[Wk1] IC: Ill Mental vs Sonn In Time
 

ight ight ight.... never faced you b4... should be good

checkin in...good luck

ok i guess ill write my piece.....i got nothing else to do...good luck and hope you dont no-show

ok i worked hard on this piece so if you dont understand anything then please dont vote....if you dont get anything then just dont vote...

Slight Of Hand

Were all embraced with several options, so many paths to choose
Life is just like a game, you go far until you lose
Darkness embraced those who let it overcome them
Then days of vicious pain is the only thing waiting above them
Many crimes happen througout the world for reasons unknowned
People abuse the freedom which when born they are bestowed
Hatred runs the air and problems lead to violence
Violence leads to weapons and weapons lead to silence
God created us equally and man has taken it for granted
Then times got rough and people cried to god..they chanted
People never see the glory of what they have until its taken
Thinking their making things better when chaos is all their making
Lives being ended every day because of careless actions
Homicidal acts caused by misfortunes because people never felt satisfaction
Some have great memories others have memories that will haunt
People flash their possesions to others not as wealthy and pose a taunt
So many things lead to problems that happen for stupid reasons
Then it all ends when someones on the floor bleeding
People consider crime after getting stripped from their possesions
They feel they must have anything its become an obsession
Every person was made for a reason and shouldnt believe lifes a joke
Many die early because of maniacs that are entertained with seeing people choke
Weapons were made for protection but are now opened to mankind
To people like killers who have problems in their mind
Enviornments destroyed and pollution through the air
People see it but walk away without a care
They think the laws a joke and feel they are in command
God has created something ruined by the Slight Of A Hand

theirs...30....match it...good luck

took my idea... bastard... im NOT gonna no show... i am writing my shit right now...

^^stfu and stop complaining...if u had the idea u shouldve posted first stupid...and ya better not fucking no-show...u dont got much time...and theirs no excuses on no-showin = /.

about to post my verse....



and you know what?


eat a dick

He's the magician, he's the trick, and he's the whole act
He's the assistant, the volunteer, and the rabbit pulled out the hat
His whole life he's had to work at, gettin his whole act polished
Untill the day he met a girl that with one look demolished
All his dream hopes and cares, with one flirty stare
Was always too busy to care, girls and his magic didn't compare
He always had one love in life, that was to make people smile
While puttin them in awe, and makin the time he took worth the while
He could pull cards outta no-where, take a penny from your ear
He could saw himself in half, show no fear, shed no tears
He could make himself dissapear, he made this his carreer
He lived for the crowd to cheer, cause it made his life worth while
He would never perform for money, all he needed was the people to smile
It made him feel like a child, the bright colored sparks he'd make appear
Were like a whirl-wind of freedom, dazed like headlights on a deer
But this girl caught his attention, like the first time he saw magic
Their eyes connected and made fireworks, another first time for a different magic
This story isnt tragic, but it shows the power that all women have
Cause as a magician he was a whole, but with her he was sawed in half
She wanted to be with him all the time, and it was a mutual feeling
After only being together six months, he found himself with a ring kneeling
Asking her to be his forever, through sickness and in health
He confessed his undying love for her, and said with her he needed no wealth
But he didnt get the expected reaction, no fireworks lit up the sky
She replied with hesitation, no explanation, just good-bye
The magician had never felt this before, never had experienced these emotions
Was alwasy too caught up in magic, working shows, or doin promotions
He tried to forget about her, but it plagued his mind all day
And after 6 months, he relized that his life was in dismay
Everyday he'd sit and wonder, would she ever come back so he could see her
But as each day went by she wouldnt return, it became more and more clear
Finally he decided, that he needed a final act to top off his career
He thought up a brand new trick, no rabbits, he wouldnt make anything appear
It was clear in his mind, he made sure he had the whole thing planned
Gathered a crowd, then made his life dissapear with the slight of hand

This is the part where you get to decide what happened to him...
Ima leave it open to interpretation, because everyone has a different
outlook on life.. I have my own thoughts and ideas of what happened,
but that might not suit, or please you... so suit yourself

^^ermm u used my concept?...= /.....w/e..next time get original

lets get some votes....

^^^ummm ok.... our topicals are TOTALLY different....

mine is about a magician and your is about god and nuclear war and shit... quit bitchin, and may the best verse win

ok very good verses by both....Dope indeed..

Sonn-i enjoyed your piece a lot few falws maybe working on schem would make it be presented better but overall theres no complains on this one..props.

Illmeantal-same thing I really enjoyed this one too..perfect set up the story was told ver ywell and at the end the way u made us decide the outcome was dope..

-so this battle was very close i have a feeling there will b votes both ways..but i have tovote for the story i liked reading better and that was illmentals ......but still props again to both..good Read-

vote-Illmental

lets get some votes....and good luck ill.....

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Both Of Ya'll Were Equal Til I Got To Ill-Mentals
Finishing Lines.. That Pretty Much Stood Out On Top
Of Both Verses.. So Thats My Summary..

Vote - Ill-Mental

errr.....i told u to match my 30...not go over 30...w/e....more votes....

well i was key-styling it and it just was kinda flowin out of my brain... so i figured why stop... i never even counted how many lines i had... but good luck

Hatred runs the air and problems lead to violence
Violence leads to weapons and weapons lead to silence
^^^thats a fuckin dope line

yea i kon...that was my best line....:D

Vote : ILL-Mental

This was very close to call.......I read the verse from Sonn and was like damn.....thats gon be hard to beat..........you had some nice creativity......and your flow was nice.......there were some flaws but over it was tight

Then i read mentals sick...........nice creativity, nice theme.......your close was dangerous.....you were jus too much for him

Thats why ILL got my vote

Alright, I have just read both pieces and heres my thoughts.....


Sonn......

The depth of your poem was what really drew me to your piece....no fantasy BS but complete realism in itself.... i really had an easy time understanding the piece along with following the flow..heres a line that got me nicely.....

"Violence leads to weapons and weapons lead to silence
God created us equally and man has taken it for granted
Then times got rough and people cried to god..they chanted
People never see the glory of what they have until its taken"

Total truth sadly...things are recognized and changed through consequeces which leads to misfortune and hopefully eventually some sort of happiness.... Great piece Sonn

Ill.....

Your piece to me was less indepth but still held a good truth/meaning.....Lives can be changed drastically just with one small sequence.....which can turn to drastic measures....sadly some relations aren't sought on the same view point....Its a guessing game...and it sucks....nice work


vote: Sonn-In Time

^^finally....deacon someone whos all about topical and poems...we finally get someone who is actually for this to vote...everyone else is "follow the leader"....atleast deacon actually read this shit

2-1 U....uppin

yeha.... whatever you say lol... just dont be a sore loser if you dont win... and i wont either

i dont care...i mean i just want people like camarac...evolve...sureal...and deacon to come in cuz they kno this shit...but w/e...its just a rap site so it dun matter...uppin

Both Verses Sucked. Almost Made Me Puke.

And That's Real Talk...

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^^^best vote yet

Ill Mental [1-0]
Sonn In-Time [0-1]

Sonn In-Time, You will be in a Casket Match next week for being a whiney bitch. Have fun with that.