New To RB- Let me know what U think
 

Did you ever have a feeling you were destined to loose
WELL GUESS WHAT
That feeling is about to come true
I never asked for this gift
I just been blessed with
From the powers above
TO KICK YOUR ASS WITH IT
You see
I don't have to sit around and think of my rhyme
But I admit I do get ideas from time to time
I just let you get me off
Cause it helps me to vibe
I released LONG AGO what I had bottled inside
Now it's time for me to take this to the next little step
And kill another muthafucka with my sick little spit
So go ahead,
Try and stop me
There aint nothin u can do but take a pussy shot at me
Take your rhyme....... Your rap
Put it in a sack
And leave this Ass Kickin mutha and don't eva come back.......................

well...i think your wack

Yo thanks G...

Very much...
wack...

Peep the...
tutorials...
maybe they...
can be of...
help...


What?...

yeh
elevate dawg
read a dictionary or somethin

HUH ????????????

not much better there, everone else was just a little harsh. the vocab was simple but the flow was okay. topic sucked cuz there really wasn't one. no one can say they spit 100% greatness so don't let it get you down. keep working and elevating to get where you need to be and do you. 1

YOU FALLOWED AN EMINEM FORMAT WHICH REQUIRES ALOT MORE VOCAB AND DIRECT HITS YOU DIDNT DELIVER THAT BUT IT WAS GOOD.

you 1 wack motha fucker this shit sucked

im with everyone else tha posted

/\wit a record of 0-3 so are u


no hate

LOL...i aint got a record..mainly cuz i dont bother battle...anyway...B-Squared...fuck you ya wack mudda fuck...give he kid a few months and hell take a record to 0-4

hey kid....read the dictionary...it doez wondaz...play with words to...jus keep at it....

lol, you show no talent and i dont even think you are supposed to rap, this is a FAD for you, you dont show 1 sign. and by da way all newbies have flow because dats all dey here and not the actual meanings of the sentences

Ya know what MUTHAFUCKAS that are tryin to be dissin
U tryin pissin on my back, well guess what your fuckin missin
I don't need U to tell me who is bad and whos good
I can tell by your records U aint nothin but old school, old news
Old fools, On the brink of whos who in a calssroom of
wit no tools
I can rip U apart wit a glims of my fuckin eye
U die, when U try to be me
MUTHAFUCKA YOUR MINE
Inside U be creatin a sign, to give up causes time
Your blind
I will KILL U with my rhyme
I would go on head to head wit this little chump whore
So I can change his fuckin record to


0-4

JUST WHEN I THOUGHT YOU WAS FINISHED YOU CAME BACK WIT SOME MORE WACK SHIT HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA MAYBE YA PRE TENSE BECAUSE BEFORE YOU STICK YA SWORD UP YA ASS YOU TENSE UP SO NOW I UNDERSTAND WHERE YOU GET YA NAME FROM/

WORD OF ADVISE TAKE UP SEWING

OK let me fuckin try this shit again cause u aint gettin the point

I will circumcise u, Annihilate u
And when I'm done kickin your ass, I'll clean your blood up wit you
I wont go down
But u will
Down on me as Im fuckin u wit my skill
My words are strong and raw and potent
It hurts already wit me kickin ya down now don't it
Soak it up,
cause I'm not even close to becomin done
But when I am you'll know it
Cause your pussies gonna hurt u gotta have one
To be fuckin wit me the way u be
The way u opennin u mouth like u a celebrity
Get a life U fuckin nobody
You'll never have the fuckin talent to kill me
This is bullshit
I know u aint wantin none a this
U aint even worth the urinal that I piss in
Lil hommo hug, hug, kiss, kiss (mwwwwa)
I'll give it to u straight and simple
Wit my dimples, I will pop your head like a pimple
Like RumpleStilskin
Rap my rhyme around your neck, keep ya spinnin
Round and round like a 50 meter runner who is winnin
I wont budge
I wont wanna know why? cuz
In this reality your just a little spec of dust
For me to step on
And make room for the rest of us
Your no distraction, your not even an obstacle
But U will be in traction when my shit gets fuckin ethical
Incredible
I eat your fuckin brains for lunch like there wack shit was edible
I'm tellin ya
I will kill ya muthafuckin ass
So bring it on cause my dope shit is finally done at last

There's no hurt in trying at all. I mean at least you had to guts to post your stuff on here even if you know that you have to be ready for critisms either good or bad.

Alright, here's the thing...Your chosen terms are not well enough thought out. Much more basic than simple. The diss interpretation was kinda weak. You couldve put better metas for your wordplay. It would strengthen some of them as a whole.

To be honest..it had some weaker points and flaws. Not gonna hurt if you ask for help. Everyone can help.