jumpin/
The morning after I was pulled to the side by the bitch from New Year's, she got wide/
Starting it with a fake "hi" then proceeding vaguely with she's pregnant and it's mine/
"You Left the condoms on the shelf, Zack" I asked nicely... "Can I have my Cum Back?"...

"No..."

....damn!

Yo Avalon's verse was deep man, that shit came from the heart, once again, I think it had more of an effect because it was first person. Which I've seen a lot lately, dope verses to bothe, but Avalon gets my vote.

Vote=Avalon

vote=Avalon

his verse was great really deep and solid in mechanics. also it just didn't look like the other guy really tried too hard it's a shame though cause you expect more from the top guys then this

These both weren't very impressive...
thought I'd see better.
But that's just me, I'm not a huge fan of strictly storytelling.

Avalon took this though. I little more creative... there was more to it...structure needs some work.
Domains verse seemed rushed... that last line wasn't any good...sorry man.

But I didn't like the whole dialoge thing though by avalon... you have to let your verse speak...

Nice try though.... at least you're thinking.
vote- avalon

hhhmmmm to say these are the top two battlers in the league this was weak...both lacked multie's and complexity both lacked flow and too many lines seemed forced

avalon won with more creativity even though there was little of it pz

LMAO... I guess...


Philo... honestly you're right... it wasn't impressive... but... I didn't try... don't think D did either...


Nh... I honestly don't think you can flow if you couldn't find it... well let me take that back... it didn't have a "full line syllable type flow" so... oh well... thanks anyway...

avalon.....i can flow lol my online topical battle record is 92-0-2

i been spitting for 5 years and this was far from impressive man im not tryna beef im just being honest

your record doesn't really mean much to me... a record in text doesn't mean you can flow... not everybody does the text book flow... any my online topical record is alot better... only loss was a no show because I was out of the city... but that's neither here nor there...


I've been spittin longer... and... again I say... it wasn't impressive... I said it myself... it took roughly 8-9 mins... tops...


www.soundclick.com/avalonproductions <~ if you have any questions or doubts...

vote=Domain 9

Being this a topical battle, combatants shouldn't just rant & rhyme but be oriented about some topic.

Ordinarily, I'd like to see a story being told, a picture being painted, a frame work being constructed.

But when you got like 2-3 days to do this, what can you say? Sometimes it can fall short.

Domain did a better job descrribing a scenario that was simple enough to understand yet methodical enough to appreciate.

Much props to you both.... and look out.

lol OMG kid

all i said was i can flow...the record was there to show i know wat im talking about and yes i do audio aswell

no need to get all stressy i mean damn

lol, at least I got a vote... Yea this wasn't the greatest or anything I really wrote... I was hung over, not in the mood to write much less feeling the topic and writing with about an hour to the deadline.. what can I say... I was in a fucked up mood..

but thanks for the vote Karte... saved me a KO... lmao

pz

NH you need a hug dunny...

Damn, dont you hate people that try to act big n tuff on tha internet??? I'm glad none of tha shit talkers on this site live near me cuz i'd kill a muh fucca.

But......Avalon did take this, only because he was more deep in to tha topic then domain was. I think topicals are just dramatic verses and domain had less drama. And even tho Avalon sounded like he was listen to Aqua's Barbie song he still had a better verse. And by tha way i'm an imagery specialist so i do know what i'm talkin about.
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eh, i duno if i can vote,

but honestly, avalon had the tru meening of the topic, not " you left ur condom, can i have my cum back?"
lmao
anyway,good shw, i wouldent have paid to see it

and nuclear weaponz, stfu, let sht talkrs and bull shitters do their thang,

your takin te same damn charactor too by saying youd kill some one, fuckin hipocrit

Yo....Av.....Straight Up.....That Wuz Deep.....I Mean.....In A Way....Thats Actually What I'm Feelin.........That Wuz A Classic......Without A Doubt............U Got My Vote.............1

This is an easy vote. I had to vote for Doma......Avalon LoL it was too obvious won that battle I believe my lil brotha coulda thought of a better verse than domain did. LoL Don't take it personal domain but that verse.....man............ it was ....................garbage aww man awful its ok though maybe you'll get him next time. I've read some of Avalons other flows and trust me the mans got skillz so this was no easy battle.

. . . wow . . .

lol everybody seems kinda surprised at my record

i aint written text shit for a long time now so i just started getting back into it again

hopefully when i start my battles on here i will have shaken off the rust but hell judging from alot of the verses ive seen dropped in here shit wont be too hard