Slow Dance
 

OMG. Hazy baby, this piece was absolutely ADORABLE. One of the best things I've read on here in a long time, seriously! So simple, yet so full of meaning and wisdom. I loved it entirely. Every single line, great imagery, nice title and extraordinary message.
My favorite parts were:

>When you ask How are you?

Do you hear the reply?

>Ever told your child,

We'll do it tomorrow?

And in your haste,

Not see his sorrow?

Beautiful, Mama. Great to have you back on the boards.....hope you stick around for a while...

Luv, GeGe*

i've seen this before, someone sent me this in an email so forgive me for doubting your claim to being the author but nonetheless a good piece but i cannot properly respond because i've read it before, 1luv.

wonderful spoken word type of peice..ima sucker for anythign
like this i always gets me listening...that coffeehouse beat and
a smooth voice that im imagining from yourself to lace the beat

something that people could fall asleep to or wake up with...
im saying this in a good way dont get me wrong hazy...

wonderful imagery and dialogue..nothing to critique
wouldnt wanna critique..this was awesome...

scrolling aside

:rolleyes:

la paz

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i liked this...had good imaginary an descriptions, and emotion was pure..you could reall inhance every word an realize wut you was sayin...good vibe

iight

i too have to agree with Da NFamous i belive ive gotten it in one of those dame fwds. maybe you did write this one and its simalar to the one i got i a fwd, then i would apologise, just im not sure so i cant really reply on this one either

iight

i too have to agree with Da NFamous i belive ive gotten this poem in one of those dame fwds. maybe you did write this one and its simalar to the one i got i a fwd, then i would apologise, just im not sure so i cant really reply on this one either.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

I really liked this piece,i diden't get the meaning the first time reading it.Then i read it over again and it made a lot more sense to me.Overall it was a pretty nice poem to a hard topic,it was very basic.
Stay up...keep dropping
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That's weird, I got this one in an email too.

Ok honestly I wasn't really feeling this.
Try to make your next piece a little more complex
Try Some Imagry, similes are sweet and easy, and so are metaphors.
Mabey its just my taste in poetry or how I write.

No beef just being real

i love this piece
i like the topic alot
and with the basic style u aplied u pulled it off big time


Ever told your child,

We'll do it tomorrow?

And in your haste,

Not see his sorrow?




Let a good friendship die

Cause you never had time

To call and say,"hi"




When you worry and hurry through your day,

It is like an unopened gift....

Thrown away.



i really liked those lines






and yes i can remember u from way back
keep posting

No comment.

I've parodized plenty of lines from other people. So I shouldn't front.

But parodization and plagerization aint the same thing.

Again, no comment.

*Shrugs*

I've never known Hazy to pass off someone else's work for her own....I hope she didnt this time..

Twas like a gentle yet lightly substantial breeze. Lightly in the sense it isn't immediately heavy...

It was easy to get into. Easy to read all the way through.

Very nice piece. Executed quite superbly. Though the ending came good in the end, i felt it was a bit off (a bit, that's my critique!..heh..)..


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i dont really kno what to say ive never recived a response saying theyve recived my work in an email before....if you have ever seen this is would ahve been on poetry cafe.com
under my page HazynLove

this was written approximatly 6 1/2 weeks ago
ive never been questioned of my work before and actually its quite offending.....and id appreciate it if you guys could remeber the sender of your emails.....

poetry cafe does a random poem of the day but i never recived a notice of myne being selected

the sender would be Poetrycafe/natalie

She's the moderator of that particular room

anyways thanks for teh replies

hello,

listen I mean no offence but this poem is not your own. It is a poem writen by a man named David L. Weatherford. I understand that this is a good poem, and actually this poem has been around for a fair amount of years, and has also been used in the past, and plagerized. just a heads up.... thats all! My respect.

http://www.davidlweatherford.com/slowdance.html :eek:

i unno, but someone i know worte almost the same damn thing befor she died of brain cancer... no hate an im not pointin fingures but whats with that...



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i really dont have any comment i like your original pieces if this piece is some one elses then you shouldnt pass it off as yours but if it indeed is yours, this piece was clean.~1~

Yea, nice try hazy, looks like you almost had everyone thinkin it wuz urs huh? And it has been forwarded to many people, by people who got it from that site, and that site is fairly old, because i been there before, long time ago. Be careful not to do that again, tho' keep dropping.

{Love}

Banned for passing off someone elses writing as her own.

^The End your RB's Suge Knight.

A Gangsta in his own way..