Livin' Life (I Wish)
 

Livin' Life (I Wish)

(Hook)
I wish i could live life without hesitation
I wish i could live life without frustration
But i live life with a lot of temptation
I go on and on with only one motivation

(Verse 1)
I wish i could live my life as a rap sensation
Blazin' all of America's hip-hop stations
Givin all tha kids someone to look up
Lookin through magazines for a close-up
People buyin my records, jammin in they rides
Not knowin that im fucked up, but thats besides
People on tha streets justa sayin my name
Sayin, "UNSURPA$$ED has tha dopest game"
I'll do one thing with hoes, and i'll give ya one hint
I take 'em in the bathroon and they give me Bill Clint
People have no idea that rap is harder than it sounds
So when i get annoyed, i go to shoot off some rounds
When my critics go to critque my shit...
They noticed that i'm smokin a blunt so i give 'em a hit
All of a sudden they dont think i'm whack no mo
After they munched all my shit, i showed 'em to do'
No one wants to fuck wit me and i can see why
I can't blame anyone for not wanting to die

(Hook)

(Verse 2)
I wish i could live life making ill collaborations
I'm alomost there, but i will keep on waitin
Goin to tha studio justa makin some rhymes
My game is dope, do i havta tell ya a million times?
When i get to tha crib, i be takin a lil nap
Me and my crew hittin tha club and we're gonna be strapped
At tha club, me and my crew gonna pull an all-nighter
The hoes loins are smolderin, so lets igniter-her
Two-steppin all night, thas how we do
I have mo honies in my mouth than Winnie tha Pooh
If someone fucks tha night up, they gonna get shot down
Your whole crew is whack, its all over town
Gettin ready for a fuck its about time
I jus wanna get a nut off, ya know the white slime
Its 3 o'clock at my crib, 4 bitches on my arm
I dont wanna concus tha bitch so i'll take off my charm
When i'm done wit tha bitches i kick 'em out tha do'
What? I dont want your numbers, i dont love you hoes

(Hook)

(Verse 3)
I wish i could live my life with lots of population
Lines in front of record stores with much anticipation
People rushin tha door, brakin the glass
I've neva seen so many people fall on their ass
This is all a dream of mine, i wish it was true
Waitin to be on stage for my debut
This rap game is what i would like to partake
Workin on my rhymes, waitin for my big break
I'm sure yall know just how i feel
We'll do anything just for a rap deal
Big dreams in our heads and we cant get 'em out
And if we fail we jus sit in tha corner and pout
I know yall feel like me, so herres a God damn tissue
It's UNSURPA$$ED signing off until tha next fuckin issue

(Hook)

Need feedback

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Ok dawg i had tha flow down,this will be a good audio as it's a car jam or a banger,try and work on vocab an shit although for this typa track it doesn't require it,hit ma collab up please dawg,stay up.

Peace

"do anything for a rap deal" dat shit was wack u da type of guy who da rap industry makes money off of / an i dont mean getting a recored deal, your da type to go out an buy rap cd's out da ass ,dress just like what u see on t.v. your basically a rap whore
da only way u would make it is if u made a album an sold it to yourself/wishfull thinking is for penny pushers

fuck dat

uppin for more feedback

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Yo Me Again ur bein hard on tha dude u fuckin newbie asshole.

Peace

thanks dawg, i appreciate dat

still uppin for feedback

^^^^^uppin

c'mon yall i want feedback on this piece

Stop FUCKING upping or else this will be closed..........

This Piece was Nice , I liked it , One of ur best works yet , The chorus was Nice , and some of ur lines were aight , U put great thought into this , and I liked it....Overall U get a 7/10............But u still gotta elevate though

thanks dawg, i appreciate dat....check me out at ur crew try outs

i still want feedback for this shit...hit me

Fag Leave That To The Mods


Nice Drop...FLow was nice...I thought your vocab was ight.......
Would be great vocab if it was just a freestyle...lol......
Nice Hook....Really feelin this drop homie...Liked it a lot....

Overall 8/10 Just work on your vocab and creativity and wordplay....Should be ight by then

aight dawg, this was a good piece,... something more for an audio though.
keep elevating on your vocab though.
there were lines where it didn't worked like

'All of a sudden they dont think i'm whack no mo
After they munched all my shit, i showed 'em to do''

but anywayz, nice piece, keep elevating and try to take it to audio
I'd give the piece 8/10
keep dropping shit like this

thaks yall

keep it coming...this is my best work yet

please, yall hit me

Lmao.....Why u gotta up this so many times!!!!!!!!!..........The rules says U can only up ur open mic twice.................

Jesus Christ Luda, stop begging for Feedback. Its a decent song, but your not gonig to get thirty people telling you so. You should be happy a few people like it, not let the thread die alredy.