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NewPort 11-07-03 02:55 PM

ClaustrophobicS Present: "Less Fortunate"
 
She Was Treated Differently,.. She Wasn't Beautiful..
She Had Greeted Misery.. Her Thoughts Were Mutual..
Mis-Treated; Ignored.. More Often Than Not..
Believe To Be Poor.. Sores Washed In Her Spot..


.. Living With What She Didn't Have..

Friends Were Seldom.. Though She Tried..
Again They'd Tell Them.. Though They Lied..
Poor And Young.. Resented By Many..
More Than Some.. Tormented By Plenty..
Presented Herself.. As Best She Could..
Bent In For Help.. W. The Mess She Was..
Wish She Could Change.. The Life She Lived..
N' Wished The Same.. For The Likes She Hid..
Fell In Love.. But It Didn't Fall Back..
Tell To Some.. Not At Like That..
Crush That Burned.. He Doesn't Care..
Love She Yearned.. Wasn't There..
Asked The Guy.. Fool, But Had To Be Sure..
Eyes That Cried.. For The School That Laughed At Her..
The Hate She Brew.. Stormed Extreme..
The Fate She Knew.. Born Difformities..
Revenge She Wanted.. She Couldn't Get..
Tends To Silence.. She Didn't Know Yet..

.. Taking A Stand ..

Searched For Materials.. Their Were Alot Of These..
Birthed A Miracle.. With Simple Commodities..
School Wouldn't Be The Same.. This She Was Sure..
Foor Wasn't Her Name.. Or Things That Were Heard..
Mind Was Set.. Love For The Man, She Got Burned Down..
Time To Let.. Him See How She Turned Out..
Faces That Stared.. Smirked Her Lips..
Places She Cared.. Didn't Hurt To Fit..
The Time Came.. The Man Stood Up n' Stopped..
His Mind Blank.. Her, Or Wasn't It Not..
Hallways Gazed.. Nervous, He Spoke..
Always Amazed.. Deserved To Know..
Confidence In his Look.. Assurance In His Eyes..
Stopped What He Took.. When He Heard Her Decline..

She Looked For Truth.. n' Left More Of It..
She Stood For Youth.. n' All Less Fortunate



Dropped On..

Word Perfect - The Ultimate Competition
Trip Marxx - Hate
Obsenity - Renegade (remix)

WORD~PERFECT 11-07-03 03:29 PM

flawless from content topic delivery and graphicness i loved it

Formula 11-07-03 04:14 PM

Dope drop man. You stayed on the topic and the story you told was ill. Honestly Don't see nothin wrong with it.

Hallways Gazed.. Nervous, He Spoke..
Always Amazed.. Deserved To Know..
Confidence In his Look.. Assurance In His Eyes..
Stopped What He Took.. When He Heard Her Decline..
^^ That was def dope.

Keep droppin cuz.

-Formula.

** Return the favor N drop some feedback to my open mic when I get it up. . . Greatly Appreciated **

NewPort 11-08-03 11:23 AM

Ight Fo Show..
Any More ?

Handcuffs 11-08-03 11:34 AM

i agree with all these fuckaz, you are just ill

pot1ent 11-08-03 11:53 AM

okay. .

Nice piece bud. .Props

The content was sick, trully off the hook, the flow was solid throughtout but I have to say it was a lil basic, but that wasn't a flaw in this piece though, but it would have made it better to have more inners & have put in multis, the idea was great. .

Pz

NewPort 11-08-03 12:36 PM

TO tHe Top

/:Ayura:\ 11-08-03 12:43 PM

Quote:
it would have made it better to have more inners & have put in multis


is po1ent blind?

Everyline had a multi in it. some tight work there, you came out siiiiiiiick.


Quote:
Hallways Gazed.. Nervous, He Spoke..
Always Amazed.. Deserved To Know..
Confidence In his Look.. Assurance In His Eyes..
Stopped What He Took.. When He Heard Her Decline..

She Looked For Truth.. n' Left More Of It..
She Stood For Youth.. n' All Less Fortunate


This ill, you mos def came out good on this peice, and the imagery was shown hard through your multis. Although i thought this was more poetry then open mic

ILLunatic 11-08-03 12:48 PM

Damn
Once Again
Hot Shit
Very Enjoyable
And Yet Very Close To Sureals Style
Auspicious Got Mad Skill I Swear To God
Props To Ya Homie
I'll Be Lookin For More

NewPort 11-08-03 01:46 PM

TO tHe Top

NewPort 11-08-03 02:16 PM

TO tHe Top

NewPort 11-08-03 03:31 PM

up

NewPort 11-08-03 04:18 PM

up

Dev 11-08-03 04:58 PM

i have to agree this was another ill drop my u, liked the concept, structure, flow vocab, it all went together tight as fuck.....yeah nice one dawg...pc

NewPort 11-08-03 05:41 PM

Thanks Bro
UP

NewPort 11-09-03 11:44 AM

To The Top

NewPort 11-09-03 02:04 PM

to the top

Ken Dawg 11-09-03 03:49 PM

Flawless I liked every part about it..had all the right stuff..peace


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