Corrupted Mind
 

R.I.P. Crossroads by Lulon
Truth Hurts featuring Rhythmic Tendicies by Fgee
A Lesson in Love by ROb D


BEAT= "One Day At A Time"

Throughout my life, all I've seen is misery and blood//
suicidal with my life, I dont want to live anymore cuz//
i won't be flowin with the wind, and I know that I can't win//
for fuckin with the devil and I have lost too man kin//
and I have lost too many friends, cant deal with the loss//
and some friends is turnin on me and it's pissin me off//
and in my eyes I wonder why I see red//
and why I have a mindful of demons that stay roamin in my head//
and I sit by my bed, prayin to God I will fly//
cuz my violent visions tell me that soon I will die//
what the hell am I ognna do in this world?//
consinplatas got me trippin and paranoid to lose my girl//
and it's everyday my girl is in fear for my well being//
cuz she cries at the thought of when my death clock will ring//
caught in the middle of being dda original hellspawn//
on an everlasting struggle from dusk till the dawn//
but continuously I try to keep myself from goin loca//
cuz in my eyes, I'm a mutha fuckin soulja//
and lord I hope you see me, I'm prayin to you to keep me blessed//
cuz I don't want to see the fire when I'm in the eternal rest//

uppin why yall sleepin

Nice drop, your flow was pretty nice, and you had some pretty good quotables around there. This is what I like to see from fam.Good drop Withers..

Uppin. Yo why yall sleepin

Nice flow, and some nice use of Vocab. I was really feeling this piece. niiiice man. good imagery in it

best line was the end
and lord I hope you see me, I'm prayin to you to keep me blessed//
cuz I don't want to see the fire when I'm in the eternal rest//

uppin

nice drop,
flow was good,
some nice lines,


and lord I hope you see me, I'm prayin to you to keep me blessed//
cuz I don't want to see the fire when I'm in the eternal rest//

^ dope right there.

anyway overall good piece :)

uppin

come on yall STOP SLEEPIN!!!!!!!!

damn...reall deep..good flo..8/10

uppin

It was an alright drop, you could have used a better rhyme scheme and more vocab. But you had some pretty Ill lines in there. I think it would sound alot better with that beat your talkin about, so thats straight. Its was pretty good.

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Same Shit as Rob D Said.. That Line Was Dope..
The Rest Was Above Average.. Overall Nice Drop

HIt This UP
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=93139

uppin

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93377

^ ^
Yo shit was tight dude.
good flow, kinda basic but i like the thaughts u had
some words repeated a few times, not bad but use more vocab
otherwise good shit
hit my battle if u can....

werd

fuck u and your weak ass shit.dat shit licks nuts

^^^ Hmm.....I feel anger from you my friend. I suggest you calm down. You;re to small to start somethin with me. plez just calm down.

too small dude ill fuck u up.u dont wanna fuck wit CTF.we run dis shit down here in da dirty tenn.mane u da small weak bitch who need to shut da fuck up.u kno da bizzness!!!?!

good flow

nice structure

good descriptive words (imagery)

nice closing

overall this was a pretty good drop

Return the favor, dogg:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93392

Bitch shut the fuck up and get out of my fuckin thread. Like I said your ass is to weak and whack for me. Don't think I didnt see that whack shit you posted.

thanks for the feedback. I'll hit u up

nice drop overall 7.5/10 ...keep ya head held high

uppin

stio sleepin

uppin

feedback
 

whats up play your piece flowed well, ended well, some good lines stood out great. Only thing i would work on is uppin the vocab a lil bit but this was a good piece
peace

thanx man, uppin

uppin