|
[week4] Hi My Name Is... (2-1) vs Deacon (2-0) vs Baron God (2-0)
Alright this is a three way battle...good luck....
Topic: a thought, a vision due date: saturday judging ends: monday When voting, rank the competitors verses. For Example 1st: Competitior A 2nd: Competitor B 3rd: Competitor C |
cha cha checkin.....this is Deacon aka Mack the Knife hows everyone feeling tonight...(claps)...good, good...who wants to see a fist fight?
-1- |
|
I dont agree w. the guy im facing choosing the topic, that kinda gives him the advantage but its whatever. .
|
Didn't choose the topic mayne..i had some people help me with topics....are you alright? pshhhhh
-1- |
This is a partially a true dream i had....enjoy
witnessing( ~vision~) journey with me to a place chained and laced with hatred... where god and satan can switch places so fast they mix faces... For a split second and im stuck with seconds become extended.. The rooms illuminated from this new delayed combination... Now im sitting in the corner with the lights out sippin ice house... I got the rogue 45, sleeping pills and a knife out... Im sick of life now..I need the light to find a way out.. Everywhere i look is dark i feel my brain split apart.. Then my mind wanders and drifts to the thoughts of one little kid.. Who was robbed of gods gift to live that im so ready to give... blood drips from the sky down to the pages im writing on.. I look into the clouds at all the faces of my brothers who are gone... I continue writing on...ink now smeared with blood and tears.. in a form of a dream my dead brother really appears.. an said "god gave you this gift dont let the devil take it from you". I felt a crack loud as thunder my soul flinched and pained from it.. But i aint touch the gun yet i see the devils face plummet.. And the rise of Jesus Christ light shined brighter than a sunset.. The battles been won but yeah the war aint done yet... Cause everyday a war is waged for the soul of the lost prophet... realize-exceptance (~interpretation and thought of vision~) A lost soul at the crossroads pain is like picoso's i had a vision of an apostle who knew all, i forgot though moving full throttle your role model with a bottle.. takes life straight no chasing, no later, no tomorrow. See i didnt know apathy could be so patient to capture me.. i could see it coming after me never cared if it captured me. behind my back they laugh at me point fingures at my master piece. I look for my reflection i see a stranger staring back at me.. Are things as they have to be or was it contentment catastrophe. is resentment blasphemy for the role that god cast for me... Did i let destiny test and then get the best of me. for twenty something years ive seen my life as an empty street. Now all the time even im pretending me.. sometimes i pray for the end of me but i fall for no enemy... -1- |
A Thought, A Vision
The Thought: A World Without Problems The Vision: How I See It Is, The Reality The Thought What If. . I could relieve the World or problems, erase all Thats Wrong What would our Lives be Like if we could All just a Get Along, in a Perfect Bliss.. Where A Kiss can Symbol Beautiful Caress Between two humans of different ethnicity in Mutual Respect. it'd Neutrealise Arrests, the Crime Scene would Decline, See the Need for Speed, coke and Weed'd be put Behind Thieves. all Lying would Cease. . & Honesty's the Policy im Promoting, to Show 'em Ropes &, its a chance to keep ur Opinions Open, without conforming to a government, or a Political Campaign id offer u all a chance to stand up, not Listen from Backstage. a chance to Voice ur Thoughts, a Choice of sorts, my brother a chance for the Blacks and Whites to show our True Colour, in a Bloomed Wonder.. an Eden of Love, Peace & Tranquility to solve all the problems n shed Blood the Streets Did to Me. An earth Rid of Thee.. hatred, the Drama n Poverty Stopped How hard can it be to achieve the one thing everyone wants? The Vision see its an Entertaining Thought, that you can Live Respected, but the whole Image Flips 180 when you Switch Perspectives. . The fact of the matter is, that no amount of law's enough, & criminals'll co-exist, long as they can make a quick buck. yet im Feeling for your Sons. . Searching in Need of Hope, cuz that same Needle in the haystack, could be Feeding Them Coke. What if all of the Hate Risen from Racism, no Longer Existed? and now each culture combined, to fulfill each Other Wishes? Brother, listen. . i agree with there is no 'Dominant' Race, But its the Individuality that makes Us Who We Are today. and Taking that Away from us, aside from our Colours Tone, We'd all Look, Act and Think the same.. like Cultured Clones. So dont let that Take a Hold. . our seperate cultures fine, just Earths become Glaucoma.com ..a Site for Sore Eyes. Where the Poor Die, Young and Hungry, its everywhere son, cause Brenda's Got A Baby. . she cant afford to take care of. from There On there's the third world, their Starving Away, Where Food's Scarce. . so all they've to Harvest's the Pain. the Largest Display of selfeshness? within the Wealthy Seeming, their all for starting campaigns, but wont help Unhealthy Beings. & that's Imprisoned my Thought, its why i feel like giving in, in reality. . the Visions Torn, Its a wonderful world were living in. |
Shit! My bad...
