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Krem and Saracen collab-girls
KREM
This is Krem and Saracen dissin girls for what they are won't fuckin hang around you, unless you got a nice car won't call you honey, unless you got the money this shit right here, it's gonna be funny all girls do is complain bout dumb ass shit we do what they say, and still listen to em bitch half the time we don't even know what the fuck we did and ya'll get all pissed off, cuz you think we're stupid taking out your emotions on us, cuz you can't get a blessin we probly never even did shit, your just fuckin PMSin "if you dunno what you did, i'm not gonna tell you then" the fuck is that bullshit, your makin me pick up this pen girls never tell the truth, always gotta tell a lie "what you talkin bout honey? i never slept with that guy" we know you fuckin did it, so justa fuck admit it go da fuck home, and take your wrist and slit it don't get pissed off girl, your fault this came to summon tell your new little boyfriend, he's gots it comin i said i don't care, and believe me i don't fuck this kid up, i can't promise i won't why you trying to fight me? you don't even fright me it's over?..fuck you bite me, go the fuck away and don't fuckin write me (Bitch!) hook girls why you gotta act like this you really startin to get us pissed throwin your angry fits and shit we've had enough bitches we're sick of it SARACEN money brings flings,its all about the material things, got dough?Bitch hears wedding bells and see diamond rings, got none?bitch disappears quicker than you can say goldigger, she'll leave a nigga,move on to sumone whos wallets bigger, not givin a fuck for my emotion,distinct lack of devotion, hearts full of comotion,do i kill her and dump the body in the ocean? cus this chicks got me twisted,feel like goin out and gettin plastered, to forget she ever existed,playin with my mind is summat she mastered, not anymore,not gonna be used,get rid of her before i go mad, left confused,emotionally abused,sayin she still loves me,to Bad, scarred for life,after the way she treated me,i feel bitter, she better stay out ma way,if i ever see that bitch again ill hit-er hook girls why you gotta act like this you really startin to get us pissed throwin your angry fits and shit we've had enough bitches we're sick of it just playin girls you know we love you |
concept seemed kinda unique lol, but yo kre you spit it well...flow was on point..i liked this
half the time we don't even know what the fuck we did and ya'll get all pissed off, cuz you think we're stupid taking out your emotions on us, cuz you can't get a blessin we probly never even did shit, your just fuckin PMSin that was tight good spit homie... an saracen...you flowed very good..the metas an al were hot..i liked this part the best.. not givin a fuck for my emotion,distinct lack of devotion, hearts full of comotion,do i kill her and dump the body in the ocean? i thought that was pretty dope...not a bad callab good drop...check out my new spit..."different teritorial flow" n if one of you wonna callab hit me up |
i didn't like it. obviously written about "girls" by a couble of "boys".
first of all, if you didn't refer to women as "bitches", you might not get dissed so much by them. very sophmoric at best, but actually it was just juvenile. elevate. |
thanks for da feed back
roux you'll be alright keep uppin |
that niggas just a hater that flow was hard nice flow both of yall niggas keep elevatin
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you both spit pretty good verses here, good shit.
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thanx for the feedback this was my first open mic and ill be doin more in the future so make sure u check em out
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i was feelin it, the topic was uhh "good", i liked the vocab and wordplay, the content was nice by both of you, overall good shit. keep elevatin and postin.
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thanks yall
keep uppin |
[Freepost] Whack! [/Freepost]
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uppiin for some feedback
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Hahaha, i actually liked this piece, it made for a nice change from all the other depressing or 'Life Sucks' type pieces that get posted up in here. . This was pure comedy, i was laughing through it and certain lines had me like.. "Werd." especially that line about they wont stop to talk unless you got a nice ride for them to get in. .
All in all not a bad piece, flowed pretrty nice, creative at times, some truth, could use a little help with multi's& internals but it made me laugh and i enjoyed reading it. Reply to mine. Eace-Pay! |
nice shit ladies
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ummmm...yeh?
anyway, keep uppin |
uppin!
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aiyo... I liked this... it was on point... lol @ all the haters...
Krem- dawg, I liked how you brought this in... overall your flow was on, it was kinda choppy to me, but its all gravy nigga, it was flowin... your concept was legit and the way you worded shit cracked me up... VERY NICE NIKKA oh yeah, I wanna do that collab mang... we can make some ill ass shit for real... Sac- nigga, I like all the multies you threw in... you managed to use multies and have your spit makkin sense and that itself speaks alot about your skill level... your wordplay was good and you vocab was decent... I like your shit too mang... keep droppin, I wanna read more of your shit.... NICE DROP HERE!!!! UPPIN FO' MY HOMEBOYS |
Decent .. Lack Of Vocab .. But You Can Always Work On That .. All in All .. It Was Okay...
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tha topic was intresting, it flowed alright,structure was good,it was funny but true, tru u need to elevate wit vocab and multis,keep elevatin though nice drop.peace.~1~
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thanks
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GARBAGE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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*sniffs the air*
i smell pussy,is that you syn . . . . . . . . . . |
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