What I think of RB (really) braggin'... shout outs too
 

Funn is the illest, anti socialist/
Visualize my images, the greatest mind rapist/
Primed with bad breath, that shapes my words of hatred/
(he can’t be humanist)
Make you dread reality, the ‘realist’ immoralist/
You emcee’s got no calories, I’m a cerebral cartoonist/
Funn got no ethics, so I’m nothin’ to mess wit/
Spit scripts so hot, that I’m billed for electric/
Got all the freestylers memorizing my lectures/
But If I CATCH YOU!!!, I’d liquidate you, like lethal infections/
‘don’t move or your fucked’, coz erections are weapons/
‘my sperm ooze into your butt’ now let that be a lesson/
subliminal thoughts proceeding my criminal thoughts/
perturb the suburbs, coz that’s all I was taught/
I’d make RB an infamous name for a blood sport/
Coz you dudes opposing me,
gotta know violence be my first resort/
RB gotta be the top non-pornographic website/
But I bet the guests up in here bite the rhymes we all write/
It’s like an emcee wit no meaning to life/
Ain’t got shit to say anyway, shoot outs ain’t dat rife/
Got the ‘formula’ that makes me a ‘monstar’ on the mike/
My ‘words’ be ‘perfect’ due to wisdom an intellectual insight/
A G neglected by the unit, got ‘No Limit’ without full tanks/
Grab a gorilla, Lloyd gonna find me jack.n.banks/
Can’t Evolve, coz I’m fuckin broke, my fate is ‘born2steal/
Forced through a hole, that my dad eloped,
got the midwife screamin’ “born2kill”/
Blow up once signed, Bill wanna blame me for every murder attempt/
Saying’ “it’s not the artillery used in my war” its Funn.D’s lyrical ‘content’/

.......


Well my friends,
try to comprehend why it’s RB I choose to attend/
Go away jus to come back, an I’ll be back after ‘The End’/

Replies-

Park Life ( 1 2 ) fgee 20 74 11-12-03 04:58 PM


All It Takes A.T. 5 21 11-12-03 04:40 PM


IF I COULD THEN I WOULD (funny rap)

uppin'

it's a slap in the face... still no feed bk... come on wake up on ya bwoy Funn...



UPPIN'

This was a good peice...the shout outs were a good idea (even though LM isnt mentioned).
I like the way you repped rb with good flow and structure...vocab could be upped but thats about it.
Good peice...7/10

Finally, thanx... whoeva was in my mind at the time I jus jogged down, if dere was a list of every member I wud ave put down everyone (I encountered during my 3 months here) ... Vocab was purposly not focused on here, I reakon I'm better at topical verses...

still uppin' dis!!!

good read, i think you had some good multies and vocab, it was a unique piece, on how you showed love for rb, keep it up pz

Thanx, I'ma do another Rap like dis an mention everyone...

uppin'

Good little read and very creative shout outs.

And I was one of em!

Thanks.

Pretty much a self-prop verse...

Eh, on that part.

But you used good wordplay and vocab and didn't make it suck like alot of those kinda verses can do.

And as I said before, the shout outs were done in a pretty cool manner with nice wordplay.

Overall: 7/10

Thanx, uppin'

yo that ish was nice even tho i wasn't mentioned lol na but yo that jank was nice i agree with what everyone else has said it was a real nice piece keep dropp'n iight yo holla at cha boi and check out my "Verses" iight ~1

That was hot yo, I liked how the word's flowed with your ideas, it was a very creative piece..def. got skill man.

IT WAS AIIGHT... IT'S COOL THAT YOU SHOWED LUV TO OTHER KATS ON THE SITE... I DIDN'T GET IT AT FIRST CUZ I'M NEW HERE.... IT STILL NEEDS SOME TWEAKING TO BE HOT, THOUGH... KEEP AT IT.

For da last time... (maybe) uppin'

Not only was I mentioned, but I was also first!!

The flow of the piece was good, but it needs some work... get into the habit of counting your syllabuls when you rhyme... the vocab was very good but I got the feeling that you put them in there just to make it look good, dont add vocab if the piece does not need it

Besides that it was good...

^I didn't get mentioned :(

Oh yeah, no one knows what my names means, :p that would probably be a factor.