Didn't realize it was a 3 way dance... Very sorry! |
^^^ you got to wait till all 3 drop their verses!
|
Jim= the vision
Hakim=the thoughts Counclor My visions are beautiful predicaments The outcomes appear somewhat equivalint I envision myself applauded by crowds... My acting career is what's shown to me now Imaginations cleanse into my grasp... Everything i dwell on rests on my lap Pen to paper, I create heart-feal poetry The ink is my thoughts...the biggest part of me... Be truthful, Especially to yourselves... The high standards you can't meet don't help It'll inflict depression upon your troublesome life Let it out, Tell me what life is really like... Back to reality...I only picutre doom I spend a quanity of my time cryin in my bedroom Every day enduring the emotional abuse... Jokes bout my speech inpediment don't run outta use Tragedy has been waiting extensively I'm potentially the most lauged at this century I'm Arabic in an area so damn racist.... The distress occurs each time i meet new faces How ya handle these problems Jim? Can you picture the world without em? Just tell me what you've got in store... Hakim, when do u think u can't take anymore? Opportunities are still within reason The good in the world knows i'm to be believed in I can take the pressure, In fact man handle it I make progression on the script w/out stutterin in it Only if i get my chance...Will i make my stride Which'll be granted i see, N' conqour the pain inside Hope? Sure...If i was in the Middle East... America does nothin but drop shit on me I've thought about returning back home... N' on the way i make some poetry n songs I'm respected there, kids even idol me... But i remain here... So the tragedy drastically begins to increase All i have is all these thoughts i posses... N' they all contain sadness n lots of dread I'm not suicidal, But soon enuf to be in a caufin Students plan to take my life... n it'll be done wit great caution Jim i'm glad you thrive for your future... Keep your head up...there's more 2 come next year Hakim I suggest you try n do what's needed Stay cool n' collected whenever racist go ya heated Take advice from Jim, He's overcome the hatred And i don't wanna see a t-shirt...wit ya face paintin |
Alright lets get the votes rolling...
-1- |
can you choose DIFFERENT colors....
please I cant read the verse |
are ya sure... cuz deacon read it fine?
if ya can't read please don't vote but if ya highlighted it...it would appear just fine... ya know? votes please props to each battler |
Decon...
the verse was a good read, flow wordplay and all were good BUT something about how you did the topic really really REALLY didnt go with me...while it was an easy read i got bored a few times...its like watching the godfather...its a great movie just not captivating (at least for me) Baron... your flow hasnt changed even though the name has...the flip on the topic was nice but didnt hit me all that much...vocab and wordplay were very good Hi My... We are all lazy so i dont want to have to highlight the screen to understand what you are saying...with that aside...how you came from 3 different views was well done, could have been much better had they each had a different style (flow, rhyme scheme...) good verse, topic approach wasnt great but not bad final vote: Baron God Hi My Name Is... Deacon |
Liked what I saw from everyone...
Thought that Deacon and Baron didn't come too originally. Can you say, John Lennon's Imagine? We all have those ponderances. Hi came up with a very unique and personal way of delivering his interpretation of the topic. Kudos for originality. Vocab needed picking up. Flow was off in some places. Ending was a little WTF? But I liked it nonetheless. Deacon came with very good flow, sick like... I was really impressed with it. I thought Baron used a couple of metas/wordplay that just didn't fit. Looked more like battle-speak, but it was ok. I guess for personal preference, I'll go with... 1)Deacon 2)Hi 3)Baron |
^ and you voted like that because of the way i said your vote was shit in the other battle, i dont give a fuck what you say, your a pussy for doing that shit dog
act your age and not your dick size, thats lame. . whatever. where i voted dissing his voting: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...72&pagenumber=1 then shortly after he Pmd me bitching about me sayiong his vote was gay lmmfao, its kids like him bringing this site down. |
hahah..live with the vote Baron how'd i guess you'd jump on your toes right when someone voted against you...now go run and get your friends to vote...yah hear!!!
-1- |
^ your just gay. i jump on my toes because he's just beinga bitch, and voting me last? pssssssssh, fuck outta here. .
voting ring crew, rep-ro-sent nigger! |
SS Vote
Ima Put It In Order Like Dis... Deacon... Baron God... Hi My Name Is... I Liked Deacons Da Best Mostly For His Idea And His Rhyme Scheme... Baron Was Great At Some Parts Buit Was Not Consistent... Hi My Name Is Had Potential In His But All The Characters Had The Same Speech And Same Ryme Scheme.... -Azaz |
Hi My Name Is Stepped Up His Game Here,
But Didn't Match Up To The SKill Of Baron and Deacon Deacon Came Great, I Loved His Rhythm, ya Rhyme's Were Great And FLow Fit Nice.. Really Liked The Piece Depth Was nice.. Baron Came Dope As Fuck.. I Really Liked This Piece It Was Really Close Compared To Baron And Deacon The Rhyme Was Great And The Story And Outlooks Were Borderline Genious. I Loved It Vote - Baron God (first) Vote - Deacon (second) Vote - Hi My Name Is (third) |
I Have To Agree..
