LaRyan Shabaz (3-0) vs. Mad Man (2-1)
 

Check in's by Monday
Verses by Tuesday
Voting ends Thursday

16-48 lines

Topic...
Thief in the night

Checking In.

Posting early. No extension needed.
Bad verse, maybe. Do not wish to make waves in the house.
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Verse:
 

". . .Gateway to fun, and flat laughlines. . ."

The thief in the night is what reeks when you light/
The strife, word, I've gotta strike it out/
I've been pitching my balls to the wall to do so for half my life now/
I plow through the bullshit stories and contrived hipster allegory/
Implore me, I'll stay near—so when your back is turned I can pour out your beers/
I fear that years ago, back when the tears were poured/
It was that midnight prowler that left us with one thin worn dollar/
I've got lears in store for the memories of the drinks—but stop let me think!/
In my memory; Yes, memory... don't let it startle you. I didn't smoke up all my particles/
I got a story to tell about my little bit of hell, from the heart/
Let's get into the Pinto, my juvenile smile plays the part, as the beast rolls us into K-Mart/
Grab the dollar, saunter to the counter labeled Lay-A-Way?/
Mother. Fucker. Stay away—I can be a hustler, struggling to fit into last year's Rustlers/
That can't be right, what causes trailer park plight?/
Dad must be at work cause he's outta sight/
But when he's out—we get jacked by the Thief in the Night/
It's either needles or knives to skin as reaction to fathers' alcoholic dysfunctions/
I've been there, but to all your hardware, I can display but a hard stare/
Beware, society may pry but they don't care/
Maybe it's fame I blame... the man with the fake chin tole me the source of our problems/
Right after another joke about Bin Laden. . ./
He spoke about men who touch children wearing black cloaks/
Well, he almost got it right/
Yup, it's that damn Thief in the Night/

Fin.

Fuck man, you dropped before I even checked in. Good shit. Let's see what I do with it. CHECKIN' IN!

The night was still young after the prom had just ended
Scott had gotten himself a room, for what the rest of the night intended
Jess half drunk just stumbled into the Limo with a laugh
"Main street" Scott said "And be sure to ride the gas!"
Within a few minutes they arrived at the hotel where everyone was at
Jess finally knew what was going on, she said "Scott, I want to go back!"
"Don't worry" he said "It'll be a lot of fun"
Jess said "No!" and then turned away to run.
Scott grabbed her around the mouth, to stop her bitter resistantce
She cried "Don't do this to me!" Scott thought "This bitch is really persistant"
He pinned her arms down and ripped of her clothes as she pleaded for him to stop
He slipped his penis inside her...she screamed, she twisted, she fought.
And then she lost it all at once, and slipped into a state of catatoninc (Tunes out)
Scott had accomplished his goal for that night, this bitch he had got on it
And he grabbed his coat, zipped up his pants, and took to sudden flight
He had taken from her what she could never have again, he was a Thief in the night

this what a sick topical...

but once again mad man took it...

i love the way he flipped the topic... it was killer....

vote MadMan

Mad Man's had really good wordplay.
I was feelin' Mad man's more ..........................
My vote=Mad Man

DAMN good battle/ topical from both...
This is gotta be one of the hardest ones to rate...
L-money- excelent tellin of the tale The pinto K-mart hustler rustler shit really took ya vurse to another
level.
Mad Man- The rape story, damn good rendition on the theif play....

I gotta be perfectly honist, you both came great, a total 50-50 battle
Heads L-money/ Tails mad man
(flips coin) (Stalls) (flips coin two more times)
L-money got heads twice....
Man I really dont wanna vote on this shit cause jus 50-50

Mad Man took this battle, great imagery, flow could of been better in my opinion, but the verse was graphic and gave me a mental picture unfolding as he told it, nice verse, great way to flip it with the whole 'rapist' taking her virginity, nice twist.

Vote: Mad Man

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Don't be sleepin'

this was an ill battle o shit both had ill wordplay i liked both of them it was about the same until mad mans last line i took what she could never have again. that was ill

so mad man gets my vote worddddddddddd!!!!!!!!!

Mad Man: 4
LaRyan: 1

Well personally I wouldn't have voted if I flipped a coin. If it's that close I just compare their best lines. But I don't give a fuck. UPPIN!

I need one more vote
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Back from vacation. Thanks for voting all.
That was a great verse Mad.
Uppin.

P.S. we have like 5 votes before the deadline and the rest of you guys probably no-showed! Word.

FUCK that was a tiight battle better than the usual dis-battles (ie every battle im in) nice stuff G's. Imma have to go with te norm and vot mad man better imagery like vortex said. Ill poll vote on this shit if you give my battle an honest vote.. one.................
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