My Life ( Based On A True Story)
 

If you look in my eyes you can see what I see/
A life of parties crstyle and hennessy/

At the age of 14 I was introduce to the game/
I was young and in charge and I had it all under my name,

money power respect and a baller named Yamagasea/
I didn't see all the ups and downs and life's lil mysteries/

A perfect picture, and my body made a nice figure/
until i gave it up to my sexy ass thug nigga/

Nine months of pain, i knew with him i make it thru the rain/
But this punk nigga, neva gave him a chance to become a real man/

struggling and lost in this world without a king on myside/
made me realize its the world against my baby and I/

Adapted the name Murda Mistress furious and pissed/
I love to be the thug miss/ the bullets is guranteed not 2 miss

Realizing who I be/ lost out on my perfect fantasy/
its me and my child so called a simple family/
And my baby Girls a perfect reflection of me/

Break all laws
defending her at all cause

HOLD UP
Slow ya roll
*******GUN CLIP CHANGE************

2 BE CONTINUED!

not bad but i could be better

Thanks But really was posting to relieve stress didn't really put nonthin major towards the effort you know!

Just felt like text stylen

Shiznit's Thoughts:

hmm...not bad at all...i mean the emotions are there that made this piece stood out in some way...u just expressed urself and put them in words...

it was really simple well i cant really compare it with anything cuz this is like the first drop ive read from u...

over all nice tho...direct to the point....wanna read more..nice job!

p.s.
chynadoll told me bout u and the crew we gettin on...well hit me up anytime...

O thanks, You I was in the forums looking for a crew but I have settled with WarLORDS ILL SEDUCTION crew but thanks and you will hear more from me!

SEDUCTIONS reppin this train....DAMN MA....sick shit......Life is life.......basically sick contend

u kept it basic wit tha wordplay.........but it flowed like liquid

RAP or REAP

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...38&pagenumber=2

And My new onejust posted TERMINOLOGY

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=64824


^^peep yo boy ruths shit

GOOD DROP HOMEGIRL BECAUSE IT WAS REAL, AND MANY PEOPLE DON'T EXPRESS FROM THE HEART. YEAH, IT WAS SIMPLE, BUT BECAUSE IT WAS REAL THAT MADE IT A LITTLE DEEPER WITH EACH PUCH YA HEARD. KEEP DOING YA THING 1ST LADY! ONE!

Ohhh thanks So much lov~~~~~~

IT was from the heart and had a little value to it!!!!!

whoa that was nice im really feelin u

Thanks guy

Much respect for ya

yer its sweet to see emotion, I try to do it but its all raw agression so half of its jibbajabba cuz im thinkin 1000 things at once. But its nice to see a glimpse of the other end of the spectrum.

it was a bit short for my likin but u get off what u wanna get off u made ur point simple. keep doin ur thing

Well thanks a million

Do appreciate all the feedback
love

NICE DROP MA, THAT WAS SOME REAL SPIT KEEP DOIN YA THANG.

"100% REAL" WEST COAST KAMUNITION

"LET THE CHILDREN SEE WHEN THUGS CRY"
2PAC

Thanks for the support

I liked this drop... it was pretty basic, but had feelin' to it. It actually seemed like it meant something. I have a friend who's going through the same thing... so I feel your message.

Tell her to just keep a positive mind frame everthing will work out in the end. It will be hard at first but nothing last forever

this was nice....rhymes were symplistic...then again...it's hard to use large vocabulary when doing an emotional song...i liked this shit....show's what u went through....and how u pulled through it...yeah....real emotional....

BREAKDOWN
Multis - good
Vocab - ok
Metas - good
Emotion - excellent
RhymeScheme - excellent
Flow - very good (except for Yamagasea...lol...couldn't pronounce)
Overall - u had some nice emotional shit goin on here....i think if u would'a put more time into it...it would've come out much better....

Rating
8.5/10

peace
4:20

ill shit,i felt this drop fa real, emotion felt and over all well put down ya dig,well keep droppin tha real shit boo,~1~