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Under Dogs Rebelion-DONT SLEEP ON IT
were takin place of many faces,some kind of revolution//
races of resolutions,makes grace mental polution// solutions of assasinations disgraces many leaders// like pagons when the bible made changes for its readers// im teachin two to learn four,how to resolve in such a violence// cuz for one im sick of poor handlin cause,keepin us silent// what kind of reign makes slayin people some kinda sport to keep em happy// theyre making slaughter out of babies,theyve barely grown out theyre nappies// we see theyre armys wearin armoure, asif theyre scared of sudden pain// courage is lost like zimbabwes farmers, or a trick by david blaine// theres little action in theyre brains,so sudden thought is our advantage// were causing hords of severe damage, by using simply designed old tactics// thoughts of victorious days are frantick,chains dissapear from mental prisons// one race mixed up makes one great kingdom,instead of sides,like off a prism// they were the greater of both sidesbut little thought ended their reign// our easy laws are here to obide that means lifes ride is much lesser lame// the game of torture has now gone, living today is a time of goodness// an easy reign is now so long, thanx to a little tribe of hoodlums..!! |
damn, that was dope bruv.
you got madd talent. your pretty sick Quote:
your complexity its earily similar to ricochet klashnekoff, great opening and it flowed propa sta. Quote:
damn, dis pretty dope, your multis is stronger through out the whole peice, i could tell you took your time with this. Quote:
nice message to people listening, no frontin bullshit here, this is rap and the flow and multis is raw Quote:
i think you came a little weak here, cudda been improved abit, seemed like you added it for the length Quote:
nice attack on the ignorant bastards, who's mind are complete butters, and have no intention elevating, nice line der Quote:
again, this is a great overall read, your flow came sick, and reminded me of ricochet klasnnekoff's message telling. wah blow you mos def got skill. overall a great read and all. keep uk alive bruv |
Thanx man.....
4 real... anyway...more thoughts on my piece....?? |
cmon ppl.....any muddafuckin feed back....??
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shit was tight go easy on my piece dawg im only a shortie. 14 yrs old seeing this shit. i could rap like u it's just i took this one easily. i could topically crush u ne day. and i aint talkin bout no battle. just comin up wit a topic, and rappin bout it. lil' challenge, lil snack for the dawg come up to the big plate
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LMFAO....
anyway...more feedback..?? |
Lmao at that yank tosser. .
Flow was strong in this, nice use of internals, would be dope if you turned it into an audio piece, vocab was pretty good in this, not over-done or anything, stayed onpoint, opener was pretty nicely worded, Quote:
^ Liked that quite a lot, pretty funny but true, lol. All in all not a bad piece. Cam Likes. :) |
thanx man...
any more feed back..?? |
more feed back...??
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cmon yo...feedback
il return tha fava |
Ayo patna.. shit was dope and on-point. Flow was crisp and made the read easy. Nice multis and vocab, had the vocab there, but didn't over do it like some dudes tend to .
were takin place of many faces,some kind of revolution// races of resolutions,makes grace mental polution// solutions of assasinations disgraces many leaders// like pagons when the bible made changes for its readers// ^^ Dope. Loved the pagons line, caught my attention fosure. I'ma have an O.M. up lata, Dear Mom and Dad, peep that when it get's up and keep droppin the dopeness bro. -Formula. |
thanx man...
anymore..?? |
holla
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feed back.
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feedback
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feedback...holla
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damnnn.... thats shyt was hotttt... flow was perfect.. good multis, vocab.... good message sent... u was on topic da hole time... my favorite piece ive seen on dis board so far... keep it up... i give dis a 10/10
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I haven't been on much lately, Haven't read any of your stuff lately, But as usual I liked this one, The complexitity was very tight with all round dopenes in every catergory, You know what needs to be done & just done it, So props
This was very sick. .thats word!! Get at me for cypher man. .We haven't for ages:) |
LOL...thanx for the 10/10 Homa....
And Pot1ent, i know what ur sayin....I aint been on Aim in fuckin AAAAAges..!!! Thanx Bro...peace |
yo that was dope as fuck, u have a lot of skill an u represent in da uk!!! lines great!!!
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yup...UK 4 life blud...2004-Year of the E Z
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i have to agree this was a pretty dope piece, some nice internals, vocab, structure wasn't bad and flow was good....yeah nice drop....keep at it dawg......peace
can you hit this open...plz.... http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=90459 |
This Was Decent.. Ight Internals..
Overall not Bad.. U could Work A Lil On Structure And Flow And Material Sum Hit These Up In Return http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php? http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php? |
you uppin' enough, just playin' man.
nice overall, but it started getting a little bit confusing towards the middle, but you finished sweet. keep postin' bro |
yo dope peace E Z. Nice wordplay Nice Meta's Perfect Flow.
Not really much else i can say about this. Its a Flawless piece. []Deace. |
yo thanx peeps...More feedback.!!
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whoa, that was sweet, the concept and flow was all on, your a light weight with mad skills homie, hit me up for a collabo if you want..peace
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shit dawg that was tight keep that shit commin aiight
Good Shit Dawg Peace (v) |
THATS A TIGHT VERSE MAN. MUR TALENT CUMIN FROM THE UK PPL. Y'ALL WATCH OUT FOR US................................................ ..................................
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THE MAIN THING THAT STOOD OUT FOR ME IN THIS PIECE WAS THE FLOW
YEAH THE VOCAB WAS GOOD AND SO WAS THE RHYME SCHEME BUT THE FLOW JUS GAVE IT A GOOD READ AND MADE ME WANNA READ MORE YOUR USE OF MULTIS WAS GOOD ALSO........ OVERALL=8....GAVE IT THIS COZ IT COULDA HAD MORE IF IT WAS LONGER |
^^ TRUE,TRUE....
I regret not makin it longer now..!! Id love to make it into an audio..!! |
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