Suicidal
 

To: you, my lady, this is my devine sign of love.

R.I.P September 3, 2002

1 year since the mishappen
and... im still askin
why im still shedin-tears
cause we would be desending-in-the-years
you knew my fears
the hardcore thug within kicked out
and the softness released with emotion...
you gave devoition to the notion of me rappin
For that ill never forget-
I wish i was there to protect
Never again, will I neglect...
When i dream at night - i think about the Chi-West fight
the delight of blood shed
an inbred race - of such color as carmal, when i met you
I knew, this lady was for me...
But it must of been ment to be,
you came to the scene
and decided to intervene
4 years and runnin - been sonnin' so long
My lovin for you is strong
Parents hated me, but it didnt matter
The more i speak of your lucious name i get sadder
i try not to batter-myself-cuz-of-respect
But i get madder-n-madder-cuz-of-regret...
Rosa' i love you,just sayin ur name makes me fall to my knees
with ease' i'd give everything up my life included
to redue the night of September 3rd, the coldness will never fail to seduce me
Come to me, use me...
Nothing was above-the-view~
I'd like to finish it off wit a I-Love-you//

With all my heart-ill never decipher a question,
of you... I need you, R.I.P
Queen Loca - King LiL LoCo
Antonio Ramierz, Rosa Ramierz...
Missed the date...
peace

upp

it was there....good have came off harder...

but a flow, a few multies...wordplay was 4 the most part there...

overall...a good piece..

i see wat ur comin at....

very understandable..

propz 2 ya ....

good job
and good luck

thanks nigga
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Hey, can you post up who you replied to?
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Thanks Man.

Good Job writing this. I enjoyed the piece, and i really could feel the emotion you wrote with. I hope this piece helped you express whatever u had to. nice. good luck

that was a deep piece and u did it well. keep it up

Replied to: A.T, LM, Keys

upp

shit...this hit pretty hard could have hit harder but it was there the emotion in your words stood out good drop man keep it up

thanks playa

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It seemed really basic in the rhyme scheme and structure, seemed to me like it was more of an audio verse the way it was structured, content was actually decent and heart felt as i read it, good emotion, lines could use some power wording to make them hit hatrder when read and your transition has a loooooooooooong ass way to go but you've got potential

props. :)

yeah i agree this was a decent enough drop, it shows you got sumthin for it.....look'n forward to hearin more....feeling makes reads stand out...i liked it...Pc...could you hit mine plz...

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=93077

SOMEOEN LOCK THIS UP CAMARAC JUST COMPLIMENTED MY RHYME PUT IT IN ELGENDS NOW.. thanks for rep ngiga i appreciate it...

no hate or anyhitn man, this was wack ass fuck.
you have the potential and everything, but this just sucked

4/10

lol fuck u it wasnt wack

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i was feelin that. lines wee a little short though. if fixed up a little could be perfect.