when i persicute myself(god release me)
 

The idea is in the back of my head-
put one in my head and im dead-I cant pretend-
Like I can contend to not wanting it to end.
nothing can stop im my only friend.
Im nothing and have achieved nothing-
this way I leave having done something.
The razor to the wrist-
Last goodbye’s already been writ.
Waite let me resight-make sure I did this right.

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DEAR DIARY
This will be the last entry I ever make-I keep faith.
god will forgive but this the only way I save face.
Im tired of being in this place.
and I know my will grows weak.
Im tired now I need sleep-to rest in peace to a world where im not considered a freak.
Where im excepted no dissected to be detested-
Infested by a family that shows love so molested
People can never see me equal.
Im ugly- nobody loves me- just shove me.

Is life really worth living-my everything has been taken but im still giving.

And why pray or delay-When every day my pain replays and relays-
They say life is a gift but for mine I pay each day.
***maybe i should put happiness on lay~away.***
theres so much pain to the point im loosing my brain-going insain-the desire to see my life drain becomes untamed.
My worlds stained-now I will stain it back with a razor to my veign-and cut out the shame.
It is an easy thing to conceive-When your visions clouded you can only perceive-To let anger flow and I know they didn’t mean let it bleed.
But this is what I have left-My life is mess-im always depressed-feelings repressed- this how they must be addressed.
All I ever asked-is to be left alone not to be tasked-with excepting being back stabbed by fake people in masks-
Who always harass-Or to be noticed by woman not passed-to be seen with a queen not to be considered a perv wanting some ass-im not your objects of cruel jokes abd laughs.
They say when you are amplee-made loved to you should be happy.
but my love experience was nasty-loosing my virginity to my daddy.
That’s why my life is filled with punchlines- I was taught to feel love involved slapping.
So do that in my lines-and give my heart in rapping.
This aint a song this my life what im feeling.this Is me now how im dealing-
With being my woarst enemy-and lashing out with death as my remedy-
Im ready.

uppin

yo WORD...I got a rhyme where I was writin' a letter to God too...ya shoulda holla'd at me man...but whateva though...this was a dope drop...nuttin' short of ya usual skizzillz...just try to hit ya rhymez up with some multi'z and you'll be almost as dope as me...;)

WTF man....lol.....why u have to be so down and deppressed like that.....lol....you sboilt my day now..!!!!

Seriously to...dope as fuckin hell..!!! I like the hard, deppresin shit...i especialy like writtin it...i find so easy....
and the beginnin was dope...like a really ill lil intro....id love to see sumthin like this as an audio..1!
(hint hint)

dope man....i really liked it...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84362
holla man...peace

YO I GOT A NEW PEACE THAT king inspired AND I WILL POST TOMORROW IF YOU LIKE THIS THE NEXT IS TWICE AS GOOD I DID THIS OUT OF BOARDOM SAO I REFLECTED ON MY EMOTIONS AFTER ME WIFE AND KIDS WERE KILLED.THIS WAS THE PRODUCT TOMORROWS IS ABOUT 9 TO 5 SLAVERY IN ALL RTHNIC CONCEPT.
I HOPE YOU WILL ENJOT I WOULD LIKE YOU BOTH FOR THE REMIX IDEAD I HAVE THAT REQUIRES 2 REAL GOOD ARTISTS.
IT IS OPEN TO ANYONE WHO THINGS THEY GOT THE SKILLS TO PULL IT.

lol...is that an Invite..??

anyway...can u peep my shit for me bro..??
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84362

its an invite to collab if you like and i will peep your stuff now

This was nice, ....the intro was ok,...and yea u write kinda depressed, lol^, but its nice to read...ur vocab was a bit les in here, ..but combined with the concept, ..that dsnt matter that much...nice drop

Props.

thnk you i appreciate the insight please tell me what would you change

Well i think, u dont change things u write, ..but u could do somthings bout ur structure,...kinda, use, less words that still result in the same,...and up the vocab,..but with a good concept, for me personally, ..the vocab, ...idsnt really inportant,....but it makes it nicer to read....combined wit a good structure, ..its even better, than its allready is,....but for u personally, (Cuz u have nice concepts, and a good vocab most times) i would say work on structure...

it's alright, cud b better tho, work on your rhyming scheme a bit more tho


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peep ma open mic
[url=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=84427]The Struggle[/ulrl]

i'll do that twin thnks

^^^:D ...I'm an inspirational teacher...lol...:cool: you know I'm down...

nice

yo that was a nice drop Word P... well we should have a collab sometime.. pick a topic

that post was dope as hell, the flow was constantly on target, the wordplay and vocab were both exceptional, the topic was hella original, i also thought that was a pretty deep post, keep postin man, that shit was tight.

peace.....

thnx son i appreciate that

Re: when i persicute myself(god release me)
 

^^^I would recommend breaking that down in two verses and make "Is life really worth living-my everything has been taken but I'm still giving" into a hook, maybe add another line to it. It would make good audio.

Stay active fam. One+

YO THAT IS A GREAT IDEA SALLY THANK YOU