My Homies story PT1
 

Hey y'all wat up......i just kicked up some shit there...it aint da bomb but i think its a work in progress.....any one got any tips or pointers or verdicts post them ..feel free to say it is whack or if u think it dope say so.... PEACE


hey yo

My homies locked up with the killaz an rapest
no one allowed to vist so he aint heard the latest//
His Girlfriends pregnant, she expecting a baby
Can't have an abortion cos she seven months already//
Selling crack, dope for food in the jail
He got beaten up so badly cos he was a black male//
I know im white an i cant feel the pain
Im feelin the guilt, cos its my colour doin it, Live my life in shame//
His gangs tooken over by a pimp an his bitch
They runnin their mouth, shooting up the block like an irritating itch//
Sent him a letter describing wat they been doin
he told me to get off my ass an better start ruleing//
This was my chance to take over the block
I'D still be able to write raps like I was the white PAC//
The pimp cleared away when I showed him nine
Making money, I was now rich an my hommie was doin fine//
if being a real gangsta means im commiting a crime
Then I should be in Jail wit my homie doin my time//

Chorus x2 (singin)
Time passes me everyday//
No time for me to play//
Work hard to make my pay//
I just wanna touch the sky//
Wanna know wat it feels like to fly//
But im still here with my homie gettin high//
Gettin high.....

Little Taylor born into this world, Into this hood
I need to teach him bout the ghetto like my homie would//
Tell him bout the players , haters and the weaknesse's
Dont fall in love with a hoe , shell break you into pieces//
MY homie wont be out for his sons best years
Even though he a "G" I can still see those tears//
Taylors mother aint got no job, house or no phone
Christmas is here with no food, they are all alone//
I didnt want to see it so I took them in
Taken another mans family is that a sin//
Years gone past , the good an the bad, Taylor still hasnt seen his dad //
No other man in his life , all ladies makes him very mad//
Caught with his friends sniffing an taken drugs
Drinkin beer, like he had no fear, little taylor is down wit tha thugz


Chorus x 2


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nice drop, dood word play, ight chorus and good flow... nice drop
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dats nice real nice down with dis shit keep it comin and i'll wait around some more

yep good drop here...

looking forward to seeing some more from you.......

return the favor and peep Street Prophecies
thanks

very good storytelling, rhyme was well thought out and put together nicely!

this was pretty good, it had a nice storytellin feel to it. stay spittin yo,1

yo thanks for the posts...keep postin please

nice song flowed very smooth, hope your homies liked it holla La Familia

tight drop i like how u stayed on topic
keep it up

story line was nice... originality was aight, been done but i like anyways... wordplay, yea, it was cool... tha rest of it... so/so... keep building.... you'll be dope

DAMn FAm...................nice drop even though u aint that active in our crew forum..lol maybe drop yo pic or somethin...and be apart of crew battles...lol

Anyhow nice drop

aite i have been in the forums some bitching goin on ..needs sorted

........this was a nice drop.......i told u u'd get better....and u are....keep it up............yo return tha fava and check out my drop BRE Presentz : My War Stories and tell me what u think..........on tha thread..........

haha nice job, didn't kno u was dropping open mics.....anyway good job i was feeling it
keep at it

pretty tight... one way you can make it better is by turnin it into like a letter to ya homies locked up
that would make it sound more like a story

but hey...dats jus mah opinion

yeah cheers all u's at least there no whackness post LOLOL