Chrit's return to open mic... What?...
 

Aight look:
This was a little keystyle...
So keep it in mind..


Went from pick-ups to split-ups and back again all with a smile/
Somehow erased the hurt and trials and made it all worthwhile/
Happy now... Gone are the days of unbearable pain and strife/
Picture of perfection it seems like Chrit found the prototype/

Was it that bad a student?... Cause from day one my game failed me/
A train of lines to advance my chance but a simple glance straight derailed me/
These feelings should be a fallacy, but shes the projection of every fantasy/
Outta my league... Searching for ways to justify her fascination in me/
Made the decision... Time to pursue but the game's still in a rut/
Its like Chrit's at a loss for words... and all I've found is "What?..."/
Feelings grow... but most of all the disappointment in myself/
It's like Chrit's life's a library with all my words still on the shelf/
The shit's excruitiating but need to somehow grin and bear it/
Just squash this thought and bide my time until I can declare it/

Went from pick-ups to split-ups and back again all with a smile/
Somehow erased the hurt and trials and made it all worthwhile/
Happy now... Gone are the days of unbearable pain and strife/
Picture of perfection it seems like Chrit found the prototype/

Revelation time... maybe I should just drop the game and come sincere/
But full of fear... That my heart wont express what she wants to hear/
Time finally came... was able to talk, advanced past pleasantries/
And to Chrit's amazement it turned out this girl was feelin me/
Foot in the door... But who knows what she could possibly have in store/
But Chrit's mind is made up like Joe "Cause I dont wanna be a playa no more"/
Ironic... aint it?... I coulda have had her from the start/
But now in this war of love I'm content stationed in her heart/

Went from pick-ups to split-ups and back again all with a smile/
Somehow erased the hurt and trials and made it all worthwhile/
Happy now... Gone are the days of unbearable pain and strife/
Picture of perfection it seems like Chrit found the prototype/

Went from pick-ups to split-ups and back again all with a smile/
Somehow erased the hurt and trials and made it all worthwhile/
Happy now... Gone are the days of unbearable pain and strife/
Picture of perfection it seems like Chrit found the prototype/

Was it that bad a student?... Cause from day one my game failed me/
A train of lines to advance my chance but a simple glance straight derailed me/


Well glad to see your return of open mics....and this peice was staright heat...

FLow was sick..Really got me into it...Just kept me reading and thats really important on any rap. Vocab was nice...so were the multis.....
Keep spittin....
I also like the little chorus...Very nice usage of multis...Nice job..
Keep spittin

Please check outmine...Thanks

Overall-9/10

thanks....

been awhile since I've written

and this...
is officially...
being slept...
upon...

i really felt this, had a nice flow and a nice vocab, and u managed to keep this on subject nicely as well, you had 2-3 lines that messed up parts of the flow, other than that the written was nice....

can u give me feedback and my collab wit syntext?

Went from pick-ups to split-ups and back again all with a smile/
Somehow erased the hurt and trials and made it all worthwhile/
Happy now... Gone are the days of unbearable pain and strife/
Picture of perfection it seems like Chrit found the prototype/

nice "chorus" ^^, didn't match tha flow i don't think but it was good anyway....

as for tha flow itself, that was nice, u got a good chance of gettin in tha industry...

keep it up...

^^^
thanks

Yeah some deep lines...seemed a good return back

flow blah blah etc all included...made it a good read

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hot shit.......good come back...

"Foot in the door... But who knows what she could possibly have in store/
But Chrit's mind is made up like Joe "Cause I dont wanna be a playa no more"/"

^^ had truble figurin it out cuz i got joe budden stuck in my head..but i get it now...hot shit

one question tho...where have u been?

Jail....
yep...
but I'm back...
for good....

^^ Jail? Damn what you do? lol....

**sorry to freepost**

Oh shit....lol forgot to put my 2 cents in....

I really enjoyed this peice...
Yo flow was off the chain dawg....
Sucks that you was gone...Cuz this was sick....
Spit some mo.....cant wait to see more...

Your Grade- 8/10

4 assualt charges...
yep...

Was it that bad a student?... Cause from day one my game failed me/
A train of lines to advance my chance but a simple glance straight derailed me/
These feelings should be a fallacy, but shes the projection of every fantasy/
Outta my league... Searching for ways to justify her fascination in me/
Made the decision... Time to pursue but the game's still in a rut/
Its like Chrit's at a loss for words... and all I've found is "What?..."/

I was really feeling these first 4 lines, I could undastand what ya was go'n through there, and I was actaully laughing out loud with that last one there
tight piece overall, I was feel'n tha flo and the subject matter, nice return Chrit,
use da pen to stay out da pen<----------------(dope)

Revelation time... maybe I should just drop the game and come sincere/
But full of fear... That my heart wont express what she wants to hear/



For some reason. im the kinda guy that thinks why have a girlfriend when u can have 5. i hate to be locked down and have to focus on just one when the juice is just in me. nice open mic chrit. i think my situation is what made me fill it the most. but it was felt...period

Thanks for all the comments...

Keep em comin....

upping

second upping...


what?...

IT WUS OK.....................nothin more nothin less nothin that could make me say WHOA!!!

But .........quit doing Open Mics is not yo style........................lol

Ciao.............................................. .................................................. ...........

^hoe.

^^^

what he said....


What?...

Tight as hell opening bar:
Was it that bad a student?... Cause from day one my game failed me/
A train of lines to advance my chance but a simple glance straight derailed me/

Nice lines:
Feelings grow... but most of all the disappointment in myself/
It's like Chrit's life's a library with all my words still on the shelf/

Foot in the door... But who knows what she could possibly have in store/
But Chrit's mind is made up like Joe "Cause I dont wanna be a playa no more"/
^^ill joe reference

OVERALL: nice as hell, I heard you were tight but this is just amazing, keep up the good work dawg

good keystyle...nice vocab an emotion...i like the way you did that verse it was tight peace...

thanks for the comments

fuckin tight ass song nig... i was feelin that...
ill ass shit man..
A.T.

well^^^^ thats great guess what i dont think ud ever settle down with that attude and chrit nice loved it was fellin it all the way

chrit, u kno this was a good piece because it spoke to people... example is dude ^^^^^. People were able to look beyond the writing aspect and feel what u were sayin. That's the best shit. Nice drop... soon I'll make a return to Open Mic. Me n u will have to hit up the collabo.

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what to say what to say
1st off, good drop kid...
the flaws if any...topic is kinda played..the approach was nice
hook was good, nice and short
both verses had the flow fall off like 1-3 times but nothing bad
overall your good...now quite at my level
wait..."Im better than you"
nevermind

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