Born To Kill Vs Edicius (Topical Battle)
 

Topic: Your First love
Lines: Unlimited
Due: None drop, whenever dont take ages

Im goin real personal on this...so be prepared ^lol

Good Luck

well, you wont be getting nito it at all if youdont sign up for the elite.. go sign up, ill allow this to continue anyhow. but net time u battle here u must have been approved as being dope enuf to battle and u must be on thelist . read the sticky i made .

Checkin in...

You mean goin personal on me?

Just wanna make sure I'm up on these rules...

We're still dissing each other, right?

Just doing it topically...

Or are we writing about our own first love and just trying to come up with the better verse?

Lemme know, either way is cool.

Nah man , ...Topical no dissin , ...im writin personal shit lol^
No dissin
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^^^^yo can one of u hit this up its gettin dr
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86489

Ok, I got ya...
Real busy at work, but I'll have it in a couple or 3 hours, my friend...

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Tender was the age and fragile was the state...
Seeking out acceptance to try and kill the hate.
Needing someone's touch as my own first aid...
Trying so hard ta find her, but not ta get laid.

Cuz sex was easy back in the day...
Pussy was everywhere and it wanted ta play.
But didn't need more fun, I was having my fill...
I was missing true love, my heart was at a standstill.

Then one night I was drunk with my friends...
Saw two hot ladies drinkin round the bend.
Hooked up with one, gave her my last beer...
And the look in her eyes showed love was near.

That one fateful evening brought about many more...
Turned out she was someone I could finally adore.
She accepted me for who I was and where I'd been...
But only time and God knew I'd soon fill her life with sin.

I was like Frankenstein and she was the girl by the lake...
My love was filled with hate sendin tremors like earthquakes.
I didn't know how to handle loving such a gentle flower...
So I did what I knew, came at her with force and power.

I didn't hide jealousy, demanded my way everyday...
Took her cherished love and pretty much threw it away.
I even had her kill our baby cuz I didn't need all that shit...
Didn't wanna be a pops back then so we went to the clinic.

I suppose you can guess, that act killed things forever...
She tried to get over it, but it was more like "No, never".
And the day she packed up and moved states away...
Was the day I died inside, but really, what could I say?

Cuz I'd been such an evil thing and ruined her first love...
Cut into her self esteem like clipping the wings of a dove.
So I let her go, even though I wanted to follow and beg...
But there was nothing to say or stand on, not even one leg.

Learn a lesson, kids...I waited 11 years to find love again...
Now I take care of it and mean it with honor, like when I say 'Amen'.

Uppin for ya verse, dog...

Still waiting...

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The fragile of real love,
Senseless and savage...

.:Never thought i would feel what love is:.
Till u walked in to my life, ..
all the nights i wished u were my wife.
Once i meet that gurl so i called her lover,
Kissed her, shared my deepest thoughts,
never did it with no other..

.:Was once so beautiful:.
The things that we shared, ..
the nights that we cried, ..
the real love we both felt inside ..
Caught me, on my weak point,
filled me up wit joy....,
A gurl a little older, takin over this boy.
Companionship, love,..trust,...every aspect..
feelins,...sparklin eyes, ..and respect

.:Happiness till Darkness took over:.
Disquised as a real love wicked and volturais...
treaturous, ..and danger..slidin to together
The...darkness,..took over..
the long nights we shared,..putting down to a shredder...
Give me just this one new chance, ..
let our hearts together and dance...
Let us get back on the track..get rid of the pain...
so we can stop actin..like a uncontrolable de-railed train.
Wishin i could express me towards u ...
make u know why i did the things i do..

.:Turning, the clock back?:.
Cuz lateley ive bein wishin i had one desire,
findin back my real love,put my heart on fire.
Bring that smile back like u always use to do it,
fill me with the feelins, that i cant, ..live without
After the joy the stocks slowly begin to sway,
in a long harsh, painful dark and distand way.
Its late afternoon..i walk thru my room...
thinkin of ur beauty like a rosey bloom...
Wishin i could bring back moments, put them in freeze,
But this house just hold nuttin, just the confusin memories.

.:It wasnt meant for me?:.
So i guess i have to settle for a few breath moments,..
happiness, and..the things,
With ur picture pressed to my heart wishin u a good night,
Prayin to above wishin i could win this strange fight..
Plz lord why was this sunlight turned in to grey,
why is real love never for me, .... here to stay.

Just give me back the moments, ..i truelly desire...

Srry had some things to do ,...

Back now...

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Nice drop, my friend...

You do know it's gonna take a 1000 years for peeps to read both our long ass verses...

But, whatever...

Let's see who says what...

Peace

Uppin for votes...

Hey, man...

I just noticed on the poll that the K in my name isn't capitalized...

Will that matter?

Someone drop votes on this...

Thanks much!!!

Nice Drop By Both of You....But I think Born to KiLL won this one, his verse was not only expressing his feelings but it also told a tragic story as well....TDC u had a nice drop too, but I think B2k got u on this one, most likely cuz he's more experienced...especially in a situation like this, cuz Not only has he loved & lost, but he's also learned from mistakes....

Good read from both of u...

Vote = B2K

Hey can ya'll drop a vote on the battle in my sig?
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Wow, B2K, I didn't know that you were that good with topicals, that was a great story, and you showed Edicius up right there. Ed, I didn't like your rhyme scheme at all, B2K's was concise, and told a great story, I didn't like the last two lines, you could have come up with something a little more creative, but you told a great story.

Vote=B2K

Man...

Peeps...

Thanks much...

I appreciate the feedback and I'm glad ya liked the story...

Real life makes for better rhymes, I think.

Not that Thugz' wasn't real, I ain't sayin that.

It's just, sometimes, for certain stories...

Especially the true ones...

Complexity needs to take a backseat and let feeling and emotion do the driving.

Thanks, really...

Peace

Ok...I Been Meaning To Read This For A While Now..

This Had 2 Nice Verses In There..

Thugz...Nice Verse...Showed Alot Of Emotion...But I Didnt Like Your Rhyme Scheme...Didnt Work...But Everything Was Good...Story Was Good, Vocab Was Good...Nice Verse..

B2K...Didnt Know You To Be The Topical Head That You SHowed Yourself To Be...You Dropped A Very Good Verse Here And Story Was Very Nice...It All Flowed Really Well...Very God Verse..

Vote - B2K

wow... you impressed me alot BTK. that was a really good verse.
nice story.. but closer was off.. mad man explained perfectly...
edicus... wasnt as much feelin it.. complexity shoulda taken a backseat for this one... as BTK pointed out. not bad though, but BTK impressed me alot. he gets my vote.

i have nothing to hit up right now.. just am voting on every battle in EFL and FL for awhile. showing these newbs what needs to be done if you dont want sleeping. pz.

Please for the love of god...

Someone vote and close this if ya think it's a wrap...

Please.

Fucking pretty please...

Thanks.

Peace

B2K, I didn't know that you were that good with topicals, that was a great story, and you showed Edicius up right there. Ed urs was kinda hoppy didnt flow that well...b2k took it...1
Vote=B2K

X's Vote Polled... Battle Closed.
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