V.A. $lim |vs| Origin
 

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I cause a disaster when I reach for the mic//
I'll grab it backward since I'm revers'n ya life//
I'm veiwin ya record its like why even try//
I'll put 10 in this basterd but kill'em in 9//
he steals for a win like he's a thief in tha night//
of losses he's the ORIGIN so just leave this web sight//
you won't get one vote even if ya DR's are blind//
claim ya went to toke but we see ya prewrote ya lines//
he'll peep this and choke so his records not behind//
hey everyone please vote....now there's the waste of my line//



aight here let me explain a couple of things for those that dont get it

I'll put 10 in bastard but kill'em in 9
if you notice I only used 9 lines to battle him

claim ya went to toke but we see ya prewrote ya lines
in bitch slapped he said he was going to smoke some shit that he would be back in a couple of hours so I told him good luck on tha prewritin


good luck and lets get some real feedback on these verses

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Im punchin inchs to show ya martial skill is gettin slim
Pussy, runnin from virginity cus it aint hard to break ya in
Ya cold verse gets froze in wackness itl always b the same
N theres a warnin on ya record more unbalanced than ya name (avy)
My heat burns this middle weight scouldin his waist lean
revelation, this battles over like the matrix met machines (matrix revelations)
Faggot..yo hittin kids with crutchs to look for easy wins (battlin a newb)
N you sure aint gone fuck this cus my club aint lettin in (crew)
Youz spittin for the revolutin..ya battles'l always be corupt
N this bitch like midgets takin coke, his lines dont mesure up

aight yo upppin this shit for some votes 11111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111 1111111111111111111

nice verse origin

u2

uppin 1

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uppin 2

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Hit this up and then I'll come back and vote

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90067

It's getting slept on so I aint voting on anymore battles until people start hitting this up

^how can u expect someone to help ur shit no get slept on when u dont even have the decency to vote before u ask them to vote..

thats ghey shit..

vote- Origin..

reason: he actually had a punch or 2 & a few.. decent flow, a few multies threw in.. didnt really need much for the Dub..

hey eye how about pointin out the multi's you think he had............................................... ................................................

Flow: tie
Metaphores: neither
Multies: V.A. $lim
Personals: Origin
Punchlines: Origin
Structure: Origin

I'ma go with Origin on this one. No hate to either emcees though.

Ya^^Vote For My Battle But ima Do The Favor Of Voting it's on my sig
Slim~Was nice Had some multis and was an aite verse but try harder on the punches
origin~newb but was nice he murked this cat no doubt lol nice avy line.
so ya know the vote....1

thanks for votin Jay

1-0 then

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Straight....

Flow-origin
Punches-tie
Humor-Slim one line
Metas-Origin
Vocab-origin

I'd say origin...VA was tight but not enough....

Yo could yall hit this up?

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90289

Thnx!

lol votes are like busses i swear...none for a whole day..then 3 at once..good shit

thanks Hit N Nitemare..pretiated

3-0 :D

Uppin For The Last Time

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OK...

Flow-origin
Punches-tie
Originality - V.A. cuz I seen origins last line somewhere before...
Metas-origin
Vocab-origin


vote = origin

drop an honest vote here

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90294

Flow-origin
Punches-tie
pesonals-VA
Vocab-origin

Vote:Origin and fo tha record he had no multies u dumbasses

This is my input.;

Slim, you had some flow, but you lacked personals, except for the loses origin line. Cool but not enough teeth. I did detect multis in your drop, but none in Origins drop. You need to elevate in areas of complexity, vocab, imagery and meta's.

Origin, I thought you would give a beeter battle than this. I have seen your drops and can see some talent there. You just need to elevate more. You did spit a played midget line, and even though you had more personals and hints of punches, nothing landed with good impact. although your structure is simple and well basic, it id flow better. Flow is not a garenteed win, but since you mixed it up more, I think you beat slim by a small margin.

Keep elevating, you both can come harder next time. I hope that was not prewrite shit origin, cuz it was soft for a prewrite.

My vote= Origin for reasons explained above....