-A Wish Ungranted-
 

Its hard to sit back and watch someone you love die slowly,
solely of their own will, and contempt for life wholly.
Risking life for cheap thrills, like flame throwers at the circus,
I wish you'd put out the flame, but you burn yourself on purpose..
In a world full of temptation, you always succomb,
Scars on arms dont purge pain, they just make your heart numb.
Liqour's quicker, but it brings only momentary relief,
Is one night worth the cost of a life filled with grief?
Aren't you tired of living in the shadows of smoke?
It makes your mind choke, your life shrinks with every toke.
All that cloudiness lingers and it impairs your vision,
Can't answer "How many fingers?", let alone make a decision.
I HATE IT, hate to see you with your eyes all a glaze,
slurring words, staring at me with that dead, frozen gaze.
Those moments scare me the most, I will not deny it,
Its then I feel like i should say a prayer and shut your eye lids.
Even if, by some miracle, you tried to recover,
your body's been damaged, and you won't get another.
Selfish bastard, its what YOU like, but its hurting many others,
YOU'RE NOT A CHILD, I'M TIRED OF ACTING LIKE YOUR MOTHER.
NOT A CHILD,_ SURE NOT A MAN, NO LONGER CAN YOU MASK IT,
YOU'RE DRIVING THE NAILS STRAIGHT INTO YOUR OWN CASKET.
WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING? NO CAREER YOU'RE PURSUING,
I WONT BE AT YOUR GRADUATION, ILL BE AT YOUR VIEWING.
THE STORMS BREWING, YOUR GRATTITUDE HAS ALWAYS BEEN MEASLY,
THATS THE PROBLEM- YOU'RE FUCKING GIVEN EVERYTHING TO EASILY.
SPOILED BITCH- WHY'D YOU TURN? HOW THE HELL ARE YOU DRIVEN?
CAN'T YOU APPRECIATE ALL OF THESE THINGS YOU'VE BEEN GIVEN?
NO YOU CANT, CUZ IF YOU COULD,YOU'D APPRECIATE YOUR HEALTH
AND FIND STRENGTH DEEP INSIDE, INSTEAD OF KILLING YOURSELF.

"I want to change"..Is there a shovel to come with all of that bullshit?
You not only speak it, you also are full of it..
What was that whole speech about getting on track?
cutting back, easing off, slowly getting your life back.
I was a fool to believe it- that you'd actually achieve it-
i think you lasted two hours before you took that weed-hit,
Decieved it, Shoulda known that you'd actually have the nerve,
You tried your best? well, actions speak louder than words..
I was always there for you, though your weakness annoyed me,
Go ahead and do you..go ahead and disappoint me.
I tried, and in the process I've ripped up myself,
not even your best friend can help you if you don't help yourself.
You're pitiful, I want you to know that, i want to explain,
That its not too late for you to get help and change..
But you're not trying to hear that, so kill yourself, that's fine..
Just throw away what I've done for you.. and dont continue to waste my time.

I give up, on you, I give up on your plight,
I give up on trying to make everything alright
I wish you would have listened, wish you'd of put down that "knife",
Wish I could be successful in saving your life.

WOW

this piece was really really good, it seems like you put alot of emotion into this piece, I could feel it. I can relate to it in a way
I liked the first verse better then the 2nd. When you swictched from being calm to angry...like you were screamin the words in CAPS.

I really liked this piece....it probly touches everyone heart in a way. Keep it up. I would really like to see more from you.

kreep droppin

peace

Damn, y'know what is really scary about this? Is that this reminds me so much of me.

I mean, there was a time when I was a miscreant dilinquint. On drugs, giving a fuck less about school or my life, and yeah, suicidal.

I eventually changed of course, I made the choice. Though, I'm not sure why. But it's definitly amazing how much of a personal touch you gave your peice and how personal it hit with me. Simply because I felt you were describing the old school The Necromancer. (Or The Great One which I was calling myself at the time. Which... I am by the way. The great one... really...)