Really Really Dope Battle Here Hi My Name Is Kinds Stood Out As The Ugly Duckling Of The Group lol But This Helped Him Upp His Game Which Was Good To See It'll Benefit For You Later Really a Battle Between Decon N' Baron. Deacon I Never Really Seen Your Stuff B4, But It You Lived Up To The Potential. Really Nice Internals And The Depth Was Superb Barons Shit Was Nothing Less Than What I thought It Would Be.. Great.. The Structure Was On Point The Depth Was There And THe Divison Of The TOpic Was Displayed Overall Better Than Deacon Vote - Baron God |
in agreement with calda
deacon..you dropped a pretty tight verse imagery was really good in places and it was a good read flowed pretty good too Baron...i think you won outta them...dealt with the topic alot better and had some dope imagery and word play etc hi my name is..not bad but wasnty on a par with the other two wasnt feeling it too much flow was choppy as well..need to reword sentences to bring about greater meaning and for more relvance ! baron 2 deacon 3 hi my name is |
hmmm....this is crazy...lets get some more votes before this is over.
-1- |
1-Baron..
2-Hi.. 3-Deacon.. Period.. |
^^^^^^...vote dont count.....seriously....i think you'd all agree...
-1- |
yup, i agree about that one, wasnt explained in the slightest so we'll disscount his vote.
|
cool....nice race we got going here.....lets get some more kickin...
-1- |
Deacon.....
aight your flow was amazing in this piece,not jus that it flowed well tho...your vocab gave your rhyme scheme some sick complextion..all in all you ridden with the subject well and gave it a touch of class...nice piece Baron God...... aight Cam once again your flow was off the hook which made the piece sik to read,the use of extensive multiples was what added to the intensive flow and overall clarity of the piece....i jus dint think you used as much complextion,but your topic following was good. Hi My Name Is....... Flow Was aightish in this battle but i came a bit unstuck in some parts.i paused a few times..if ya know wot i mean.but you brought a new dimension to this battle...not jus coz ya used different colours but for the fact you used a unique style which worked well,subject was also followed in a good way. hard to vote on this one but Vote= 1)Deacon 2)Baron God 3)Hi My Name pz |
rotflmmfao, NO that isnt fucking counting either, omg, you follow me around the board trying to beef with me and even made a thread just to try sonning me, that votes not counting
link to brixtom moron's thread blatantly hating against me - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90140 now get off my nutsack you little fucking bitch, why do kids even do this? why cant you just stay out of threads concerning me instead of following me around like some lost puppy? fuck off. vote fairly.. |
ok the take......
Deacon- After I read yours I was thinking you were easily the winner, I really enjoyed this one I cant say nothing negative about it. Baron- well I thought the guy above was the winner until I read this one this shit was flawless and i really enjoyed thetopic so I cant really critique anything here either..but u get my vote over Deacon just on a personal prefrence on the way each story was told. Hi my- well I really didnt like this one. Many good things to it but I myself just did not like it. it would have won any other match up but u werent as deep with the topic or the way u wrote down the story as the ones above.... vote- Baron....... second- Deacon....... Third- Hi my name Is..... |
baron...that was an explained vote...counts...he gave possitive feed back to all the pieces and actually did a decent job of voting...everybody isnt going to like everybody...not everyone is shallow enough to change their minds because of some stupid beef...i have beef with people but im not over riding their votes because of it...
-1- |
3-5 blah....boo
haha |
Cam calm down why du bitch bout every vote?
i explained fairly and your verse was ill but not as much as deacons... fuck sake ya such a bitch...i think your a mint writer but you aint half a ass hole sumtimes...this battle was very close to call |
alright uppin for votes...
-1- |
dont let the winner lose...hahah
anymore votes would rock... -1- |
Its tuesday midnight here where i live = /
|
a lotta bitchin... lol
|
Decon Got
1 Vote For First 5 Votes For Second No Votes For Third Baron Got 5 Votes For First No Votes For Second 1 Vote For Third Hi Got No Votes For First 1 Vote For Second 5 Votes For Third |
umm are you on crack i had 3 votes for first...hmmmm...wierd...
|
Not Countin Sum That Didn't Count
Oh Well.. Get Sum New Matches Posted Im Almost done Wit Tha Mag ! |
| All times are GMT -4. The time now is 10:42 AM. |