first time freestyleing
 

my brother aint registered yet but he wanted to do his little freestyle, he will be called THE BENJAMIN.

Im a mirical, drilical, my lyrics are mystirical
Im like an outcast with a lot of
cash and a weehacle.
I aint a peace maker so fuck u,ere on my own to beat u with my beat like this, rhymes like this, styles like this it goes blast leave at the past makin mc all lookin like the ex vanilla makin mewrickle look like the new godzilla (ugly),shut ur mouth or u might get poped like when 50 got shot both of r the fakest ones cause both of u got shot from a bb gun cause Im the true jigga nigga u better not fuck with cause I will bust ur face like Im some 50C u heard about me in the getto or the library cause Im the best selling coca nigga a across the sea if u want some just look for Ill be P-I-M-P U-P ur mumat three.
PEACE OUT

If ugot some coments just say it ,cause I would like 2 improve HOLLA

kay this was... uhhh... not good.. what the fuck is a weehacle? its rhyme was a bit off.. i think you need to elevate big time before you drop again and about dropping again do you really think you should.. this rap needs better structure.. more vocab, and more of a rhyme scheme.. oh ya dont make up words ;)

what he said^^
elevate and done make up words
say it to yourself at the same speed - good check for flow
dont make up words (wanksa)

get better

Its That Simple

how bout dis u all wack so beat it lil crane u wack face it yeah Mc all yeh get the name come insane

come on man i know u could do better man
u are a rertard ulgy geek
next time if u want beef i will give u beef
but dont make up words u pussy hole
bring it if u wanna bring it pussy glock is going down u fuckin back stabber
iam out

hahaha this cat done made up words and shit. This has to be the worst post ive eva seen on rb's open mic hahaha....Keep elivate'n, 1

im only 14 years old but check tis out

mc all fake ass wigga ur thing ur a nigga faceing lil crane selling cocaine no playin game cause it's time to kill all that drama mayne it's three oclock i'ts to fuck ur mama mayne u think my lyrics are to complex cause i got a rolex and i luv sex with ur mama she like my sweet taste of banana.lil crane be tha name u better know i aint playin so why dont somebody finish him off put right through his cross mc to the all and thats my last call, and there will be more.

Holla back bitch u can hate its okey its okey i m on fire bitch ass wigga

need too elavate........................................... .....nah really needs to elavate....................................what is a wheeicle.......................................... .....quite wack...............

Lil crane you know who dis is and if you want beef bring it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!












(Need to elevate nuff first) lol

A GOOD IDEA WOULD BE TO NOT POST EVER AGAIN TILL YOU ELEVATE MASSIVLEY, FREESTYLE EVERYDAY FOR A COUPLE OF YEARS THEN COME BACK AND TRY TO POST SOME SHIT BUT UNTILL THEN I WOULDNT POST IF I WERE YOU,CAUSE YOUR ONLY GONNA GET RAGGED ON, OH YEA BY THA WAY...THIS SHIT SUCKED..NO STRUCTURE..NO RHYME SCHEM..NO SENSE..IT DIDNT EVEN HAVE SKILL BEHIND IT, NO BEEF JUS BEIN REAL WIT YA..OH YEA NO BODY CARES IF YOUR 14 THATS NOT AN EXCUSE TO NOT BE ABLE TO FLOW, I KNOW FOURTEEN YEAR OLDS THAT CAN WRECK AND SHIT, YOULL GET NO SYMPATHY.~!~

^^^yo lil crane im 14 too, but at least my shit makes sense, check out my posts, either one mistake or back in hell, and youll see that ur age aint an excuse for not bein good, i try, i put time into what im sayin so i wont get any of the messages these cats is givin ya, cause i probably wouldnt post anymore if know one thought i was ok, so dude try and keep ur age to urself, cause i dunno bout u, but id much rather be judged compared to everyone else, then only kids my age, but whatever, keep postin and elevatin, and ull get better.

peace.....

ok i started out like this about a year ago. i am now 13 and i have some advice. try to have the whole verse about the same thing. dont make up words or use words from other languages(sp), and dont talk about moms cuz that shits sick. so look at some other posts and that should help you get better

u shouldnt even be on this site if ur spittin shit about weehacles. go to some fag rap site and talk bout that, but not here. anyway what the fuck is a weehacles? if u cant figure out how to post somethin that people can comprehend u better off just leavin, cause no one wants to read jumbled up shit, so whatever, either get ur thoughts together and post somethin at least half way descent so people wont bag on u like this, or just dont post again, cause if u post another peice of shit like this, nobody is gonna even want u here. so make up ur mind homie cause this is ridiculous.

peace.....

SCAAAAAAARY SHIT! What tha fuck man. Peep my shit and read it. Its kinda off but still good. Maybe u should up ur shit A LOT!!!! I dont mean to where it looks better. I mean tha whole bit. Better stucture, better vocab, and better complex. So um... yea... Later.

HAHAHA! my god this guy is fuckin terrable!

I started off bad but this is complete stinkin rotten dogg shit!

yeah u wack fix up lil crane before someone gives u a bitch like i did 2 your mama yeah beat it you wigga yeah E.I

why are u copying lines from d12 man
make up ur own shit and stop copyin others u pussy hole

i will battle u but dont copy from others u rertard
holla back!!!!!!!!!!!!

sick guy tell that wigga who da man and give him a bitch slap

Why the fuck are u robing lyrics from other people u fuckin rartard
u copied them lyrics from Eminem u fuckin pussy hole#
if u wanna battle me i will battle u but dont copy lyrics thhough

dude come wat was that, work on basicly everthing, and dont make words and shit.

lil crane, cocaine? i'm suprised you know the game. Why don't you try droppin' about baseball or somethin more your speed?" at least somethin' you know somethin' about you know? an whoever's little brother this is should get hit for letting him post. now i've never fucked with guns so i'm talkin' with a fist. i ain't no THUG. an neither are you crane

yeah thats terrible as fuck and i am only 14 also and my shit makes sense when i spit it.. wheehacle what the fuck ha ha ha

u all wanna b's let me take u 2 fame rip down lil crane hes wack and a somailian with a head as big as venus and got a small penis
in a bit piece