Don't Push Me (Dope Piece)
 

I Know It's Long.. But It's Worth Reading...


I Replied To Masta C, Skittens, And Muhthugga.


Random Thoughts

Same Shit Different Day... I Hope I Can Sustain The Rain
Tempers Flarin... And Bloods Pumpin Through My Veins
Another Comment Made.. More Names Added To My Hit List
Just More Jokes Gettin Me On The Verge Of My Wrists Slit
Thoughts Swirlin In My Mind... Anger Devours My Mind
Write Back Your Death Wish... And Leave It Signed

Yours Truly

But Whats Worse Truly... Is Nobody Understands Us
You Revealed My Secrets... For You I've Lost All Trust
As I Approached The Bus.. I Found Out I Was Left In The Dust
You Betrayed Me.. My Signs Of Life Are Fading
Never Call.. And I'm Drawn To The Conclusion You Hate Me
Always There For You.. Remember The First Time You Got Laid B?
It Was Shady.. Left Me For That Supposed Lucky Lady...
That Hates Me.. And I Bet You Can't Even Remember Her Name
Im Goin Insane, Addin Up the Reasons To Leave You In Pain
Number One... Hell I Can't Even Begin To Explain
Number Two... Your Were The Only Person That Kept Me Sane
And Kept Me Sayin.. Today Is Worth Living
Instead I Got Worse Living..
And You Brought Out The Pain That Lurks In Me
Workin Fifty.. Hours A Week.. Just Goes To Show Ya
My Life Has Peaked.. And It Was Nice To Know Ya
Or Is It? Considering Never Do You Even Visit...
Back In The Days We Was Bros... I Guess You Don't Miss It
I Was On The Edge..
Then You Pushed Me Off And Left Me Emotionally Dead
Wishin Ya Read This..
You Coulda Saved Me Now You Can't Do Shit
I'm Hoping He's Dead.. I Don't Wanna Be The One To Do It

I'm Sorry

Almost Midnight.. I Knew You'd Be Hangin Out With Friends
This Friendships Over... Because Its Too Dirty To Cleanse
Shoulda Been There.. But Tonite's The Night That...

Your Life Ends

Its 1:13.. The Darkness Swallows Me As I Slam The Door
Covered In The Shadows.. Not Knowing Whats In Store
The Moon Watches Me.. With Suspicion Quickly Arising
I Still Can't Find Out Why... I'm The Subject Of Despising
I Felt Eyes Upon Me.. So I Walked Over And Got Low
I Creeped Across The Grass.. And Opened Up My 73' Bronco
I Slowly Began To Drove, Studying My Surrounding; Eyes Peeled
Worryin So Much About Him.. I Lost Focus Behind The Wheel
Then I Began To Swerve Across The Road..
As I Attemped To Tag The Brake With My Heel
Let Out A Faint Squeal, And Flew Through The Windsheild

In Critical Condition

Landed In The Hospital... Too Many Injuries To Count
I May Be Dying.. But Still Nobody Comes Around
Thoughts Are Out Of Wack.. Mind's Too Fucked Up To Repair
As For My Friend.. He Died In The Accident... But Do I Care?


I'll Edit This With Links Soon.. But Any Feedback..?

Uppin.

Yo, i liked it, it had a lot of understanding n meaning to it. It's good when ppl write "REAL" stuff, not all this fuckin scheming shit. Nuff props Peace

Uppin This...

Uppin...

Kid u Got Skills Keep this Shit up.....if u ever wanna battle holla at me...

Cuz, this shit was deep and dope. Flow was elequent. (I'm on some literary shit) I enjoyed reading this piece, the deep meaning to it was jus crazy cuz. I'm tryna understand the beginnin a lil bit tho, was the beginning like a letter. . . Before the Your Life Ends part and all after? Everything was perfect tho man, Great drop.

-Formula.

** Feedback to my new drop, Emergency, look out for it. Greatly appreciated cuz. **

I really liked it..lots of understanding in the meaning as said above..I dig it..peace

ay man, dope verses I like the reality of it, i can almost relate.U gave alotta visuals which made me wanna keep readin not jus stop in tha middle, na'mean.Tha best sh!t's always slept on,keep writin homie.Stay ^
-Avi

Thanx For All The Replies All Of You... Upping For More.

Up...

yo u tha flow dawg nyce peice ill give ya 9/10 aiight keep it crackin Peace (v)

Up And Away... More Indepth Responses Please.. No One Line Bullshit.

OK, OK. THIS SHIT AINT BAD. GET WHAT U SAYIN BUT NOT REALLY FEELIN THE SECOND VERSE. MUST BE ME................................................

Re: Don't Push Me (Dope Piece)
 

Shit man........That Shit Was ILL As Fuck......I was captivated by the intro............vewry good and got me to stand up and pay attention.......Wordplay sharp as a fuckin....Don't Know, A very sharp thing?.Sharp......Flow, Flawless, flowed ill entirely......9.5 out of 10?....Yup Ill as fuck..........peep this

Come On Kiddos... Respond To A Nuccas Open Mic!!!

Upping.

this was a dope piece..... it has prolly the best intro i have ever read by far.... the flow was... well, flowing very well.... it never went off, so it sounded dope when i read it.... the emotion and meaning in this piece is outstanding, and it gets better and better as the song goes along... you have some talent for painting pictures in my mind, and you describe things very well... your storytelling is top notch... u might have a bit of nas in you lol....

the only thing i found wrong with the piece, is u didnt use multis.... but it didnt affect the piece too much, the emotion overshadowed the actual lyrics.... keep writing

9.5/10

check out my open mic, "Mind Theory" please... thanks

Thanx For The Feed... But I Had Crazy Multis.. Each Line Was A Multi... Not Sure What Your Talking About...

Anywayz Upping..

Somebody Nominate This!

Uppin... Niggers.

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ALrite shit
nuthin great.
but nice wordplay ////7/10

ive seen muhc better but ive seen worse..
u got sum skillz not a whole lot

Your An Idiot... I'd Rip You Up In A Battle... You Can't Even Get In LLL... And Your Wack At Battling...