Why Me??????
 

have you ever loved a girl and thought that she loved you just as much??????
have you ever kissed a girl that could take away ya pain with just a touch??????
have you ever thought that you would stay with her forever if you were givin' the chance??????
and then one night found out...that she was fuckin' kissin' ya man!!!!!!
I'm not a jealous man...so instead of being pissed I'm wishin' him luck...
but I have a feeling that love will turn to violence when this relationship turns from a kiss to a fuck...
I'm about to be givin' it up...because I'm gettin' tired of life...
tired of strife...sometimez I feel like pluckin' out my eye with a knife...
I got a dead end job...bussin' tablez while the other employeez are pissin' on me...
I go to work like I ain't got enough problemz at home when my own fam is dissin' on me...
"Tomas...you're just a deadbeat High school drop out with no class"...
I wanna go back to sellin' weed cause bussing tablez for 5 months has got me no cash...
I remember back in the day...I used to have respect in Brooklyn...now...
I'm in Florida...as a busboy while the other employeez talk to me while lookin' down...
sometimez I feel as if I'm shit outta luck like cancer patients...
I can't get a girl...how I look as a 19 year old nigga usin' a buspass as transportation...
if you ask me how I been...I'ma say "chillin'' although shit isn't good...
all these little rich white kidz I work with just look at me as some stupid kid from the hood...
I got myself a job...with a girl that's goin' be fuckin' my friend...
every time I try to do somethin' good I end up gettin' fucked in the end...

nice drop, flow was good, vocab was pretty good, content good, multies good...was feeling what ya was saying...nice drop...had good emotion...keep dropping

sometimez I feel as if I'm shit outta luck like cancer patients...
I can't get a girl...how I look as a 19 year old nigga usin' a buspass as transportation...

stood out to me ^

I got myself a job...with a girl that's goin' be fuckin' my friend...
every time I try to do somethin' good I end up gettin' fucked in the end...

^...really summed up your whole drop, nice way to end it...

yo if you get a chance, check out my latest open mic, i could use some more feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83967

very graphic poetic and real.....
im sorry things happen like this bro!!!!!!!!
you got fam here if you need......
i liked this alot it shows a more indepth concience in yu

Ill shit man, nice multies, lots of emotion and you stuck to the

subject, if this was real shit then you show you mean it,

PROPS KOT

^^^lol...of course it's real shit...unless it was topic that was in a collab where the other cat gave me the subject...about 99% of the shit I say in openmics is real...and Brova Steve...how you get that soundclick thing in ya sig??????

A message, i can relate to

Nice read,...nice vocab,..only try to structure a bit more,..

That makes it, ..even more better to read

This was a nice drop man,...

Can u hit up^ Judgements^

^^^yeah...I tried to structure it...as you can see...for the most part...but a coupla lines were just way too long to try to fuck with...lol...I'd have to split the line up into 2 linez to make it even...and then I don't think that would look right either...lol...and Ed...it's 7 in da morning here...so I'ma get to bed...but PM me so I don't forget to hit up ya verse when I wake up...holla

Try usin less words, and make the whole thing still with the same meanin, ...its possible

U got potential, ...pm me if u down to do a collab k?.

Pz.

^^:D

a very poetic piece here man, not my kind of topics but it was a cool drop tho

keep doin ya thang man

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peep ma open mic
[url=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=84427]The Struggle[/ulrl]

^^^thanks...still uppin'

nice

thanks...but try to make ya repiez more than one word...or even one line...if a mod seez it they won't hesitate to ban you...

nice flow this is the first i have seen of u but it was great

^^^thanks...

K.O.T.... nice drop, had a great flow,
some ill and deep ass lines... I cant give you
my fav. cause all are dope as fuck... just keep
doin ya thing boi... ya know A.T. gotcha backk.
A.T.

That was pure raw emotion, you did a good job putting it to verse. It flows nicely, man. The structure is solid. There wasn't any metas or multies but damn that cause it still is a good piece. Stay active fam and look on the brighter side of shit. I'm all ears if you need me cause your my boy. One+ :)

^^^wha'cha talkin' about...of course there'z multi's...;)...can't leave home without em...lol...I don't even feel right about writin' without multi'z...

hey return the favour and check out http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4487#post834487 okay thanks

that was a nice drop man
many people are gunna be able to relate to that, I know I can for the most part

nice drop, keep it up

peace

yo man I feeling the shit out that nice flow use of multis good storyline perfect wo can't relate great peice son keep rhyming kidd you got a nice style........

that was a pretty good flow for a newb but u need to elevate but he thats okay i see potential in ur flows so keep droppin

^^^lol...I ain't a newb...this is my 4th name on RB...

yo that was tight man, i was really feelin it, i felt a semi poetic vibe, but it was still kool, i like the wordplay and vocab the most, but the content and topic were both pretty damn original, that was great shit, so keep droppin, cause that shit was blazin.

yo if u have the time can u hit this up wit an honest vote?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84864
itd be much appreciated.

peace.......

^^^thanks man...I'ma peep ya shit when I get a chance...

yog_dogg said u were good but damn i was really feelin that shit, nice vocab, and emotion all around, definitly keep those flows comin

^^^what the hell, didnt u just say he was a newb, anywho the thread i dropped for u to check out closed after i won that battle, so instead can u peep this, and post an honest vote, and oh yea thanx for lettin me join the omens wit yog_dogg, much appreciated.

anywho heres the thread.....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84790
thanx

peace.........

^^^ i know for real what is ur prob gbacd??

that was a good flow
i hope to read more of your drops
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^^^thanks...uppin'...

peep my new ish
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=85235

hi kidz...

hi kidz...

^^uhh yeah hi kidz.....