~Shalom~

iight

WOW man this was great, nothing bad to say about it at all!

and i dont want to seem like im copying everything Necro said, but you really did hit home for me too, half the stuff im still going throu, just reading i could feel the harsh words my mother you to say to me. it even like pin pointed one time, when i came home and told her she was going to be a grandmother, all those caps and the second verse contanied alot of what she actually said to me. you made this piece so real, so alive, full of emotion, that it brought up such clear images such strong feelins, as if i was living it.

beautiful

~Tera~
DONT HATE

Thanks so much you three.

this is an interestin piece

not sure on the bold part but i assume its to make it stand out more, but it stands out enuff wit out the bold....

there are a lot of quotable lines, but i cant c&p it all so ill juz say that

hope i can write like this someday

^Thank you..
The caps part was just to show how frustrated I was getting, how angry, ect.

Thanks again. ^'n.

emotion is the soul of poetry and this piece is the epitome of emotion.......so is it work from the soul?......i wonder......i am humbled at the way your words hit me......bit back a tear.....i'm not soft.......just a little tender now.....lol.....this was a very well written piece.....no wonder you destroyed everyone in previous tourney's........you're to strong for suicide and i feel you....kinda poking fun at the people who make mountains of molehills so to speak..................definently a dope piece........you have a new fan..1

like many said...wow...it looks like you were
burned...punked...or in real words broken down
emotionally into a million pieces from a
faulty relationship...all I can think of is....

Atmosphere - Fuck You Lucy

this had that feeling that slug always seems to get
across in his songs...which can get annoying but for
the most part is good....from your all caps typing
(im assuming your screaming in audio and not that
type of screaming most males would like to hear)
to everything else within this package...
a well done piece...some of us should just go on
and put cd's out if we havent already....
like nancy....you....others as well...
diverse artists...keep painting...

this was very good and enjoyable gege:)

Aw Thanks fellaz, i really appreciate the replies..

Prophiit, this was definately work from the soul....It really is about my bestfriend..my ex-best friend I should say..
I hope everyone understands that he wasn't trying to commit suicide, not cutting his wrists or anything, but he was killing himself with all the drugs he was doing..and messing up his life...and the "knife" in the last line is symbolic of all of those substances..and the references to the scars on arms was like the damage he did every time he partook in them.
He didn't really die...yet..not physically..
He is dead to me now tho, and I sincerely wish i could have helped him..cuz I loved him but he loved drugs, and when you love drugs you don't really love anything/anyone else.
well enough blabbing.
THANKS AGAIN YALL.

yo gyrl thats shit was tight. very deep and profound. much love.

u never seem to dissapoint me,all your shit is real,and hardcore,this wasnt an exceptional piece except in tha fact that it was ill,well spit,and tha emotion was all over,so many times hav i seen this shit wit some of my homeboys/homegirls,its arollercoaster up--and down up---and down,mostly down though,nice shit babygirl keep ya head up.~1~

Thank you...

I really don't like to copy what's other people have said but once again, you hit home, except i'm at your point of view. I'm Not a mad girlfriend, a guy who doesn't his friends to get all fucked up, very very tight.

Peace

Thnx Phoenix

HOLDS UP HANDS IM gege's numba 1 FAn
 

gurl you knew id find this

Its hard to sit back and watch someone you love die slowly,
solely of their own will, and contempt for life wholly.

your unique ryhme scheme that ive ALWAYS admired you find ways to ryhme anything and Have it make sense
this is a nice intro oto your peice
youve always made it so that we can FORSEE what ever it is your story holds
but as i remeber there is ALWAYS a wonderful twist to each of your peices

In a world full of temptation, you always succomb,
Scars on arms dont purge pain, they just make your heart numb.
^
lets you kno that teh person thats writing / telling this CARES deeply for teh person
and feels for them


YOU'RE NOT A CHILD, I'M TIRED OF ACTING LIKE YOUR MOTHER.
NOT A CHILD,_ SURE NOT A MAN, NO LONGER CAN YOU MASK IT,
YOU'RE DRIVING THE NAILS STRAIGHT INTO YOUR OWN CASKET.


I BELIVE that this is teh CLIMAX to your peice gege

damn you are so talented

im once again in awe of you and the only thing i regret is the fat that ive been gone so long i kno ive missed so many peices from you.not only you but necro, doped, keezy

all of you......
wonderful gege

simply wonderful

hazy baby

wowwwwwww.... just WOW... nice piece... I can definitely relate to it, since I've a friend who's feeling exactly the same and you just stand there, watching and feeling hopeless, becuz no matter how much effort you put into it... it never seems to work out.
Very very nice piece, very inspirering and very sad on the other hand.
This was a piece of honest poetry, just letting your feelings out and I enjoyed every single bit of it.
Keep droppin

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